Picture This
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "She's Turned To Stone"poems from Picture This Challenge
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Comment from Leineco
Totally captivating poem Sandra.
I love the background/story line
it's as lush as the landscape is barren
and the closing couplet speaks prophetic:
"We raped our planet ruthlessly,
we stripped her to the bone,
we took the heart from Mother Earth,
and now she's turned to stone."
Excellent submission for this Pic!!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Totally captivating poem Sandra.
I love the background/story line
it's as lush as the landscape is barren
and the closing couplet speaks prophetic:
"We raped our planet ruthlessly,
we stripped her to the bone,
we took the heart from Mother Earth,
and now she's turned to stone."
Excellent submission for this Pic!!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much, Leineco, for this amazing review and 6 stars! Goodness, I'm over the moon you liked it so much, thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from fimarie78
Another powerful and engaging piece, Sandra. You write so beautifully!
Comatose and rapef were well chosen words. Man has indeed become greedy and we are destroying our wonderful world.
I struggled a little with the beginning of the second stanza but when I read a second time, I felt the rhythm. I wonder if there was an alternative to using the word town twice. I hope it's ok to bookmark this. Best wishes,Fiona
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Another powerful and engaging piece, Sandra. You write so beautifully!
Comatose and rapef were well chosen words. Man has indeed become greedy and we are destroying our wonderful world.
I struggled a little with the beginning of the second stanza but when I read a second time, I felt the rhythm. I wonder if there was an alternative to using the word town twice. I hope it's ok to bookmark this. Best wishes,Fiona
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Fiona, for your wonderful review and for the lovely 6 stars. I had another look at that line, and did totally agree with you, I have changed it now, perhaps you'd like to take a look and let me know if it sounds better. I do like people to tell me what they do and don't like. Of course, I am honoured that you would want to bookmark my poem, thank you! :) Sandra xx
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I like your revision of that line. It works well. I look forward to reading more of your work. Fiona x
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Brilliant piece! Well written with a topical theme. We could not survive without trees to make more oxygen for us.
The people who were still alive, found moving <-- Remove comma.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Brilliant piece! Well written with a topical theme. We could not survive without trees to make more oxygen for us.
The people who were still alive, found moving <-- Remove comma.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thanks so much, Phyllis!! The 6 stars look really lovely up there. Thanks also for the comma help, I went straight back and removed it. Bless you, my friend, lovely review. :) Sandra xxxx
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Comment from Ulla
Wow, Sandra, this is just so utterly beautiful. I wish I could leave it at that, because there is no more to say. That's what it is. A beautiful interpretation of the picture. You have such talent. Wow! Love Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Wow, Sandra, this is just so utterly beautiful. I wish I could leave it at that, because there is no more to say. That's what it is. A beautiful interpretation of the picture. You have such talent. Wow! Love Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you my dear friend, awww, you really do say the nicest things. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, you are wonderful! Big hugs!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
Wow this was fantastic. It was very well done, easy to read with a great flow and a fabulous rhyme. It showed the world of the future if mankind doesn't make some empowering changes. It carried an important message that all should be aware of, awesome job, thanks for sharing Sandra.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Wow this was fantastic. It was very well done, easy to read with a great flow and a fabulous rhyme. It showed the world of the future if mankind doesn't make some empowering changes. It carried an important message that all should be aware of, awesome job, thanks for sharing Sandra.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Alie, that is so nice of you!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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You are so very welcome Sandra, it was very enjoyable.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem an excellent interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. The human race has in their greed ripped mother earth from life and she now turns into stone useless and cold.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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A very well-written poem an excellent interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. The human race has in their greed ripped mother earth from life and she now turns into stone useless and cold.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Sandra, this was quite a hard one, but I enjoyed it. I'm so pleased you liked what I came up with. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is just exquisite, my friend. You rhyme feels natural and unforced and your meter is flawless. I love the message. Well done and very creative
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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This is just exquisite, my friend. You rhyme feels natural and unforced and your meter is flawless. I love the message. Well done and very creative
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much, Douglas, for the lovely 6 stars! And also a huge thank you for the wonderful review. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from heyjude
Sandra, a very well done poem for the picture this challenge.
I thought this one was a hard one, but you certainly came up
with some good thoughts. We don't take very good care of our
earth and look at how people treat one another.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Sandra, a very well done poem for the picture this challenge.
I thought this one was a hard one, but you certainly came up
with some good thoughts. We don't take very good care of our
earth and look at how people treat one another.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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It was hard, Judy, I just couldn't think of anything that would be right for the lady on the bench. So I made her Mother Earth!! Thank you so much for the lovely comments, I really appreciated them. xxx Sandra
Comment from Pantygynt
And, rather like a cliff-hanger we are left wondering how this tale went down amongst the listeners at the bar.
In many ways this is like a landlubber's version of Coleridge's Ancient Mariner. I kept asking myself who is this guy? Trump in ten years' time? I definitely want more. This raised more questions than it provided answers.
More, more, more, please.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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And, rather like a cliff-hanger we are left wondering how this tale went down amongst the listeners at the bar.
In many ways this is like a landlubber's version of Coleridge's Ancient Mariner. I kept asking myself who is this guy? Trump in ten years' time? I definitely want more. This raised more questions than it provided answers.
More, more, more, please.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Lol, Jim, this was a hard one for the Picture This Challenge, we had to think of a poem to fit. I came up with this in the end, making the lady on the bench, Mother Earth. I will have a go at writing a 'part 2'. Trump in 10 years time????? LOL!! I am waiting to see how he gets on. Will he come through with this new promise of helping to make Brexit great? We shall see. Thanks my friend, for the lovely, fun review. :) Sandra xx
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I was joking re: Trump but I did want to hear the drinkers' reaction. You have a wonderful opportunity for several parts here.
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I'll give it a go. I could write a poem that gives the men's reaction, and perhaps find out who our drifter is. Hmm, thank you, Jim. It's really nice to know you liked this one.
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I look forward to reading these.
