Changing of the Guard
Poetry Potlatch Challenge-Prose Poetry21 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written prose poem. You seem to travel quite a bit in your dreams. Out of many girls, the one who asks you to open the jar is the one who stole your heart.
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A very well-written prose poem. You seem to travel quite a bit in your dreams. Out of many girls, the one who asks you to open the jar is the one who stole your heart.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
Comment from c_lucas
What will tomorrow bring? We will just have to wait and see. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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What will tomorrow bring? We will just have to wait and see. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
A fine poem about the Women's March on Washington after Trump's Inauguration. I enjoyed your imagery and energy:
"Figures in a fog. Swords and sticks and exploding things. Convictions and convincing hand in hand as mankind scurries along the woodwork of the landscape drawing lines and planting flags."
I can see and feel this.
This line resonated with me politically and poetically, "Kingdoms are garish things, loud and without flourish."
I found enchanting your closing image of a girl handing you a jar to open. This image is the reverse of Pandora's Box. Voices trill in brilliant song as a billion women smile.
Thank you for sharing your Shangri La vision.
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A fine poem about the Women's March on Washington after Trump's Inauguration. I enjoyed your imagery and energy:
"Figures in a fog. Swords and sticks and exploding things. Convictions and convincing hand in hand as mankind scurries along the woodwork of the landscape drawing lines and planting flags."
I can see and feel this.
This line resonated with me politically and poetically, "Kingdoms are garish things, loud and without flourish."
I found enchanting your closing image of a girl handing you a jar to open. This image is the reverse of Pandora's Box. Voices trill in brilliant song as a billion women smile.
Thank you for sharing your Shangri La vision.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
Comment from frierajac
I am wondering if the subject here is actually a dream or an imagined response to the political climate of Inauguration Day?It has a feeling of the vastness of humanity
and is still entertaining with the veils and referring to Kings, and off to Shangra La...
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I am wondering if the subject here is actually a dream or an imagined response to the political climate of Inauguration Day?It has a feeling of the vastness of humanity
and is still entertaining with the veils and referring to Kings, and off to Shangra La...
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
I am thrilled you were able to write about this in a timeless way. It has plenty of worth without the marches in mind. Besutiful, Michael. NG
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I am thrilled you were able to write about this in a timeless way. It has plenty of worth without the marches in mind. Besutiful, Michael. NG
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
Figures in a fog. Swords and sticks and exploding things. .... I don't know why but this phrase made me think of .... ''Snips and snails, and puppy dogs tails, That's what little boys are made of. What are little girls made of? Sugar and spice and all things nice, That's what little girls are made of."
I like how you used blue and pink for male and female.
Figures in a fog, is obviously about the riots back east on inauguration day. Today I participated on a peaceful demostration at the State Capitol. I painted a red sign with a swastika and the words ''never again'' also a quote.. "He who doesn't understand history is doomed to repeat it." ... Those who don't learn, or can't remember it, are doomed to repeat it." ...
Germany in the 1930s lived to regret that they directly helped a sociopath like Hitler harm millions of people. We got us another hitler, only ours doesn't have a brain.
A news reporter took a picture of my sign and asked for my name. I may be on the news tonight. hahaha
I love it, Micheal.
Gypsy
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Hello, Michael,
Figures in a fog. Swords and sticks and exploding things. .... I don't know why but this phrase made me think of .... ''Snips and snails, and puppy dogs tails, That's what little boys are made of. What are little girls made of? Sugar and spice and all things nice, That's what little girls are made of."
I like how you used blue and pink for male and female.
Figures in a fog, is obviously about the riots back east on inauguration day. Today I participated on a peaceful demostration at the State Capitol. I painted a red sign with a swastika and the words ''never again'' also a quote.. "He who doesn't understand history is doomed to repeat it." ... Those who don't learn, or can't remember it, are doomed to repeat it." ...
Germany in the 1930s lived to regret that they directly helped a sociopath like Hitler harm millions of people. We got us another hitler, only ours doesn't have a brain.
A news reporter took a picture of my sign and asked for my name. I may be on the news tonight. hahaha
I love it, Micheal.
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
Comment from ciliverde
This is fabulous, Mikey. I'm so glad I decided to check out the potlatch this week! So many fantastic entries, not the least of which is yours. I started to copy favorite lines, but where to start and where to end? The bit about greasy beards was great, rather Bacchanalian...the grease and grapes. The last stanza though, really stopped me in my tracks - the billion women winking. So much said in that line, truly :)))
Carol
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This is fabulous, Mikey. I'm so glad I decided to check out the potlatch this week! So many fantastic entries, not the least of which is yours. I started to copy favorite lines, but where to start and where to end? The bit about greasy beards was great, rather Bacchanalian...the grease and grapes. The last stanza though, really stopped me in my tracks - the billion women winking. So much said in that line, truly :)))
Carol
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Plenty of great alliteration in things makes for great descriptions mikey and your phrasing gives a great poetic flow to your Prose Poem..And of course we all think of D T with your photo and title but your end twist leaves me with a smile. Enjoyed,
cheers,
valda
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Plenty of great alliteration in things makes for great descriptions mikey and your phrasing gives a great poetic flow to your Prose Poem..And of course we all think of D T with your photo and title but your end twist leaves me with a smile. Enjoyed,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow excellently done. I will put mine in after midnight, I posted two for contests that closed at 1 am. You know me...challenges. I want to try this one. I love the old type flow of this kind and have reviewed a few that are absolutely wonderful.
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Wow excellently done. I will put mine in after midnight, I posted two for contests that closed at 1 am. You know me...challenges. I want to try this one. I love the old type flow of this kind and have reviewed a few that are absolutely wonderful.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
Beautiful prose poem, Mav. Yes the voices of the 2.5 million women from around the world were heard today and let us hope they are listened to and not summarily dismissed as the spoils of politics. That would be a huge mistake. Some excellent lines, for example Flags bear no fruit, nor do spore spring from barren land.
And an amazing ending. The loveliest girl in the world hands you a jar. In that simple act of caring love and kindness from a man a billion women smile.
I just love this one and I'm thinking I very much love this prose poetry form.
Exceptional potlatch offering but you know the rules. Weeeeeee. Welcome to Shangri La.
Ange
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Beautiful prose poem, Mav. Yes the voices of the 2.5 million women from around the world were heard today and let us hope they are listened to and not summarily dismissed as the spoils of politics. That would be a huge mistake. Some excellent lines, for example Flags bear no fruit, nor do spore spring from barren land.
And an amazing ending. The loveliest girl in the world hands you a jar. In that simple act of caring love and kindness from a man a billion women smile.
I just love this one and I'm thinking I very much love this prose poetry form.
Exceptional potlatch offering but you know the rules. Weeeeeee. Welcome to Shangri La.
Ange
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
