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I Just Need A Little Help

no meter, rhyming quatrain

7 total reviews 
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Ah Lulube, this is a sad and very moving poem. You have opened up your heart to the readers of your poem and I hope the person it is aimed at also reads it. There is a sad cloud hanging over you that needs to be lifted. Keep your chin up and smile. Warm regards Dorothy xx

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
    thxs so much Dorothy, you touched my heart. I've spent a lot of years being bitter, now I'm trying to overcome that. It's a real bitchy one to get rid of. Hurt brings out the resentment to bitterness and I, unfortunately seem to need to be bitter to deal with the rest of life without being taken out. thxs for your awesome comments and concern

    lulube
Comment from country ranch writer
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been there done that so many promises made but none never kept to be there for you when you needed them the most such a disappointment

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
    you're not kidding a bout being a disappointment. It leaves you feeling that you really are all alone. 'cept you have your hubby which is worth it if you have to deal with those things. How's it all going? Healing, slowly, I would think. don't forget to feed him papaya is so talked about over here with the Chinese.

    lulube
reply by country ranch writer on 13-Jan-2017
    hubby is my life and without him. I am nothing so many years together wow a life time of ups and downs
    still working on getting that spot on his stump to close it is being a pain in the ass as usual hope it doesn't go in reverse like it usually does at this point just when you think you hat it licked.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    slow and easy, don't put any weight on it for months to come. It takes about 3 times longer to heal inside than it does outside and mrsa makes it even longer.
    feed him everything that promotes healing fresh veggies and vitamins. don't forget the papaya. you'll do it laughter helps a lot too. play some card games or scrabble

    lulube
reply by country ranch writer on 14-Jan-2017
    he plays his spider solitaire all the time and he takes all his vitamins and eats lots of protein and fresh fruit
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
    Dr. Gundry, online, has a great video on his product and explains so well what not to eat and what we should be eating. it may help hubby

    lulube
reply by country ranch writer on 20-Jan-2017
    Smiles
Comment from mbagby23
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So people don't know tat for some things to work we need everybody to do there part. Not all people see that. I been in that spot before. I enjoyed your writing reds very smooth from start to finish. May we meet again.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    Ya, key word, everybody, needs to do their part, doesn't matter what the situation is. could you imagine going to war and the fighters just sat on their asses waiting for someone else to do the fighting? OMG the birthing of 20 Hitlers. thxs for your great comments and review

    lulube.
Comment from Linda Kay
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Your poem narrates the authors situation quite well. They are independent and do not expect anything special, just for the other person to hold up their end of the deal. Your choice of rhyme scheme was good for this topic, not too rhyme or sing-songy, just one rhyme with each last word each verse.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    thxs for stopping by and for this awesome review

    lulube
Comment from DionysusDeVille
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This is a great way of telling the story from the other side and that sometimes we all need help from family sometimes. It's kind of sad when they turn their backs on us and don't follow through with their promises

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    thxs for insightful and awesome review. glad you stopped by

    lulube
Comment from Poetic Candice
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This was a very creative piece. The image threw me off a bit, but I enjoyed the use of expression and simplicity. I encourage you to submit more pieces.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    thxs for your encouraging comments. Will always be picking up the pencil to write, just seem to be in a bit of a slow down. thxs for stopping by

    lulube
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. It made me think of one disable person with the other being a caregiver. That situation is never an easy one for either party. Very good descriptive wording and imagery! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
    I answered an add in the paper for an emergency care giver for one month. I live only 5 mins from the ladies home and she was really stuck so she hired me. I learnt very fast what it was like to have to rely on someone for everyday personal duties. We both learnt how to break the strict regime she had lived by because of my back problems, we had to do things a bit differently. totally a life experience everyone should do for a month. thxs for your awesome comments.

    lulube