Tanka Waka
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Tanka (The Night Closes In)"A collection of Japanese short poetry
27 total reviews
Comment from Unspoken94
When I read your work, I read it enough to memorize
it and then close my eyes and if you provide music
then I recite the piece over and over. This one is no
exception. Wonderful. -Bill
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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When I read your work, I read it enough to memorize
it and then close my eyes and if you provide music
then I recite the piece over and over. This one is no
exception. Wonderful. -Bill
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Bill, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
gypsy hugs
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Gypsy, this is really good. I wish I had a six to give you here for this exceptional tanka which shows you to be a master of the craft. You paint a picture of a Geisha waiting in her bedchamber for her lover, intoxicated by cherry blossoms, and bound to your fantasies." Poem is sensual without being pornographic. Music and woodblock picture are an added plus as they enhance your presentation.
Thank you for sharing.
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Wow, Gypsy, this is really good. I wish I had a six to give you here for this exceptional tanka which shows you to be a master of the craft. You paint a picture of a Geisha waiting in her bedchamber for her lover, intoxicated by cherry blossoms, and bound to your fantasies." Poem is sensual without being pornographic. Music and woodblock picture are an added plus as they enhance your presentation.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Andre, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
gypsy hugs
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello GRB - this is a very good tanka in perfect form. Your subject matter is beautiful, well worded. Lovely picture and an all round perfect entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
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Hello GRB - this is a very good tanka in perfect form. Your subject matter is beautiful, well worded. Lovely picture and an all round perfect entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
Comment from krys123
Overwhelmed,, Gypsy;
-I am completely overwhelmed by your structural composition of this wonderfully and beautifully written Tanka. Your completely organizational skills of creating the first two in the last two grammatically connected lines that dramatically composed of an imagery that is descriptive and and expressive both demonstratively and definitively. This imagery is a reality of an emotional romantic spiritual setting about the mind and the soul connecting is one. The soft sensual feeling of this writing is as though the angels has blessed this communion. The pivot line pulls together the first two in the last two grammatically connected lines, together.
-Good luck in the contest and God bless and take care and made peace spiritually intertwined with your soul and mind.
Alex
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Overwhelmed,, Gypsy;
-I am completely overwhelmed by your structural composition of this wonderfully and beautifully written Tanka. Your completely organizational skills of creating the first two in the last two grammatically connected lines that dramatically composed of an imagery that is descriptive and and expressive both demonstratively and definitively. This imagery is a reality of an emotional romantic spiritual setting about the mind and the soul connecting is one. The soft sensual feeling of this writing is as though the angels has blessed this communion. The pivot line pulls together the first two in the last two grammatically connected lines, together.
-Good luck in the contest and God bless and take care and made peace spiritually intertwined with your soul and mind.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Alex, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :) Thank you and God bless you too, my friend. Thank you for the six stars ... they are so pretty :)
gypsy
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You are so welcome, Gypsy;
Alex
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is really rather lovely, Gypsy-
your choice of words and the
beautiful artwork -
a pleasure to read.
Margaret
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This is really rather lovely, Gypsy-
your choice of words and the
beautiful artwork -
a pleasure to read.
Margaret
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
Comment from winnona
Beautifully written Tanka contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. well done.
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Beautifully written Tanka contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. well done.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
Comment from William Ross
This is great, a very well formed tanka, has that haiku feel all through this. This will do well. good luck on this and have a wonderful day
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This is great, a very well formed tanka, has that haiku feel all through this. This will do well. good luck on this and have a wonderful day
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dean Kuch
I feel as if I am unworthy to read such majesty upon a written page--the beauty is so intensely bright, I fear I will be blinded by passion.
YOU, Kyoshi jipushi, have penned a true tanka masterpiece here.
Congratulations! (Sorry...no sixes!)
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I feel as if I am unworthy to read such majesty upon a written page--the beauty is so intensely bright, I fear I will be blinded by passion.
YOU, Kyoshi jipushi, have penned a true tanka masterpiece here.
Congratulations! (Sorry...no sixes!)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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LoL you are funny, Dean, your signature gif reminds me of wayne's world
Thank you very much. :)
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Only more Asian, LOL.
Sure thing, Gypsy. Anytime...
~Dean :)
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy, Now this is Tanka I can understand and appreciate. Your meaning is very sensual and clear and I can see the Haiku in the first three lines flowed by the following 2 that sum this up nicely. Really beautiful deserves a six but all out. I will keep this as a great Tanka an example (music very nice too) Thanks and look forward to class Cheers Christine
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Hi Gypsy, Now this is Tanka I can understand and appreciate. Your meaning is very sensual and clear and I can see the Haiku in the first three lines flowed by the following 2 that sum this up nicely. Really beautiful deserves a six but all out. I will keep this as a great Tanka an example (music very nice too) Thanks and look forward to class Cheers Christine
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kind words and excellent review. :)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem and I really enjoyed reading it.
I never write poems for a contest entry, but years ago I did.
I love reading your poetry as you are so good at writing them.
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem and I really enjoyed reading it.
I never write poems for a contest entry, but years ago I did.
I love reading your poetry as you are so good at writing them.
Kat
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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thank you,
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You're very welcome too. Kat
