Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "haiku (shoebill stork stares)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Excellent play on words with tweetment. What a strange looking bird. Is this the one that delivered you? I guess it needed the giant head.
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Excellent play on words with tweetment. What a strange looking bird. Is this the one that delivered you? I guess it needed the giant head.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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"...it needed a giant head", he says, heh-heh.
Thanks for the review, Tom......I think?
~Dean
Comment from Dawn Munro
Aw, geez, Dean, poor wittow birdie. (LOL) Only you could find such species of stork (usually the one delivering babies) to write about. Fascinating choice, all kidding aside, and I am dying to watch the videos! (I think I've seen one of them , actually...) Well done.
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Aw, geez, Dean, poor wittow birdie. (LOL) Only you could find such species of stork (usually the one delivering babies) to write about. Fascinating choice, all kidding aside, and I am dying to watch the videos! (I think I've seen one of them , actually...) Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Yeah, the second video was going around Facebook for awhile, Dawn.
That's where I first saw and became intrigued by this unique bird.
A bird that bows to humans.
How cool is that, I ask ya?
~Dean :)
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LOL - smart bird. :)
Comment from Treischel
I'm not a great fan of the Haiku, being more enamored with rhyme, meter, alliteration, and longer expressions, so forgive me for not joining. However, you have captured its essence well here. Love the chosen image that instantly grabs your attention too. I oarticularilr loved you wonderful author's notes that gave such excellent information on this bird.
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I'm not a great fan of the Haiku, being more enamored with rhyme, meter, alliteration, and longer expressions, so forgive me for not joining. However, you have captured its essence well here. Love the chosen image that instantly grabs your attention too. I oarticularilr loved you wonderful author's notes that gave such excellent information on this bird.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Tom!
I've been to your website (http://reischelsreflections.com/) a couple of times to see how you were doing.
I missed you around here, buddy.
Haiku is a very spiritual, very intense form of poetry once you study it and begin to learn what it's all about.
I'll admit, when I first came to FanStory in March of 2013, I didn't like or understand the form.
However, I have a whole new appreciation for its philosophies as well as the form now.
Thanks for reading, Tom.
It was great hearing from you.
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Thank you Dean. Ill try to keep an open mind on them, just don't want to get locked it. In publishing my books, I felt a bit like that short poems just werent giving readers their moneys worth, so I have resolved to write them with more meat in them.
I am elated that you looked at my site. I am on the verge of launching a marketing campain in social media. I just posted a YouTube video called "a new way with poetry, " to aid it.
I have been entering my books and seperate poems in several other public forums, trying to earn some money. That only resulted in dealing with a lot of rejection. So! I sort of lost my spark and confidence for a couple months, and couldn't pick up a pen.
I appreciate the welcome back.
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You bet, Tom.
It was great chatting with you.
~Dean
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ha ha - fowl looks indeed -
what a bird - quite fascinating.
what a clever little poem, Dean
You've made me smile rather than shiver
Margaret
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Ha ha - fowl looks indeed -
what a bird - quite fascinating.
what a clever little poem, Dean
You've made me smile rather than shiver
Margaret
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Great, as that was my intention this time, Margaret.
Thanks so much for reading. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
You don't let the grass grow do you? This is the first i have seen of the latest challenge results and it is a humdinger. Splendid alliteration in line one and a great play on foul/fowl in line two and the silent tweetment of the satori is to croak for.
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You don't let the grass grow do you? This is the first i have seen of the latest challenge results and it is a humdinger. Splendid alliteration in line one and a great play on foul/fowl in line two and the silent tweetment of the satori is to croak for.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Hahaha, a rolling stone gathers no moss, Jim.
Thanks for the excellent review.
~Dean :)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Dean,
Again you have written a very nice poem.
It was fun to read it about the shoebill stork.
Keep writing your wonderful poetry and I'll keep reading them.
Kat
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Hi Dean,
Again you have written a very nice poem.
It was fun to read it about the shoebill stork.
Keep writing your wonderful poetry and I'll keep reading them.
Kat
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you.
I'll do my best.
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Hi Dean,
You always write nice poems that I look forward to reading.
Kat
Comment from Mark Valentine
Would that someone else would keep his tweets silent.
Back on topic - so you can haiku too, eh? You puns suit the genre well, and your author's notes are worthy of a "National Geographic" article. And you managed to work in some of your trademark ghoulishness into the author's notes as well.
They do look like they'd make great slipper.
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Would that someone else would keep his tweets silent.
Back on topic - so you can haiku too, eh? You puns suit the genre well, and your author's notes are worthy of a "National Geographic" article. And you managed to work in some of your trademark ghoulishness into the author's notes as well.
They do look like they'd make great slipper.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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This thing really quaked me up, Mark. It's looks might be a little foul, but it is definitely receptive to humans, thank goodness.
I am to acquire one as a pet. It's most definitely my kinda birdie. besides, everybody has parrots these days, right?
I shall name him, Terry Dactyl.
Thanks for the review. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku of an evil looking bird. The evil eye is enough to make anyone scared of whatever this bird is capable of. The author notes and video are interesting and informative. It is one big bird.
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A very well-written haiku of an evil looking bird. The evil eye is enough to make anyone scared of whatever this bird is capable of. The author notes and video are interesting and informative. It is one big bird.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Yes, it certainly is, Sandra. On a brighter note it is completely harmless and receptive to humans.
Thanks for reading. As always I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend you have done well using this form I enjoy the challenge of the shorter forms , I love the picture too well done regards Jill
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Yes this is well written my friend you have done well using this form I enjoy the challenge of the shorter forms , I love the picture too well done regards Jill
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Thanks very much for reading, Jill.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from damommy
I think he's a lovely bird. His shoe bill is unique and sets him apart from the other storks. He does have that prehistoric look. All the better to do his job.
A good haiku with that point made in the last line. Love the "silent tweetment."
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I think he's a lovely bird. His shoe bill is unique and sets him apart from the other storks. He does have that prehistoric look. All the better to do his job.
A good haiku with that point made in the last line. Love the "silent tweetment."
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Yvonne.
I'm glad you liked this.
