Tanka Waka
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "tanka (your scent lingers here)"A collection of Japanese short poetry
5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This winter tanka, Your Scent Lingers Here, has the proper set up and sets the scene for a departed love who may be on the way off or back, but is definitely missed. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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This winter tanka, Your Scent Lingers Here, has the proper set up and sets the scene for a departed love who may be on the way off or back, but is definitely missed. Nice.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend.
Comment from judester
Bravo you. This creates such a melancholy sadness as the chill of lost love sets in. The last line lets us know the loneliness is just settling in. cheers, judester
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Bravo you. This creates such a melancholy sadness as the chill of lost love sets in. The last line lets us know the loneliness is just settling in. cheers, judester
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Judy girl.
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a very romantic and dreamy tanka. A world apart from someone so loved and longed for. Very, very lovely. Good luck in the contest :-))
Reads beautifully forwards and backwards!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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This is a very romantic and dreamy tanka. A world apart from someone so loved and longed for. Very, very lovely. Good luck in the contest :-))
Reads beautifully forwards and backwards!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you, sweetie pie :)
Gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
This is a cool tanka. I like the repeated image of the sprinkling - the daydreams on the bed, and the footprints in the snow. Very nice. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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This is a cool tanka. I like the repeated image of the sprinkling - the daydreams on the bed, and the footprints in the snow. Very nice. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you sweetie pie :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
O-h-h-h-hhhhhh... I really liked this, Anonymous Poet.
There is a warmth implied here in your stunning tanka, but a lingering sadness as well. I read recently the the mark of a truly great tanka is completely dependent upon well-expressed simile and metaphorical imagery, and an amazing "pivot" line. It should read just as eloquently in reverse as it reads normally.
Your tanka evokes great sadness yet hope still lingers; like the scent of honeysuckle lingers sweetly on a warm summer's day after a tumultuous storm.
I'll be watching for THIS one when it hits the booth.
Best of luck to you, a very strong entry indeed.
I deeply apologize for my lack of sixes. This deserves nothing less...
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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O-h-h-h-hhhhhh... I really liked this, Anonymous Poet.
There is a warmth implied here in your stunning tanka, but a lingering sadness as well. I read recently the the mark of a truly great tanka is completely dependent upon well-expressed simile and metaphorical imagery, and an amazing "pivot" line. It should read just as eloquently in reverse as it reads normally.
Your tanka evokes great sadness yet hope still lingers; like the scent of honeysuckle lingers sweetly on a warm summer's day after a tumultuous storm.
I'll be watching for THIS one when it hits the booth.
Best of luck to you, a very strong entry indeed.
I deeply apologize for my lack of sixes. This deserves nothing less...
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Dean, I am very grateful for your beautiful review, ten stars, and one six. Wow! never had that happened before. LoL
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Well, they say there's a first time for everything.
Consider this it.
My pleasure. :)
