Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

This is an amazing story about real hurt. Your mom was wise in the words she shared with you and you were wise to listen to her. I am so glad you and Sandy made up.
One suggestion: when you tell about your niece storming in, you switch to present tense. The rest of the story is in past tense. For example, instead of 'her fists are swinging' it could be 'her fists were swinging'.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you for the catch, my friend. I will edit and correct. I was trying to write this too fast yesterday. Sometimes haste winds up making more work.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Jesus said when you hear someone speaking evil about you forgive them, Knowing that you have also spoken evil about others. Pretty good advice.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you. That was a hard but good lesson for me to learn. I do try to zip my lip now.

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi PRETTYBLUEBIRD,
Wow this was a great story with a powerful message. How many of us have been in the same situation. I always now make sure that if someone wants to keep a secret don't share it with anyone including me.
a loved the way you wrote this and your description of the whole situation was very much in my mind as I read this.
Well done.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you. It was a hard lesson but one I needed to learn. I do try to zip my lip when I hear gossip now. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Comment from sandy montgomery

Excellent

"I got home around four thirty of five" (or) You are blessed to have such a friend and she is blessed to have you. The simple typo I indicated above was the only flaw I saw. This story holds a wise lesson for us all. Thank you for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you, and thanks for the catch; I missed that one while editing. I get in a big rush sometimes and make more work for myself.
thanks again.

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

An amazing tale told well. You relayed the story of you and your best friend, and how a rumor you spread was spread by your friend. It was a good object lesson for you, your friend, and all of us.

Great job. Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you for reading and commenting. It was a hard lesson but one I needed to learn.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

I'm really glad y'all were able to work that out. It's a sad thing to lose a friend, especially one that's been around that long, over something so minor in the scheme of things. Glad it all worked out. Good luck in the contest!!

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It was a hard lesson but one I needed.