Hora Haiku: A Gothic Tale of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Haibun (full moon covets)"by Gypsy Blue Rose and Dean Kuch
10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for continuing to share your horror haiku series. I particularly liked your reference to the ultimate "dysfunctional family" and the "female phases" of the moon. The sensual picture in front of the moon is certainly eye catching. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you for continuing to share your horror haiku series. I particularly liked your reference to the ultimate "dysfunctional family" and the "female phases" of the moon. The sensual picture in front of the moon is certainly eye catching. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 15-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Thank you, I think this is a very feminine haiku. I didn't set out to do it that way but that is what came out LOL
Comment from Lu Saluna
"full moon covets Mirela's sensual nature" This is something the moon want from Mirela or wants to take away from her. My sense is telling me it sounds like she is potentially in danger.
"female phases" Mirela changes with the phases of the moon. Her changes or phases of sensuality, are triggered by changes with the phases of the moon.
This is really very good, I like it. The moon's magnetic pull can have a dramatic effect on many aspects of the psyche. Very fascinating.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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"full moon covets Mirela's sensual nature" This is something the moon want from Mirela or wants to take away from her. My sense is telling me it sounds like she is potentially in danger.
"female phases" Mirela changes with the phases of the moon. Her changes or phases of sensuality, are triggered by changes with the phases of the moon.
This is really very good, I like it. The moon's magnetic pull can have a dramatic effect on many aspects of the psyche. Very fascinating.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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YES!!! What are you doing inside my head???? hahaha You totally got the meaning of my hora haiku. Thank you, sweetie pie.
I don't have to look up towards the sky to know that the moon is full. I can feel it!
''The moon is a cruel lover'' is a line on a famous spanish poem
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Sorry, my friends call me little Guru. there is a story behind that. I feel the moon too, it can be annoying sometimes, other times it is fun. Just depends.
I also have been reading your book. Not the horror haiku book yet, Gypsy Haiku.
Don't let it creep you out, I am very.... intuitive. lol
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me<-- not crept out at all LOL I am fascinated by intuitive nature. I am highly intuitive too.
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When can I call you ''little guru''? LOL
I love that nickname
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Some day when it is just the two of us in TeamSpeak I will tell you why I get called that. I have a feeling you are the only one in the group who won't think I am crazy. lol.
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too late, darlin' I think you are as crazy as I am ... hahaha
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Oh I didn't mean now. Another time. Get some sleep. You are overtired, get yourself a goodnight's sleep. Everything is always easier when you are better rested.
Comment from Sasha
Marvelous haiku and thanks so much for the review of the background story. You could almost make this a haibun if your made your prose a bit more terse and abrupt. Yet, still a great job with this one. I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Marvelous haiku and thanks so much for the review of the background story. You could almost make this a haibun if your made your prose a bit more terse and abrupt. Yet, still a great job with this one. I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you sweetie pie :)
Comment from robyn corum
This is one of my favorites so far, and I couldn't really tell you why at all. *smile* I loved the laid back nature of the conversation. That was fun. I also enjoyed the fun haiku. A winner!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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This is one of my favorites so far, and I couldn't really tell you why at all. *smile* I loved the laid back nature of the conversation. That was fun. I also enjoyed the fun haiku. A winner!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Wow! You are a tough nut to crack, if you think it is a winner I am on the right track... my hora haiku usually confuse you. LoL
Thanks!
Comment from Ulla
Hola Gitana, Como estas. Aqui tenemos el poniente del invierno y no me gusta nada. It's the very strong wind from inland Spain and makes it feel very cold. I love your haibun. It provokes a lot of feeling and the haiku is superb. I love it. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Hola Gitana, Como estas. Aqui tenemos el poniente del invierno y no me gusta nada. It's the very strong wind from inland Spain and makes it feel very cold. I love your haibun. It provokes a lot of feeling and the haiku is superb. I love it. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
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Estoy bien, guapa :) y tu?
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think this is a great addition to your book. The first part of your haibun clearly explains the situation and make the closing haiku make complete sense and become a very good summation of the haibun. This is an intersting form
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I think this is a great addition to your book. The first part of your haibun clearly explains the situation and make the closing haiku make complete sense and become a very good summation of the haibun. This is an intersting form
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Yes, I don't write it frequently but I love the form. Basho wrote the best haiku in history-- "the narrow road to the deep north". Read it if you get a chance. :)
Comment from winnona
Beautifully written, The background story is good and the poem is very well done. The artwork and background color completed the piece well. I think you did a very good job on this.
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Beautifully written, The background story is good and the poem is very well done. The artwork and background color completed the piece well. I think you did a very good job on this.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, your opinion matters to me and it's very helpful for my writing process. :) Extra thanks for the fabulous six stars :)
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi GBR,
I like the haibun. It is a mini story explaining the situation, and the haiku sums it up in just three short lines.
They both read smoothly and they both compliment one another. The book sounds very interesting.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hi GBR,
I like the haibun. It is a mini story explaining the situation, and the haiku sums it up in just three short lines.
They both read smoothly and they both compliment one another. The book sounds very interesting.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, your opinion matters to me and it's very helpful for my writing process. :)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
I don't think I've ever read a Haibun poem before, or I might have forgotten it.
I enjoyed reading the story you wrote about it before you posted the poem.
You did a great job all the way around in writing both a poem and a story.
Kat
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
I don't think I've ever read a Haibun poem before, or I might have forgotten it.
I enjoyed reading the story you wrote about it before you posted the poem.
You did a great job all the way around in writing both a poem and a story.
Kat
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, your opinion matters to me and it's very helpful for my writing process. :)
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You are very welcome, my friend. Kat
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a well done example of haibun even if the prose is much smoother than the typical examples I have read in which the prose tends to be less story telling and more fragmented and emotion driven. The haiku encapsulates the essence of the prose beautifully. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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This is a well done example of haibun even if the prose is much smoother than the typical examples I have read in which the prose tends to be less story telling and more fragmented and emotion driven. The haiku encapsulates the essence of the prose beautifully. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, this is the best insight into my haibun I've gotten thus far. You are an awesome reviewer and I am grateful. :)
Thank you, your opinion matters to me and it's very helpful for my writing process. :)
