Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (nameless colors)*"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
57 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A well-written haiku challenge poem. The subject of fish is a hard one for me to come up with what I want to say. You have done very well with the subject. Well done
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
A well-written haiku challenge poem. The subject of fish is a hard one for me to come up with what I want to say. You have done very well with the subject. Well done
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Winnona. Best wishes to you.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from l.raven
HI Karyn, I love the wording in this one...rainbow in the dark...so very true....and they find new species all the time...I love your poem sweet girl...and I love your picture...very nicely written you...and so good to see you...love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
HI Karyn, I love the wording in this one...rainbow in the dark...so very true....and they find new species all the time...I love your poem sweet girl...and I love your picture...very nicely written you...and so good to see you...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Hi there, Linda! Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Linda. Thanks and hope you're well.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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you are so welcome Karyn...yes I am well...and hope and pray you are too...smiling back at you...Love xxoo Linda
Comment from bertranclan
Bravo for a great haiku about lovely fish in the ocean. There are so many colorful things down there that we don't get to see. "Rainbow in the dark" indeed! Love it!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
Bravo for a great haiku about lovely fish in the ocean. There are so many colorful things down there that we don't get to see. "Rainbow in the dark" indeed! Love it!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, bertranclan. I'm so pleased you understood the nameless colors because we may never get to see them. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Ogden
Another terrific poem! Beautiful illustration, so well described.
I do have a suggestion. The lily need no gilding, but consider "wasted colors."
(Or not.)
Don
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
Another terrific poem! Beautiful illustration, so well described.
I do have a suggestion. The lily need no gilding, but consider "wasted colors."
(Or not.)
Don
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Don. Thanks, too, for your suggestions. I used nameless colors because there are fish we never get to see so deep in the ocean.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from rspoet
You've written a fine haiku
with excellent concrete imagery in the colors/ocean
with good grammatical connection in present tense
A solid "reflective" satori line
Excellent picture to match
Nicely done
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
You've written a fine haiku
with excellent concrete imagery in the colors/ocean
with good grammatical connection in present tense
A solid "reflective" satori line
Excellent picture to match
Nicely done
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, rapper. I'm delighted you enjoyed the satori..
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Susanjohn
I want that fish tank!!!! and all those rainbows in the dark!!!...except I would probably over feed them...and then what!!!....I'll stick with your little haiku!!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
I want that fish tank!!!! and all those rainbows in the dark!!!...except I would probably over feed them...and then what!!!....I'll stick with your little haiku!!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Susan.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Pantygynt
Some time ago I wrote a poem about a rainbow, not posted here viewed from the other side that came to the conclusion that it must be black. this haiku should be its companion -- rainbow in the dark there are some fantastic contradictions here when you think about it. a worthy addition to the book.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
Some time ago I wrote a poem about a rainbow, not posted here viewed from the other side that came to the conclusion that it must be black. this haiku should be its companion -- rainbow in the dark there are some fantastic contradictions here when you think about it. a worthy addition to the book.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Pantygynt, for your kind review and comments for this haiku. It just fascinates me that there are fish so deep in the ocean, we may never see them, and never know or see their colors. But still, they must create a colorful rainbow of fish swimming around happily in the dark. Thanks.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
One os the first things I did when I moved to Florida was take up scuba diving. It's a different world underwater. The colors are amazing. Like nothing you will ever see on land.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
One os the first things I did when I moved to Florida was take up scuba diving. It's a different world underwater. The colors are amazing. Like nothing you will ever see on land.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Thomas. I'd love to try scuba some day.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes, a rainbow in the dark, what a clever thought and if only we could see under the ocean? Clever words forming an underwater rainbow, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
Yes, a rainbow in the dark, what a clever thought and if only we could see under the ocean? Clever words forming an underwater rainbow, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts regarding my haiku. I appreciate your comments and encouraging response, Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from rama devi
LOVE that satori line. Superb work. Publishable, in fact. You should submit it! The imagery, word economy and phonetics are all outstanding. Consonance and alliteration of S plus consonance of L and C-K make it sounds great read aloud 9not an easy achievement in short forms). My favorite is the AHA satori line. Brilliant and imaginative. Inspiring message too. The descriptive lines are superb as well...really highlight the dark by showing note telling:
nameless colors
swim the sunless ocean depths
Kudos!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
LOVE that satori line. Superb work. Publishable, in fact. You should submit it! The imagery, word economy and phonetics are all outstanding. Consonance and alliteration of S plus consonance of L and C-K make it sounds great read aloud 9not an easy achievement in short forms). My favorite is the AHA satori line. Brilliant and imaginative. Inspiring message too. The descriptive lines are superb as well...really highlight the dark by showing note telling:
nameless colors
swim the sunless ocean depths
Kudos!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Wow! Thank you so much, rd, for thinking my haiku was worthy of one of your treasured sixth stars. I truly appreciate your wonderful review, generous rating, and kind words. I'm so pleased you liked the satori, and thanks for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)