Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "haiku (three herons balance)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from mvbrooks
There's a sense of peace, and also a sense of humor, in the final line "morning yoga class." Meets the line/syllable/and challenge of a haiku for the topic to include nature and for the last line to offer a reveal.
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There's a sense of peace, and also a sense of humor, in the final line "morning yoga class." Meets the line/syllable/and challenge of a haiku for the topic to include nature and for the last line to offer a reveal.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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I'm pleased you liked the bit of humor in the satori line, mvbrooks. Thanks so much for your kind review and comments for my bird haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from rjuselius
haha. i love this little piece of poetry dear indianairish! i think it is insightful and clever. i especially enjoyed the satori. very well presented with an awesome picture to match.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
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haha. i love this little piece of poetry dear indianairish! i think it is insightful and clever. i especially enjoyed the satori. very well presented with an awesome picture to match.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
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I'm so pleased you like this haiku, rebekka. Thank you for your review, comments, and encouraging response. Your haha it's a great compliment for the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-).
Comment from F. Wehr3
This one made me smile from ear to ear. Good and funny satori in this poem. I had a thought, just a small suggestion. Would it be better to say master yoga class over morning. Or is morning keeping with the aspect of nature? Like I said just thought.
Take care,
Russell
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This one made me smile from ear to ear. Good and funny satori in this poem. I had a thought, just a small suggestion. Would it be better to say master yoga class over morning. Or is morning keeping with the aspect of nature? Like I said just thought.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Russell, for your great review and comments for my bird haiku. I'm pleased you enjoyed the satori line, and thanks for your kind response. I like your suggestion very much. I used morning because I envisioned them at lakeside waiting for breakfast and doing their stretches. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from starkat
Well done, IndyHeron - I can already see this haiku in the 2018 calendar! This is a beautifully written haiku with connected imagery and a delightful satori. Marti recently sold the large copper logo, but will be making more, in different sizes. I just sent her this haiku along with your wonderful comments about 3heronsart and thanks for the artwork. She'll be thrilled. The 2017 calendar continues to be a success and will also be available at the art shows this year. 2017 is going to be a busy, creative, and fun year for 3heronsart.
This is the first I've heard about Haiku Club Challenge, so will be checking it out. So ... the winner of the challenge ends up in a book? Do members of the Club vote? Well, I hope you win! Cheers ... ;o) MorningCoffeeKat
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Well done, IndyHeron - I can already see this haiku in the 2018 calendar! This is a beautifully written haiku with connected imagery and a delightful satori. Marti recently sold the large copper logo, but will be making more, in different sizes. I just sent her this haiku along with your wonderful comments about 3heronsart and thanks for the artwork. She'll be thrilled. The 2017 calendar continues to be a success and will also be available at the art shows this year. 2017 is going to be a busy, creative, and fun year for 3heronsart.
This is the first I've heard about Haiku Club Challenge, so will be checking it out. So ... the winner of the challenge ends up in a book? Do members of the Club vote? Well, I hope you win! Cheers ... ;o) MorningCoffeeKat
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
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Thank you MorningCoffeeKat, for this awesome review, the shiny extra gold star, and your wonderful comments. I heard from Marti...what a sweet lady she is! I truly hope her business continues to grow and cro. I gave some dakandars as gifts for Christmas and they loved them!
The haiku club accepts any haiku from anyone into the multi-authored book. The "committee" ...the people who organized the club...will select what haiku they will include in the book.
Thank you, Art, for your encouraging and complimentary comments.
Smiles,
IndyHeron :-)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Karyn
That's the perfect finale, "morning yoga class". I watch some of these yoga instructors on the TV sometimes. They are always women, what's with that? But the slow, precise movement is always there, like herons, all legs. And "effortless", too. That's a great adjective. If I tried to move like that, I'd either get a terrible cramp, or I'd fall over!
Nicely penned!
Hugs
Kimbob
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Hi Karyn
That's the perfect finale, "morning yoga class". I watch some of these yoga instructors on the TV sometimes. They are always women, what's with that? But the slow, precise movement is always there, like herons, all legs. And "effortless", too. That's a great adjective. If I tried to move like that, I'd either get a terrible cramp, or I'd fall over!
Nicely penned!
Hugs
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
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LOL! I love your comments, Kimbob, and agree I'd fall flat on my face as well. Thank you for your great review and comments, and I'm so pleased you liked the satori. Hope you're well and smiling.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from heyjude
Indiana Irish, what a neat haiku. It made me smile. I really like that last line... morning yoga class. I can just imagine those herons doing yoga
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Indiana Irish, what a neat haiku. It made me smile. I really like that last line... morning yoga class. I can just imagine those herons doing yoga
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you, heyjude, for this great review and comments for my haiku. I'm pleased you liked the satori, and that it made you smile is the best compliment I could hope for from a reader.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from MizKat
Hi IndianaIrish,
You have written a very nice poem again that I enjoyed reading.
You are great at getting things like this out so we can read them.
Also it's vey nice that you give such nice points and member cents.
Kat
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Hi IndianaIrish,
You have written a very nice poem again that I enjoyed reading.
You are great at getting things like this out so we can read them.
Also it's vey nice that you give such nice points and member cents.
Kat
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Kat, for your great review and comments for my bird haiku. I'm pleased you enjoyed the satori line, and thanks for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are very welcome, Karyn. Kat
Comment from Douglas Paul
I do like this one, Irish. It has a great aha moment in the satori that flows well out of your first two connecting lines. Clear imagery that would stand on it's own without the picture - well done. Should be a strong contender to be included in the book
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I do like this one, Irish. It has a great aha moment in the satori that flows well out of your first two connecting lines. Clear imagery that would stand on it's own without the picture - well done. Should be a strong contender to be included in the book
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
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Douglas, I'm so pleased you enjoyed my bird haiku, and I'm truly honored and thrilled by your awesome review, generous rating of the extra star, and your encouraging comments. I Appreciate you mentioning you liked the imagery and the satori. Thank you so much!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Irish Rain
Ha ha...I love this! Exactly what they look like! 'The Karate Kid!!' Clever haiku, wonderful picture, I think you've done extremely well here, blessings...
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Ha ha...I love this! Exactly what they look like! 'The Karate Kid!!' Clever haiku, wonderful picture, I think you've done extremely well here, blessings...
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments for my bird haiku, Irish Rain. I truly appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed it and love your haha.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a beautifully executed haiku true to traditional form.
three herons balance - concrete imagery
with effortless discipline - seamless connection to line one enhancing the visual of the scene
morning yoga class - excellent observation connecting nature to every day life in a solid satori
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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This is a beautifully executed haiku true to traditional form.
three herons balance - concrete imagery
with effortless discipline - seamless connection to line one enhancing the visual of the scene
morning yoga class - excellent observation connecting nature to every day life in a solid satori
Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments for my bird haiku, Mystic Angel. I truly appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
