My Haikus
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "To help feed the young"Collection of haikus
8 total reviews
Comment from Cranial Thinker
There is no greater joy then to know whole souled you have done a very noticeable deed not so much in the eyes of flesh but more rewardingly is to feel the Heavens open and the smile of divine approval becomes internally revealed to your inner mind eyes heart which openly acknowledges the warmth and break taking experience you feel at that very moment....So wonderfully expressed my brother Darren....Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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There is no greater joy then to know whole souled you have done a very noticeable deed not so much in the eyes of flesh but more rewardingly is to feel the Heavens open and the smile of divine approval becomes internally revealed to your inner mind eyes heart which openly acknowledges the warmth and break taking experience you feel at that very moment....So wonderfully expressed my brother Darren....Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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Your perspective warms my heart and brings a smile to my face with the realization that someone out there not only understands my deep writing, but feels my lonely feelings.
You are truly my best friend and brother here.
Thanks, Darren
Comment from Leineco
My goodness! Inspired to write 6!!
I think this one is my favorite. The opening imagery is stark
and the satori line rumbles with things like compassion,
understanding and weighing need :-)
My only niggle is with the word "so" in the final line. I think
it would be stronger without it . . .more in keeping with the
conciseness haiku strives for :-)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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My goodness! Inspired to write 6!!
I think this one is my favorite. The opening imagery is stark
and the satori line rumbles with things like compassion,
understanding and weighing need :-)
My only niggle is with the word "so" in the final line. I think
it would be stronger without it . . .more in keeping with the
conciseness haiku strives for :-)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I am so stuck on the seventeen syllable count, that I forget that less is not only acceptable, but desirable here.
I really appreciate your comments, and I am now going to make it even better because of your advice.
Thanks so much!,
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from mermaids
I love bird poetry and you tell a tale in your words. I can feel the presence of the mother eagle and her quest to feed her young. Excellent haiku form that creates a clear scene of nature.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I love bird poetry and you tell a tale in your words. I can feel the presence of the mother eagle and her quest to feed her young. Excellent haiku form that creates a clear scene of nature.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thanks again for your continued support, I appreciate that you can be sure.
Brother Badger
Comment from DR DIP
Two predators after the same catch one predator relents and gives in. Victory this time to the bird of pray over the frustrated angler!
dip
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Two predators after the same catch one predator relents and gives in. Victory this time to the bird of pray over the frustrated angler!
dip
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review, I really appreciate your comments.
Keep Righting!
Brother Badger
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
AAAhhh I love the tenderness and the knowledge you put into this haiku. I can see it happening and the interaction between man and animal was great
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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AAAhhh I love the tenderness and the knowledge you put into this haiku. I can see it happening and the interaction between man and animal was great
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I really appreciate your comments.
Brother Badger
Comment from MissMerri
You say so much with just a few words. I thought the solution to the eagle grabbing the fisherman's catch was just perfect. Now the eagle can take the fish to her young and you can catch another fish. Everyone wins. The title says it all. Good job, Darren.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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You say so much with just a few words. I thought the solution to the eagle grabbing the fisherman's catch was just perfect. Now the eagle can take the fish to her young and you can catch another fish. Everyone wins. The title says it all. Good job, Darren.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
I really appreciate your comments!
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from winnona
A well-written challenge poem. I think you have done well completing the challenge and the artwork completed the poem very well.The eagle was a very good choice for this challenge.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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A well-written challenge poem. I think you have done well completing the challenge and the artwork completed the poem very well.The eagle was a very good choice for this challenge.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
I really appreciate your comments.
Brother Badger
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend the only thing I might have changed is the word clutching to clutches I think it sounds better well-done regards Jill
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Yes this is well written my friend the only thing I might have changed is the word clutching to clutches I think it sounds better well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I really appreciate your comments, and I have edited. Let me know what you think?
Thanks again,
Brother Badger
