Believe In Me
Valentine contest entry19 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
This is a lovely love sonnet. Perfect style, rhyme and soothing flow. This is one of my all-time favorite songs and goes perfect with this poem. It is a perfect en try for this contest too. I wish you all the best.
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This is a lovely love sonnet. Perfect style, rhyme and soothing flow. This is one of my all-time favorite songs and goes perfect with this poem. It is a perfect en try for this contest too. I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a very sweet entry to the contest. It is an excellent example of the form as it meets all the requirements while maintaining a current voice allowing it to be a timely expression of the sonnet style. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is a very sweet entry to the contest. It is an excellent example of the form as it meets all the requirements while maintaining a current voice allowing it to be a timely expression of the sonnet style. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Again very beautiful my friend very well written and flows so beautifully good luck in the contest I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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Again very beautiful my friend very well written and flows so beautifully good luck in the contest I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
You're really makin' a strong push for that numero uno spot and fifty dollars in Monopoly money, aren't you, Dawn?
Better you than me.
I hope ya make it, but take my advice and try not to stay there too long.
And, if you're going to post a kick-ass Shakespearean sonnet like the one you've composed here, you might as well do as you have done, kill two birds with one stone, and post it in the Valentine's Poetry contest...right?
Sure. Why not?
Good luck, well done.
~Dean
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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You're really makin' a strong push for that numero uno spot and fifty dollars in Monopoly money, aren't you, Dawn?
Better you than me.
I hope ya make it, but take my advice and try not to stay there too long.
And, if you're going to post a kick-ass Shakespearean sonnet like the one you've composed here, you might as well do as you have done, kill two birds with one stone, and post it in the Valentine's Poetry contest...right?
Sure. Why not?
Good luck, well done.
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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So the previous 4 years of posting every single day, 2 per day, I was after the same thing? - oh wait, there was no $50 prize.
So it must have been the ranking I was after, right? To get rid of Adewpearl? (My friend, and an incredibly talented poet?) I have stayed pretty consistently at #18, Dean - that's a lot of ground to cover. It's my NOVEL-writing that's been in the top ten.
My feelings are really hurt. I have made fun of the rankings every year, including this one, twice. Why would you write this like this?
What do I have to do, stop posting?
This is the first year I have missed more than a handful of days, posting 2 per day, and that's only because the work has piled up so much I HAD to get some publishing done.
I did not calculate the points to get me into the #1 slot - I don't even know how. And I still did the September challenge of 30 poems, one a day, plus posted two every day, many days during it, and during the rest of the year.
And of COURSE if I entered the site's contest for Valentine's day if a love sonnet came to me for the second time in a week. It's only natural that I am going to use it, if I think it's good enough.
Or have I made a mistake and your review is NOT full of sarcasm? If so, my sincerest apologies. If not, I repeat, my feelings are really hurt.
Thanks for reviewing.
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No, I meant no sarcasm, Dawn. A little light-hearted ribbing perhaps, but it wasn't meant to be offensive.
I'm sorry you took it as such.
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I get a sense that the rankings and all they entail are a rather sensitive subject for you, so I'll not traverse into those waters again.
I in no way intended to hurt your feelings. We're friends, and friends kid each other.
At least where I'm from. :)
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Well, no need to worry about 'better me than you' - I'm sure I won't stay #1 for long. The rankings go up and down, like I said in one of my poem's notes.
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I hated being #1, I caught so much crap for it.
I didn't deserve it, my meter sucked, blah-blah-blah.
I'm content this year just to have fun, post when I wanna post, work on my haiku skills (what few I possess), my short stories, and get our anthology of haiku ready for publishing by the end of the year.
Wherever I wind up, so be it.
I couldn't really care less--like you.
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Well, I kid with my friends, but that didn't 'sound' like kidding to me - anyway, don't worry about it.YES, I am sensitive about the rankings - I told you - I make fun of them every year because it's a lot of work to post two pieces a day, and some folks here will do it to get into the top ten and then not care - I don't. I write a lot. That's all. If it is well-received, I am delighted. I do not KNOW how the points are calculated. I did not aim for #1, or for the $50 funny money. I didn't figure I had a hope in hell, since I can't even get enough reviews anymore (as I USED to) to get to 26 for the Best ribbon. You KNOW that - I TOLD you. ??
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Well, I come across the wrong way sometimes.
I'll apologize and you can choose to either accept it, or not.
~Dean
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Well gee, since you put it so nicely - of course it's my choice, but I am not a spiteful person. Apology accepted. :)
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Nor am I, you should know that by now.
I assure you, I was just yanking your chain a little, nothing more.
Perhaps I yanked a bit too hard.
Thanks for accepting my apology. I seriously meant no offense.
I'm just in one of those weird moods today, Dawn, just try to ignore me, like 89.9% of my fans do.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow this is an excellent love sonnet in style, rhyme and flow. I love the promise of love and how you presented it as with the tides, forever and ever. Very nice
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Wow this is an excellent love sonnet in style, rhyme and flow. I love the promise of love and how you presented it as with the tides, forever and ever. Very nice
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from DR DIP
A lovely write as usual Dawn, just one thing If i be bold to say
The verse:
So Cupid cannot, will not find my heart!
It still belongs to you, my Valentine.
I didn't know until we were apart,
but when I realized that you'd been mine,
"Valentine/ and you'd been mine" just doesn't sit right with me as compatible rhyming lines
I know they are the same syllabic count and all that poetic stuff but when read I struggle with the beat it creates.Maybe it's just me ?
So Cupid cannot, will not find my heart!
It still belongs to you, divine
I didn't know until we were apart,
but then realized you'd been mine,
dip
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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A lovely write as usual Dawn, just one thing If i be bold to say
The verse:
So Cupid cannot, will not find my heart!
It still belongs to you, my Valentine.
I didn't know until we were apart,
but when I realized that you'd been mine,
"Valentine/ and you'd been mine" just doesn't sit right with me as compatible rhyming lines
I know they are the same syllabic count and all that poetic stuff but when read I struggle with the beat it creates.Maybe it's just me ?
So Cupid cannot, will not find my heart!
It still belongs to you, divine
I didn't know until we were apart,
but then realized you'd been mine,
dip
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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I wish I could recite it for you, but I don't have the equipment to record voice - thank you for all your time and trouble. I always appreciate honest reviews.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Valentine's poem, the music is superb and the love for the Valentine shines through in your beautiful words. When we truly love someone, nothing else matters, as long as we can be close with them.
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A very well-written Valentine's poem, the music is superb and the love for the Valentine shines through in your beautiful words. When we truly love someone, nothing else matters, as long as we can be close with them.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a beautiful sonnet, my friend. I especially like how you ended it. Very well written. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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This is a beautiful sonnet, my friend. I especially like how you ended it. Very well written. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
Comment from sandy montgomery
A lovely sonnet of love and loss. I thought your poem flowed well. It had a cohesive and clear meaning. It was romantic and filled with longing. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
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A lovely sonnet of love and loss. I thought your poem flowed well. It had a cohesive and clear meaning. It was romantic and filled with longing. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
