Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (stringer of trout)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
23 total reviews
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Debbie,
I love to fish so this one struck me as the perfect haiku. Your syllable count is excellent and your word choices flourish with the flash of rainbow color on the scales of the fish. :)
Great job!
Kim
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi Debbie,
I love to fish so this one struck me as the perfect haiku. Your syllable count is excellent and your word choices flourish with the flash of rainbow color on the scales of the fish. :)
Great job!
Kim
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you. my friend~Debbie
Comment from Sherman541
I think that was a very cunning idea - using the rainbow trout for a rainy afternoon - stringing Trout - Great Job - do not really understand the Haiku yet, but this one seems to make some sense to me - Sarah
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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I think that was a very cunning idea - using the rainbow trout for a rainy afternoon - stringing Trout - Great Job - do not really understand the Haiku yet, but this one seems to make some sense to me - Sarah
Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Haiku are a difficult form to understand. Keep reading them and you should catch on. I appreciate the 6, my friend~Debbie
Comment from ciliverde
Wow! This is beautiful... I can just see that fisherman and his fly fishing rod flashing back and forth over the water...as rain sprinkles down. Your satori line is perfect :))
Carol
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Wow! This is beautiful... I can just see that fisherman and his fly fishing rod flashing back and forth over the water...as rain sprinkles down. Your satori line is perfect :))
Carol
Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is an excellent haiku, I love it.
The first two lines connect beautifully to create a concrete image in my mind. Very vivid too!
"fisherman's rainbow" - an excellent satori! Nothing makes the fisherman happen than a whole string of trout, just ask my brother, lol
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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This is an excellent haiku, I love it.
The first two lines connect beautifully to create a concrete image in my mind. Very vivid too!
"fisherman's rainbow" - an excellent satori! Nothing makes the fisherman happen than a whole string of trout, just ask my brother, lol
Nicely done!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah ha, Debbie! Talk about a true haiku 'ah-ha' moment, your satori is brilliantly witty, LOL. It's also very insightful as well.
Your haiku as a whole is wonderfully well done.
Just as I envision haiku poetry could be and should be, but all too often isn't.
Bravo...
~Dean
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Ah ha, Debbie! Talk about a true haiku 'ah-ha' moment, your satori is brilliantly witty, LOL. It's also very insightful as well.
Your haiku as a whole is wonderfully well done.
Just as I envision haiku poetry could be and should be, but all too often isn't.
Bravo...
~Dean
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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That's such a nice compliment. coming from you. Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Dawn Munro
I have to admit, this would certainly be MY way to spend a rainy afternoon - I LOVE fishing, and of any freshwater fish, the rainbow trout is most certainly a delicious choice. Yep, hard to let THOSE babies go...
What a great haiku! You just made my mood for the night!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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I have to admit, this would certainly be MY way to spend a rainy afternoon - I LOVE fishing, and of any freshwater fish, the rainbow trout is most certainly a delicious choice. Yep, hard to let THOSE babies go...
What a great haiku! You just made my mood for the night!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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I miss being able to get out and around water. We used to fish when my son was young. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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I miss it too, Deb - city living, although there IS fishing fairly close I'm told, in the river, and of course, there's Lake Ontario itself. I must try it sometime, but it means taking transit with gear, or else walking a LONG way, which I am just not up to anymore.
Comment from Spitfire
Clever image and play on words. Love the idea of catching and carrying a rainbow, no matter what the form. The mention of rain makes it perfect.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Clever image and play on words. Love the idea of catching and carrying a rainbow, no matter what the form. The mention of rain makes it perfect.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Debbie :)
stringer of trout 4 on a rainy afternoon-- 7 fisherman's rainbow5
= 16 syllables... good job
=great connection on line 1 and 2
=the satori is very clever and insightful ... well done!
=the presentation is breathtaking... I love it!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hello Debbie :)
stringer of trout 4 on a rainy afternoon-- 7 fisherman's rainbow5
= 16 syllables... good job
=great connection on line 1 and 2
=the satori is very clever and insightful ... well done!
=the presentation is breathtaking... I love it!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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That's such a nice compliment, coming from you. Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from closetpoetjester
What a clever poem and I am in awe of the colours of some fish particularly the one you feature here front row centre.
There is something about the rainbow spectrum that is quite magical and when a fishes scales sparkle in the sunlight this magic happens. Your poem incorporates not only the thrill of the catch, but the colours adorned. Some great fish fashion! LOL
Cheers P
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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What a clever poem and I am in awe of the colours of some fish particularly the one you feature here front row centre.
There is something about the rainbow spectrum that is quite magical and when a fishes scales sparkle in the sunlight this magic happens. Your poem incorporates not only the thrill of the catch, but the colours adorned. Some great fish fashion! LOL
Cheers P
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Irish Rain
This is wonderful. I just love that satori...'fisherman's rainbow'....and the picture is stunning, a lovely presentation! You are a whiz at these!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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This is wonderful. I just love that satori...'fisherman's rainbow'....and the picture is stunning, a lovely presentation! You are a whiz at these!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you, my friend. Congrats on your latest win~Debbie
