Finding Billy!
Billy is rescued!37 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill. I have to say your mother was a lot less worried about having her seven year old son, wandering around with a big gun and in the woods alone. It's a darn good thing your dad and grand father thought to teach you so young and so well. A beautifully written story. xx d
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Hi Bill. I have to say your mother was a lot less worried about having her seven year old son, wandering around with a big gun and in the woods alone. It's a darn good thing your dad and grand father thought to teach you so young and so well. A beautifully written story. xx d
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Hi Babee,
Oh, my God! You are flirting with me. Now, you better watch out--"I'll bite your tongue--Ouch!" Do you think my book will make an awesome family movie? Another 'SALUTE', Sweetheart--"And God bless!"
xx Bill
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Hi Bill. I think you have a great sense of story telling, I think it is believable and I think it is the same family entertainment as say Old Yeller or perhaps that guy Gentle Ben who loved to play with bears. Goodness knows, you certainly pay attention to the whip-poor-will and his mating habits. It's like life and nature are not too far apart and that is good family entertainment. Your grandparents struggle and overcoming every obstacle alone would be an enchanting movie. All together and telling the complete story would be a Tom Sawyer or Huckleberry Finn type movie. Yeah it would be a good flick. I'd watch it! xx d
Comment from WalkerMan
Those were the times, however difficult, when people were strong from physical labor, resilient in dealing with adversity (in part because of their unwavering faith), and doggedly self-sufficient. Though disease and other hazards could and did cut many lives short, overall hardiness saw others safely through it all. If the electric grid ever goes down for an extended time, most people today, lacking the necessary skills and hardiness to feed, clothe, and shelter themselves, would perish. Most adult men in "civilized" countries today could not do what seven-year-old Billy did in this chapter. That is a chilling thought in light of present reality. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Those were the times, however difficult, when people were strong from physical labor, resilient in dealing with adversity (in part because of their unwavering faith), and doggedly self-sufficient. Though disease and other hazards could and did cut many lives short, overall hardiness saw others safely through it all. If the electric grid ever goes down for an extended time, most people today, lacking the necessary skills and hardiness to feed, clothe, and shelter themselves, would perish. Most adult men in "civilized" countries today could not do what seven-year-old Billy did in this chapter. That is a chilling thought in light of present reality. Well done.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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A "Salute!" Thank you my dear friend for the review and kind words. The promotion is over with "I've found Billy!" I shall be posting Chapter 7, "The Fire!" I hope to do this tonight. As always, I invite you along. Best wishes and God bless.
Bill
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You are welcome, Bill. It's nice to collect FS cash for promoting one's own work (and points for ranking), but I actually review only what I can relate to in some way (even if it pays only 1 point and 2 cents). Your work is good, so I review it as often as I can. I just completed the Second Edition of my book, which I will soon announce in a post here that offers a discount code, so I have been quite busy lately. I'm just now catching up on reviewing. Then there are three other FanStorians I'll be helping to complete and publish their own books.... Accordingly, please excuse me if I cannot keep up with reviewing every post. I do read more posts than I have time to review, as I take that task seriously and do not rush it. -- Mike
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Thanks, Mike! Sounds as though you are quite busy. Congratulations on completing the Second Edition of your book. Good luck and best wishes.
Bill
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You are again welcome, Bill. Thank you for the well wishes. The First edition took over four years of full-time work; and the Second Edition, which fully includes the First, has taken almost another two years. Most, but not all, of my posts here come from my book; and not all of my poems in the book have, or ever will be, posted here. Also, I have personally hand-typeset the entire 354 pages to tenths of a pixel for best appearance and readability -- something no one else does. Further,
I personally tweaked every one of the 224 (mostly color photo) images in the book to remove defects and noise (and a few took an entire week alone to clean up). It is safe to say that there is no other book like
it today, nor is there likely to be unless I make it (as I may do for those who have asked my help). Nevertheless, though busy, I did also review your "Reflections" post besides this one. -- Mike
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Thanks again, Mike. Your track record is commendable, and I am honored to have
you as a friend.Bill
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That's mutual, Bill. -- Mike
Comment from Tpa
Great job! good dialog, You kept the chapter moving I thought you could add more color during some of your dramatic scenes, even though it's still non-fiction. Nevertheless, it was very entertaining.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Great job! good dialog, You kept the chapter moving I thought you could add more color during some of your dramatic scenes, even though it's still non-fiction. Nevertheless, it was very entertaining.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you Tpa!
Your review and kind words are appreciated. Best wishes and God bless.
Bill
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a really terrific story Bill. Your writing is impeccable, you certainly draw your readers into the scene with your wonderfully creative detail, Life then sure sounds like "Little House on the Prarie". I loved that show :) Great job! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This is a really terrific story Bill. Your writing is impeccable, you certainly draw your readers into the scene with your wonderfully creative detail, Life then sure sounds like "Little House on the Prarie". I loved that show :) Great job! ~Kerry
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Your kind words are appreciated, Kerry.
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Your very welcome:)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very interesting story. The fact that it is non-fiction makes it even better. You have led an interesting life and write about it well.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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A very interesting story. The fact that it is non-fiction makes it even better. You have led an interesting life and write about it well.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Greetings, Thomas!
Thanks for reviewing and the kind words. I am posting Chapter 7, "The Fire!" within a week. Hope you join in with me.
Best wishes.
Bill
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. While this was the first chapter I've read I wasn't too lost, I don't think. It is very well written and I found no spags. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This is an interesting piece. While this was the first chapter I've read I wasn't too lost, I don't think. It is very well written and I found no spags. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Greetings, Mai Mai!
Thanks for the review and kind words. I shall be posting Chapter 7, "The Fire!" Within a week. Hope you join me there. Best wishes and God bless.
Bill
Comment from planetjanet
Good chapter, though it's a little tough to jump in at Chapter 6 and try to figure the time and place. Sounds like a winter in the country of old, but it is non-fiction, so the story of someone you know, possibly grew up in Tennessee, maybe?
You have a typo, "the back of chair". I think "the" is missing from the "chair"
What is "a mom mow bear"? I've not heard that term before, so you might want to explain it in author notes or give some other clue in context. It kind of sounds like Mama bear, but I'm not certain.
Yep, you've done a really great job of building concern for the sickly little Billy and anticipation over the fire. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Good chapter, though it's a little tough to jump in at Chapter 6 and try to figure the time and place. Sounds like a winter in the country of old, but it is non-fiction, so the story of someone you know, possibly grew up in Tennessee, maybe?
You have a typo, "the back of chair". I think "the" is missing from the "chair"
What is "a mom mow bear"? I've not heard that term before, so you might want to explain it in author notes or give some other clue in context. It kind of sounds like Mama bear, but I'm not certain.
Yep, you've done a really great job of building concern for the sickly little Billy and anticipation over the fire. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Greetings, my friend!
Thanks for the review, kind words and grammar help. "THE" is added, and it's Mama Bear!" Thanks for the heads-up! I am posting Chapter 7, "The Fire!" In as week or so. Hope you join me there. Best wishes and God bless.
Bill
Comment from stevensandiego
I enjoyed the story. I thought it was well written.
It would appeal to all ages. I would recommend it to family and friends.
It was cleverly done. Lots of imagination went into this story.
I would like to read more of your writings.
Steven San Diego
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I enjoyed the story. I thought it was well written.
It would appeal to all ages. I would recommend it to family and friends.
It was cleverly done. Lots of imagination went into this story.
I would like to read more of your writings.
Steven San Diego
Comment Written 25-May-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, NO! Seems like out of the frying pan (nearly dying by freezing) and into the fire! Quite an adventuresome childhood. Best wishes on the book and filming project!
minor points/questions:
"licked-split!" (lickety split?)
"mom mow!" ?
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Oh, NO! Seems like out of the frying pan (nearly dying by freezing) and into the fire! Quite an adventuresome childhood. Best wishes on the book and filming project!
minor points/questions:
"licked-split!" (lickety split?)
"mom mow!" ?
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Greetings, my friend!
Thanks for the review, kind words and "minor points/questions". The correct word is: lickety-split. And mom mow = mommy.
Thank you for that. Best wishes and god bless.
Bill
Comment from smerryman3
I like the plot of your story but I think your execution could use some revision. The flow of your narrative gets hampered by unnecessary descriptions. For instance, I think phrases like "old handsewn quilt" could be reduced to old quilt. I would also double check some of the phrases you use. I think licked-split is supposed to be lickety split. More verbs and less adjectives. I feel that you use more "telling" then "showing" the actions of the characters. However, I do appreciate the humor of your story and think you have a strong base. Keep it up!
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reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I like the plot of your story but I think your execution could use some revision. The flow of your narrative gets hampered by unnecessary descriptions. For instance, I think phrases like "old handsewn quilt" could be reduced to old quilt. I would also double check some of the phrases you use. I think licked-split is supposed to be lickety split. More verbs and less adjectives. I feel that you use more "telling" then "showing" the actions of the characters. However, I do appreciate the humor of your story and think you have a strong base. Keep it up!
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Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Greetings, my dear friend!
Thanks for the review and kind words. Best wishes and God bless.
Bill
