Comment from MelB

Excellent

What're you doing?" she asked after after a flurry of movements. - after [after]

You threw in another great little twist. I thought the bomb was dismantled by disconnecting the wires, not a leprechaun pausing time - great stuff! The perfect solution to get it far enough away and then let it detonate.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017

Thank you for the wonderful review and comments!!
Yes, Sean resorted to an energy draining alternative when he failed to dismantle the bomb. Magic is easy for Sean, and he's an adrenaline junky, so he has to look for excitement where he can find it.

Thanks again,
Rhonda

reply by MelB on 07-Jan-2017

He was down to the wire. Can't get more adrenaline than that!

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Rhonda, I really like this chapter! I always thought Sean was really a cool leprechaun. Always so full of mischief and he came through when he was needed! Having Jerry take the frozen in time, time bomb away to explore out of harm's way. The dialogue in this chapter was very entertaining between Sean and Becky. You've done so well with this story and your book my friend!

Take care Rhonda!

Jim

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017

Thank you, Jim, and you've always been such a wonderful source of support.
A great writer, yourself, I am honored to have you read and comment.
Take care, my dear friend,
Rhonda

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

Great description of what she experienced while her eyes were shut and he was stopping time. I also enjoyed the back-and-forth of their dialogue under duress.
How funny that he wants to create mischief while he has time stopped. That's a leprechaun for you!

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 Comment Written 07-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017

Thank you, Heidi!
Sean is quite the prankster, but has a reason for his mischief this time. Deep inside, Sean is a caring individual with many facets. One of them is a rogue!
Becky is a sort of airhead, and the two make for some comic relief!!

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

The storyline is enjoyable--the true strength of this piece is your ability to write dialogue that:
--sounds like true language
--moves the story at a good pace
--shows clearly--thru words--the relationships.

Being of Irish heritage, enjoyed how the Leprechaun is both a hero and also mischievous.

I also like how each chapter has action and then leaves the reader wanting more.

editing note:
"I need you to fly this bomb out of here," Sean said, nonplussed. "It's been activated, but since I've time stopped time"
--the phrase "since I've time stopped time" -- one of the "time" needs to be deleted.

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 Comment Written 07-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017

Thank you for the wonderful review.
I'm of Irish decent, too, and the nod to the leprechaun comes a lot from my father, who inspired these books to begin with. He's also who I based Sean's basic character on. They were both quite complicated, while being funny at the same time.
The conversation part, I think, comes from being a teacher. I talk for a living, so conversation just throws itself into my stories.

Thanks for all you do,
Rhonda