Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Judy, I would have great difficulty to stay away had I been in that situation. A very well written chapter and I'm looking to read on. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017

thank you , Yes, it would be so hard. Thank you for continuing to support me. After I finish the rough draft, I am thinking of going back and introducing the characters before the disaster. For example: I would still start with the day in the Auditorium when it first happens. But then the second chapter could be Two Weeks before. Then i could introduce Katie and her husband. We would get a picture of them before the tragedy. That way I could highlight more characters before that people would know. What do you think of that idea?

reply by Ulla on 13-Jan-2017

I think that is a great idea. That's how you put meat on a story, so to speak. Maybe you should start doing it already. It will save you a lot of rewriting later on.There will be a heck of a lot to edit anyway. Just a suggestion. I love your story. best. :)))

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I don't think I would have held up very well if I thought my babies were out there and I couldn't get to them. More problems, and few answers. But, there must be help coming sometime. Well done, again, another fine chapter. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017

Thanks Sandra. hope is coming soon. I have written nine chapters now.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Another well-written part of the story. Very realistic and the story flowed easily from beginning to end. My heart goes out to the teacher that has children in other schools. If it were me I would not be able to stay at the school not knowing if my own children were safe. I find someway to get to them. I think your story is moving along very well.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017

Thank you so much. I am enjoying this. I think this would be a great rough story line that could be built on. You have been one of my best encouragers.

Comment from Jackreese

Excellent

I couldn't imagine living through something like this let alone dealing with not being able to find my kids or know if they survived. You do a good job pulling the reader in and I will continue to follow.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017

thank you you so much Jack, Things are really moving and I hope to continue to explore how this group would survive. You are a great help. Let me know how you think you would handle things. I want diverse opinions.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I've been reading this straight through. It's fascinating. That was a powerful earthquake, but there has to be a place beyond its effect where everything is fine. Unless it's not just an earthquake, but the planet is breaking up. If no planes or copters fly over the school area soon, it would have to be the end of the world. By now, earthquake rescue teams would be everywhere.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017

I think you right Phyllis. That's why I shortened the time line a bit. They are only three days into it now and the first two the weather was too bad to explore.

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I continue to enjoy your story. You are doing a good job of describing the situation and peoples reaction to it. You are also maintaining a nice level of tension in this

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017

Thanks Douglas. I am so happy you are reading it. I am flying to Minneapolis to see my grand daughter 3 years old. I am taking your book with me to read to her.

reply by Douglas Paul on 09-Jan-2017

Ahhh - thank you - be sure to let me know how she likes it - have a safe trip