Comment from artemis53

Excellent

Yes. I can relate to this one but I'm still pretty hot about the whole ordeal. You know, it's not like I'm asking for the world. In fact, I'm paying THEM to put me through the torture!

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017

Thank you for the excellent review and your interesting comments. Frustrations can be torture, I agree. They can get you pretty pissed off. Especially when your dealing with emotionless machines who are caught up in their logic and can't relate to you sympatheticly at all estory

Comment from Luna

Excellent

This reminds me of an old movie -- 2001. It was about a computer who ended up hijacking the ship...his name was Hal. It was out at about the same time as A Clockwork Orange.

I enjoyed reading your poem aloud, estory. You are a very talented writer.

light and love,

jeni

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017

Thanks for the five star review and your interesting comments. I never read it out loud, but it was intended primarily as a musical exersize. interesting comparisons with 2001 and clockwork orange, both of which I have seen, and probably influenced me in my ideas about machines. this is really about the frustrations in human interaction with them, and it can get scary, especially when the machines are in control. estory

Comment from harriswilliam

Good

This is without any doubt different, I've went through six stories to final get to a poem and I hope the ratio of stories to poem don't continue.
I wish you well as poet.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for you good review. I dare to be different, so I am glad you said the poem was different. I hope the rest of your comment means you want to read more poetry. I tried to create music out of language in this poem in a very new method, using repeating patterns of sound. my intention was to mimick the frustration you feel in dealing with a machine that is stuck in its logic. estory

reply by harriswilliam on 19-Jan-2017

You're welcome and I look forward to reading more poetry.

Comment from Sixty70

Excellent

I think you were successful at creating the series of sounds that generate the reader's internal frustration! I feel this way often, then have to get out to my garden to reboot. So to speak. Creative way to express an increasingly common problem in modern life.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for your great review and your encouraging comments. it seems I managed to convey that sense of frustration here that I wanted to capture. I enjoy trying new forms, new techniques, and this was fun to write once I had the formula for the poem in place. estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I loved this poem, the frustration is riddled throughout all these words, as computers have no emotion and it's us humans that have the need to throw the machine to the wall! Great poem, I certainly identified with it. Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for your excellent review and your encouraging comments. I guess I conveyed that sense of frustration we sometimes feel in dealing with machines. especially when they are in control. it can be scary. I like to experiment and create new forms and formulas for making music in language, try to be more relevant to our machine world. estory

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

FRUSTRATING!!! How I hate machines!! (except my computer...where I am extremely limited to to lack of knowledge). I don't even use a cellphone, and didn't get a microwave til a couple years ago. Modern technology is good in so many areas...but I miss the human touch! Excellent! Blessings...

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for the great review and your comments. you are indeed a kindred spirit. I am not a fan of machines- although computers and the internet lets us share our poetry, in greater circles, I suppose. you got the feeling I was trying to create here. the poem was fun to write once I had the formula for the language In place estory

reply by Irish Rain on 18-Jan-2017

You're most welcome!!!

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I like the way that you expressed this poem, frankly, I relate much better to machines and computers lately. Well written and imaginative.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for your excellent review and your interesting comments. you are the only one so far who empathizes with the machines, and your viewpoint was interesting. glad you found it imaginative. I try to be different, try to create new forms and methods for making music in language, hopefully more relevant to our contemporary experience estory

Comment from sweetthanesue

Excellent

yes I can relate ...born from an era of no computer was frightened of them mainly thinking I'd crash them and be up for big bucks to repair...thanks to Grandson have now been somewhat educated ..he was my teacher at age 8...who says you cant teach an old dog new tricks..enjoyed the read

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for the great review and your interesting comments. yes, the younger generation is the master of these machines. I don't know for better or worse. I am not a fan of all these machines, they take the human out of the world, they dehumanize us, and it can be scary. this poem was fun to write once I had the formula for it in place estory

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. It looks like you have done a good job of challenging yourself with this writing. We all get into battles with our machines once in a while. My computer shows me who is boss now and then, and it's not me. LOL Good work.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for the great review and your encouraging remarks. the machines certainly do show us whose boss. they can be frustrating to deal with. this was the sense I was trying to create with this experiment in form. a frustrating conversation with a machine estory