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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from Teri7
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This is a very good haiku you have penned. That is a most unusual bird picture. You used very good descriptive wording and imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thanks, Teri.
Comment from brenda bickers
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Hi Dean,
looks like your little haiku has just ruffled his feathers.lol
Mine would be too if I was called prehistoric.
I just love this picture, he is so ugly he's cute.
Great haiku.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Right, Brenda? They're such interesting birds, too.
    I watched a two-hour long documentary on the Shoebill on the BBC network.
    Fascinating.
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Ah, what a beautiful creature, indeed!
Leave it to you to find an insanely creepy bird that eats crocodiles!
I love the play on words at the end. Made me laugh.

Have a great day,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    If it made you laugh, then my day has been made as well, Rhonda.
    Thanks for reading.
    Warmest wishes,
    ~Dean
Comment from bookishfabler
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Another successful haiku, but I have to say I was facinated by the video of the shoebill and b your explanation of the species. Thanks for sharing
hugs HEidi

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    They are a fascinating species, Heidi, I agree.
    Thanks for reading.
    Warmest wishes.
    ~Dean
Comment from Mastery
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I have never heard of a Shoebill before, DeanO. Ugly suckers aren't they? Sounds like they are on the scavenger side of the bird spectrum. At any rate, I like the play on words in your haiku, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Aren't they though, Bob? Weird lookin', I mean?
    I watched a two hour BBC documentary on these amazing birds.
    They're completely harmless to humans (thank God!).
    Much obliged for your review, my friend.
    ~Deano
Comment from robina1978
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Great photo's that complement your little poem perfectly. You are so brave to go outside your comfort zone. A well written Haiku about this ugly bird, already when he is just a chick. Thanks for the foot note.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    He's downright prehistoric looking, Ine!
    But virtually harmless to humans.
    Thanks for reading.
    Have a great (stork free) day.
    ~Dean
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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This is very good Dean. Good use of alliteration with the letter S - Shoebill Stork Stares. Good use of homophone with the word 'fowl/foul' - very clever. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and your line three is a good satori and play on words. Well done. Weird looking bird - you chose a good one. Dorothy - I like 'tweetment' how someone with a lithp would say treatment LOL

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    My thoughts exactly concerning the satori, Dorothy.
    I decided to be a bit flippant with this haiku, just yo have a little bit of fun.
    We can't be expected to be so serious all of the time, right?
    Thanks for reading. I appreciate your comments.
    ~Dean :}
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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You picked an interesting animal to write about but you did it so ...well...your way.
A lovingly scary...does that make sense? Sure it does.
You did the two lines perfectly and with the prehistoric look it does have a look all its own. Then the play on treatment...nicely done

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you for reading, Barb.
    I'm glad you enjoyed it.
    ~Dean
Comment from DR DIP
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hehe I just watched the accompanying video Dean What an amazing bird Its exactly as you describe it in your Haiku. Thanks for posting

dip

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

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    Crazzzzzy looking thing, isn't it, Dip?
    Thanks for reading and commenting my friend.
    ~Deano :)
Comment from ~Dovey
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Hi Dean,

The alliteration and the play on words make this a delightful read, despite the fowl nature of that bird. It is none to pretty either, is it? lol You haiku is in good form, complete with humor.

Good job!

Kim

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 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    No, Kim, the thing is downright prehistoric looking.
    It seems harmless enough, and very docile and respectful towards humans however.
    I guess it's true what they say. You can't always judge a book by it's cover or a bird by it's beak.
    Much obliged.