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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "haiku (ghastly Goblin Shark)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Pantygynt
I am not sure whether to review the poem, with the two groansome puns in in the satori, or the notes and video. Two puns? I thought so. There's the gill-ty of course but what about the con in conscience?
A very clever video but those teeth? They resemble the mouthpiece of the angler fish (also shown in the video).
We haven't had Valentine's day yet and you are rehearsing for April Fools Day... Aren't you?
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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I am not sure whether to review the poem, with the two groansome puns in in the satori, or the notes and video. Two puns? I thought so. There's the gill-ty of course but what about the con in conscience?
A very clever video but those teeth? They resemble the mouthpiece of the angler fish (also shown in the video).
We haven't had Valentine's day yet and you are rehearsing for April Fools Day... Aren't you?
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Hahaha, yes, I am.
How did you guess?
Thanks for reading, Jim.
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It sort of reminded me of someone I knew.
Comment from robyn corum
Only you would find this critter swimming about in the murky depths. *smile*. Bite I enjoyed your haiku and got a smile from it. Thanks!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Only you would find this critter swimming about in the murky depths. *smile*. Bite I enjoyed your haiku and got a smile from it. Thanks!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Well, then I did exactly what I set out to do, sixes be dogged.
I made someone smile.
Thanks for reading, Robyn.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, this has to be the ugliest shark I've ever seen. Thanks for sharing another fun and entertaining poem and picture combination. I don't think that in all the years I've ever said anything negative to you, and I'm still not saying anything negative about your submission, but the damn music was so loud that I couldn't hear what the chic on the video was saying about the shark. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Wow, this has to be the ugliest shark I've ever seen. Thanks for sharing another fun and entertaining poem and picture combination. I don't think that in all the years I've ever said anything negative to you, and I'm still not saying anything negative about your submission, but the damn music was so loud that I couldn't hear what the chic on the video was saying about the shark. :-)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Oh, that, LOL.
Yeah, it's best if you wait unti the JAWS theme is over to listen to the video.
Maybe I'll jst get rid of the themed from JAWS altogether, whaddaya think?
Yes, I'll do that...
Thanks for reading, Ric, and for the feedback as well.
Much obliged.
~Dean :)
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No, don't get rid of the theme, it's a great addition. It just keeps seemingly getting louder and louder right when the explanations are coming. Maybe softening it after a short crescendo, so the reader can enjoy the poem and the video. :-)
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Unfortunately there's no way to regulate the sound, Ric.
I'll see what I can do...
~Dean
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Done...
Comment from MizKat
Hi Dean,
You sure wrote a nice poem about the horrible looking Goblin Shark and also explained all about it for people like me.
I enjoyed reading it I'm very pleased that you told everything about this type of shark.
I've never heard about it before or have seen a picture of it before.
Thanks my friend, Kat
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Hi Dean,
You sure wrote a nice poem about the horrible looking Goblin Shark and also explained all about it for people like me.
I enjoyed reading it I'm very pleased that you told everything about this type of shark.
I've never heard about it before or have seen a picture of it before.
Thanks my friend, Kat
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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It's very rare to catch a glimpse of one, MizKat.
I just pray I never do too closely!
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
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I always like reading your work, Dean.
Kat
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Thanks. I enjoy reading yours too.
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I'm sure glad that you like my poetry too, Dean. Thank you very much. Kat
Comment from mbagby23
This reminds me of when my son and I watch ocean's monsters. Their were some ugly and scracy fishes that live deep within the ocean. I haven't seen this one.
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This reminds me of when my son and I watch ocean's monsters. Their were some ugly and scracy fishes that live deep within the ocean. I haven't seen this one.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Hah, well... now ya have!
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
O.M.G what an ugly beast. I don't like any
kind of shark. My youngest son went down
in a cage twice in Cape Town to watch the
sharks - told me AFTER the event of cours.e
gill-ty - very clever, Dean - you're on top form.
Margaret
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O.M.G what an ugly beast. I don't like any
kind of shark. My youngest son went down
in a cage twice in Cape Town to watch the
sharks - told me AFTER the event of cours.e
gill-ty - very clever, Dean - you're on top form.
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Just me bein' me, Margaret. I guess that's allowed in haiku.
Thanks for reading...
~Dean
Comment from Mark Valentine
More importantly, I believe the Sharknado! movies classify sharks as fish, so...issue settled as far as I'm concerned. And, as far as I'm concerned this is another typical Dean classic.
Alliteration? - check
Pun? -check
Great graphics? - check
Horror? - check and mate.
Well done.
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More importantly, I believe the Sharknado! movies classify sharks as fish, so...issue settled as far as I'm concerned. And, as far as I'm concerned this is another typical Dean classic.
Alliteration? - check
Pun? -check
Great graphics? - check
Horror? - check and mate.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Thank you for reading, Mark.
Steer clear of the water!
~Dean
Comment from Bill Schott
Another one-of-a-kind poem that brings surprising information forward and translates it into a fun haiku. I have never heard of this thing and never want to see one up close.
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Another one-of-a-kind poem that brings surprising information forward and translates it into a fun haiku. I have never heard of this thing and never want to see one up close.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Thanks for checking it out, Bill.
Much obliged.
~Dean
Comment from Susanjohn
I got it !!!! finally!!!!!! GILL...ty hahahahahaha Oh you so funny!!!!!! but that picture is kinda creepy...thanks for the author notes!!
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I got it !!!! finally!!!!!! GILL...ty hahahahahaha Oh you so funny!!!!!! but that picture is kinda creepy...thanks for the author notes!!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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See? A "true" 'Ah-ha!' moment, Susan heh-heh-heh...
Ain't that what haiku is supposed to do for you?
Thanks fer readin'...
~Dean...
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
What an ugly creature. Most very creepy. I haven't heard of these before. Thanks for the author notes and info. A very well done haiku as always, my friend~Debbie
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What an ugly creature. Most very creepy. I haven't heard of these before. Thanks for the author notes and info. A very well done haiku as always, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Thanks for readin'...and watchin', Debbie.
Much obliged.
