The True Test
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Eureka!"Teachers are left to survive
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Comment from heyjude
Judy, another wonderful chapter to your book. It really makes you
think what it might be like if we had a big disaster. I know we have
had a lot of earthquakes here in Oklahoma. Not any real big, but
one that really shook us up. I like the part about Katie hearing from
her husband.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Judy, another wonderful chapter to your book. It really makes you
think what it might be like if we had a big disaster. I know we have
had a lot of earthquakes here in Oklahoma. Not any real big, but
one that really shook us up. I like the part about Katie hearing from
her husband.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Again thank you, When I go back and rewrite from the beginning , I am going to start with the disaster, then do the TWO WEEKs earlier thing and let us get to know the people. That way it means more that Grandma picked the kids up early because they were putting a surprise birthday part together. That is what saved the kids. I am enoying learning how to let people know what wonderful people there are in the world.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Good atmosphere and tension wrought in this continuing chapter. Couple of things I noticed as I read.
Jeremy Jones was the physic teacher - physics?
the student referred to as Jumping Jones. - students?
stop talking."It took me a while - insert a space before the opening speech marks.
hot wire - hotwire.
Who wants to come listen with me." - this should end with a question mark.
We heard words like,"worst one ever." - insert a space after the comma.
about global warning for years - warming.
After shocks are still rocking - Aftershocks.
What advice do you have to any one who might - anyone in this instance.
For now you must rely on yourselves. "
- delete the space before the closing speech marks.
sign that let's them know we are alive - lets in this instance.
There talking like it will be a long time - Their.
She pulled up her husbands work number.- husband's.
Did you forget it was your Birthday? - no need for the capitalisation here.
Katie, if it is you try again. I didn't have the phone with me. We were outside. / Only texting is working. Text me, Please, Katie. I love you." - the first part would seem incongruous here for her to try calling again, if you see what I mean.
All the best
G
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Hi there,
Good atmosphere and tension wrought in this continuing chapter. Couple of things I noticed as I read.
Jeremy Jones was the physic teacher - physics?
the student referred to as Jumping Jones. - students?
stop talking."It took me a while - insert a space before the opening speech marks.
hot wire - hotwire.
Who wants to come listen with me." - this should end with a question mark.
We heard words like,"worst one ever." - insert a space after the comma.
about global warning for years - warming.
After shocks are still rocking - Aftershocks.
What advice do you have to any one who might - anyone in this instance.
For now you must rely on yourselves. "
- delete the space before the closing speech marks.
sign that let's them know we are alive - lets in this instance.
There talking like it will be a long time - Their.
She pulled up her husbands work number.- husband's.
Did you forget it was your Birthday? - no need for the capitalisation here.
Katie, if it is you try again. I didn't have the phone with me. We were outside. / Only texting is working. Text me, Please, Katie. I love you." - the first part would seem incongruous here for her to try calling again, if you see what I mean.
All the best
G
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Wonderful comments. You see everything. As always it is so appreciated.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, thank goodness for small mercies, Judy. At least they know something now and the children are safe. Wow that was a great chapter, I'm shouting Eureka!! too!! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Aww, thank goodness for small mercies, Judy. At least they know something now and the children are safe. Wow that was a great chapter, I'm shouting Eureka!! too!! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Eureka. I just couldn't let Kate suffer any longer. lol
Comment from frogbook
I seem to be reading the chapters out of order as my messages had built up to a rather unmanageable pile-haha. Still enjoying though and I am refilling in my head!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I seem to be reading the chapters out of order as my messages had built up to a rather unmanageable pile-haha. Still enjoying though and I am refilling in my head!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much Frog I am having fun and the story is quickly growing.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is a beautifully fleshed out and quite amazing piece of writing I have enjoyed everything that you have written so far with this story and this is no exception, this is brilliant writing at the highest level and I really connect with your characters great descriptions also. Well done. Meia.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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This is a beautifully fleshed out and quite amazing piece of writing I have enjoyed everything that you have written so far with this story and this is no exception, this is brilliant writing at the highest level and I really connect with your characters great descriptions also. Well done. Meia.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much. I am enjoying writing it and when I get encouragement from people like you it makes me believe and keep writing.
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you are so welcome! :)
Comment from crybry67
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book. It was interesting, and the story flowed well. Your characters are well defined.
I noticed two typos as follows....students seemed to catch on....
...sign that lets them know, instead of let's...
Great chapter! Blessings... Christy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book. It was interesting, and the story flowed well. Your characters are well defined.
I noticed two typos as follows....students seemed to catch on....
...sign that lets them know, instead of let's...
Great chapter! Blessings... Christy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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thank you Christy, I so appreciate the corrections. This stofy is having some fun momdnts]
Comment from winnona
The story continues to flow along and this chapter picked up easily where the last chapter left off. Very well written. The added details and realistic characters brought the story to life as I read it.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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The story continues to flow along and this chapter picked up easily where the last chapter left off. Very well written. The added details and realistic characters brought the story to life as I read it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for continuing to read
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, a very interesting story and so full of suspense. An earthquake being one of them. I'm looking forward to what's happening next. All the best. Ulla::)))
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Hi Judy, a very interesting story and so full of suspense. An earthquake being one of them. I'm looking forward to what's happening next. All the best. Ulla::)))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much. It means so much to me that you keep reading.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Whew! So it was just an earthquake and all will be okay. What a relief. BIG quake, though. So many killed. Nine hundred square miles is 30 by 30 miles. That's not too big to cover with planes and copters. At least give hope to survivors.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Whew! So it was just an earthquake and all will be okay. What a relief. BIG quake, though. So many killed. Nine hundred square miles is 30 by 30 miles. That's not too big to cover with planes and copters. At least give hope to survivors.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Yep Thats. why I changed the time line to only three days so far. This is why I love being on here so that people can help me when something doesn't seem quite right.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Definitely one of the better reads as it is action packed and can keep the audience intrigued. I was eating chip after chip as my eyes could not be averted from each line. Very thought provoking and awesome chapter
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Definitely one of the better reads as it is action packed and can keep the audience intrigued. I was eating chip after chip as my eyes could not be averted from each line. Very thought provoking and awesome chapter
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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You make me feel like a milion dollars thank you so much
