Haiku(sun's fiery red orb)
Haiku14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Sun's Fiery Red Orb, uses seventeen syllables to open the horizon up for sunset viewing. Heavy on the S makes this poem more interesting. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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This haiku, Sun's Fiery Red Orb, uses seventeen syllables to open the horizon up for sunset viewing. Heavy on the S makes this poem more interesting. Nice.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
very nice imagery produced in this haiku. the resonance of the 's' is very well used throughout each line as well.
Very nice
best of luck
GMG
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Hi there,
very nice imagery produced in this haiku. the resonance of the 's' is very well used throughout each line as well.
Very nice
best of luck
GMG
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading and the critique zanya
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent picture and presentation in your lovely haiku with good use of alliteration for a smooth read. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Excellent picture and presentation in your lovely haiku with good use of alliteration for a smooth read. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
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And thanks for reading zanya
Comment from robyn corum
You're painting a delicious picture here with your minimal words, Mr./Mrs. Poet. I really enjoyed this poem! Love the use of the word 'fiery', adds a lot to the poem! Thnaks and good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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You're painting a delicious picture here with your minimal words, Mr./Mrs. Poet. I really enjoyed this poem! Love the use of the word 'fiery', adds a lot to the poem! Thnaks and good luck!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks for this accolade zanya
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Nice haiku and I like the presesentation. The phrase is well connected, the satori is a beautiful observation. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Hello my friend
Nice haiku and I like the presesentation. The phrase is well connected, the satori is a beautiful observation. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks for this accolade zanya
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have done well with this haiku it is full of imagery enhanced by the picture I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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Yes you have done well with this haiku it is full of imagery enhanced by the picture I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from lyenochka
Great sunset description. I definitely hear the alliteration of the repeated 's' sounds throughout. I like the "tinted hues" and the contrast of colors in the backdrop of winter which usually bleak.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Great sunset description. I definitely hear the alliteration of the repeated 's' sounds throughout. I like the "tinted hues" and the contrast of colors in the backdrop of winter which usually bleak.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for this interesting critique zanya
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh, how pretty...'wintry sunset scene'..a lovely satori, and beautiful picture to match. Best of luck in this haiku contest, blessings...
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Oh, how pretty...'wintry sunset scene'..a lovely satori, and beautiful picture to match. Best of luck in this haiku contest, blessings...
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
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Delighted with this critique zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Winter sunsets tantalise us with warmth on cold winter days and your poem has warmed me with its sunny hues, good luck with he competition, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Winter sunsets tantalise us with warmth on cold winter days and your poem has warmed me with its sunny hues, good luck with he competition, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
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Glad you enjoyed reading it ! Thanks for the critique zanya
Comment from winnona
well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. The photo is beautiful and completes your haiku well. Your poem captured the feeling of the winter sunset well.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. The photo is beautiful and completes your haiku well. Your poem captured the feeling of the winter sunset well.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
