Alone
The greatest fear10 total reviews
Comment from kmoss
Portfolio roulette! I mindlessly scroll through my favorite Fanstorian's portfolios and land and read. I'm glad I found this! Fuck, why is it snowing in April? Sorry mild derailment. Anyhow, with so few words you captured the essence of loneliness. I like the notes: "don't give in to it."
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Portfolio roulette! I mindlessly scroll through my favorite Fanstorian's portfolios and land and read. I'm glad I found this! Fuck, why is it snowing in April? Sorry mild derailment. Anyhow, with so few words you captured the essence of loneliness. I like the notes: "don't give in to it."
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi (*<*)
= Wow! I love this.
= So true about the fear of being alone, and all tied up with jealousy.
= Nicely penned and presented.
= I just came back on-site after taking a few months off.
= Glad I ran across this one.
= Hope all is well at your end.
Cheers ... Jax
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Hi (*<*)
= Wow! I love this.
= So true about the fear of being alone, and all tied up with jealousy.
= Nicely penned and presented.
= I just came back on-site after taking a few months off.
= Glad I ran across this one.
= Hope all is well at your end.
Cheers ... Jax
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
Comment from Mastery
Excellent cinquain, Lance. The music is a good idea and seems to fit well with the mood of the text. Good luck in the contest. I am sure you will do well, my friend. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Excellent cinquain, Lance. The music is a good idea and seems to fit well with the mood of the text. Good luck in the contest. I am sure you will do well, my friend. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from judiverse
A great entry. This really shows the emotion of the woman who feels alone. She's also worried that her loved one is not alone. Even though he may love the other woman more, her great fear is of being alone. This meets the cinquain bells and whistles, and the situation is presented so that you feel the narrator's plight. judi
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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A great entry. This really shows the emotion of the woman who feels alone. She's also worried that her loved one is not alone. Even though he may love the other woman more, her great fear is of being alone. This meets the cinquain bells and whistles, and the situation is presented so that you feel the narrator's plight. judi
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
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You're very welcome. A very moving poem. judi
Comment from barkingdog
I think this is why so many stay even with physically and verbally abusive partners.
Being alone can, for some, be worse.
I don't understand it, myself.
I kind of like being without people. I'm really not alone though. I have three dogs who are always glad to see me, are always encouraging, and keep me warm on these cold nights. Oh, and they're very optimistic.
Best of luck in the contest with this spot-on observation of a human condition.
:) e
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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I think this is why so many stay even with physically and verbally abusive partners.
Being alone can, for some, be worse.
I don't understand it, myself.
I kind of like being without people. I'm really not alone though. I have three dogs who are always glad to see me, are always encouraging, and keep me warm on these cold nights. Oh, and they're very optimistic.
Best of luck in the contest with this spot-on observation of a human condition.
:) e
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from mvbrooks
Quite an interesting format with the first and last line of the poem being the same word. It takes planning and a sense of more than one meaning for the same word or phrase. She fears he is NOT alone and that she could end up Alone --if she speaks up. Quite a quandary.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Quite an interesting format with the first and last line of the poem being the same word. It takes planning and a sense of more than one meaning for the same word or phrase. She fears he is NOT alone and that she could end up Alone --if she speaks up. Quite a quandary.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Nika2016
Very nice observation of human behavior...and I suppose for some it is true..
but not for me...I love being alone and would have to stretch my lifestyle to accommodate even one more person in close contact....and he definitely could not add problems...
Your woman looks very alone...I have too many asking for my time...
I really like the poem though..It has a haunted feeling...
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Very nice observation of human behavior...and I suppose for some it is true..
but not for me...I love being alone and would have to stretch my lifestyle to accommodate even one more person in close contact....and he definitely could not add problems...
Your woman looks very alone...I have too many asking for my time...
I really like the poem though..It has a haunted feeling...
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This cinquain, Alone, has the proper setup and touches a tender spot we all have, or will have some day, the thought of being left behind.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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This cinquain, Alone, has the proper setup and touches a tender spot we all have, or will have some day, the thought of being left behind.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from patcelaw
Loneliness can bring about fer in our lives and sometime it is fear that bring loneliness. We all need to be aware and never give in to fear. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Loneliness can bring about fer in our lives and sometime it is fear that bring loneliness. We all need to be aware and never give in to fear. Patricia
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow. This is excellent. With just five lines you have written a touching poem. I love the last line - a powerful one. Really nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Wow. This is excellent. With just five lines you have written a touching poem. I love the last line - a powerful one. Really nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much.
