Picture This
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Under His Umbrella"poems from Picture This Challenge
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Comment from mvbrooks
I wasn't sure what to expect by the title, but clicked to explore more. I am so glad I did. This is "perfectly polished" and I wish I had saved a 6 six for it--The rhyme is consistent and adds to the poem's strong flow.
The description could be of a current artist--or one from the past. I'm teaching a high school reading class and we are currently exploring a glimpse of the AP Art class. Perhaps that's why, in my imagination, i though of Monet as I read.
I was impressed with the timelessness of your poem as it could be Monet, it could be a contemporary-- you've allowed your reader to insert his/her own experiences in the beautiful web of words and story you've woven.
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I wasn't sure what to expect by the title, but clicked to explore more. I am so glad I did. This is "perfectly polished" and I wish I had saved a 6 six for it--The rhyme is consistent and adds to the poem's strong flow.
The description could be of a current artist--or one from the past. I'm teaching a high school reading class and we are currently exploring a glimpse of the AP Art class. Perhaps that's why, in my imagination, i though of Monet as I read.
I was impressed with the timelessness of your poem as it could be Monet, it could be a contemporary-- you've allowed your reader to insert his/her own experiences in the beautiful web of words and story you've woven.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
What a really lovely review, thank you so very much! I love Monet, this painting was so easy to write for, and I did enjoy it. I'm delighted you enjoyed it too. Thank you, my friend. xsx Sandra
Comment from Thomas Bowling
It's great how different writers can look at the same picture and see different things. I read a lot of these a few weeks ago. This is one of the best.
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It's great how different writers can look at the same picture and see different things. I read a lot of these a few weeks ago. This is one of the best.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
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What a lovely compliment, Tom, thank you so much! I love the challenges and reading what others see in the pictures, they really are a good mix. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ella25
Beautiful, under the umbrella of exquisite words. Well balanced and picturesque composition you have created. A masterpiece of accomplished work. It describes the way you look at art, and it is beautiful. Blessings, Ella
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Beautiful, under the umbrella of exquisite words. Well balanced and picturesque composition you have created. A masterpiece of accomplished work. It describes the way you look at art, and it is beautiful. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Ella, what a lovely review! It's one of my favourite Monet pictures, so when I saw it come up as a Picture This challenge I was really pleased, I'm so glad you liked it. :) Sandra xx
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You are welcome, Sandra. Monet is one of my favourite artists. His work is magnificent.
Comment from tfawcus
I've read quite a few of these 'Picture This' challanges, but see that the best has been left until last. How well you capture the 'feel' of this lovely impressionist painting. You describe the symbiosis between the painter and the landscape perfectly in your closing couplet.
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I've read quite a few of these 'Picture This' challanges, but see that the best has been left until last. How well you capture the 'feel' of this lovely impressionist painting. You describe the symbiosis between the painter and the landscape perfectly in your closing couplet.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
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What a lovely compliment, Tony, thank you so much. It's such a lovely painting of Monet's, and I enjoyed writing this to with it for the challenge. I'm really pleased you liked it. Thank you. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. A determined artist will make use of any chance he gets to create his artwork.
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A very well-written poem and interpretation of the 'picture this' challenge. A determined artist will make use of any chance he gets to create his artwork.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
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Absolutely, I do envy artists their talent. I must be wonderful to be able to create a masterpiece the way Monet has. Thank you, Sandra, for the lovely review. :) ~Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lovely poem that captures the work of an artist. You're in good form today. :)
flower-beds <-- no hyphen, just flower beds
noon-day <-- all one word, noonday sun
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Lovely poem that captures the work of an artist. You're in good form today. :)
flower-beds <-- no hyphen, just flower beds
noon-day <-- all one word, noonday sun
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Phyllis, as soon as I read this I hopped back and took the hyphens out. Body hopping has really got me hopping is so many directions lately!! LOL. Thanks for the lovely review, my friend. Now about Gina, Sophie and Roy and Veronica.... :)) Sandra xxx
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I hear they just formed a motorcycle gang and are terrorizing Arizona. Veronica's idea, of course. You gotta tame that bitch. :)
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LOL! I trained her well!!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Sandra, what a gorgeous interpretation your poem is of the lovely painting of Monet's. Your rhyme in aabb form and your meter are just perfect and a joy to read. Thank you for posting and keep writing - warm regards Dorothy xx
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Sandra, what a gorgeous interpretation your poem is of the lovely painting of Monet's. Your rhyme in aabb form and your meter are just perfect and a joy to read. Thank you for posting and keep writing - warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Dorothy, this is so nice of you. Being an wonderful artist yourself, I'm doubly pleased you liked my interpretation. Thank you!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent, I mean excellent rhyme and flow as this piece has a sing/song flow to the whole thing without a problem anywhere.
I love the description as it describes some one the painters that I just love. there is one that I don't remember the name, but if he saw a broken mailbox, that is what went in his paintings.
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Excellent, I mean excellent rhyme and flow as this piece has a sing/song flow to the whole thing without a problem anywhere.
I love the description as it describes some one the painters that I just love. there is one that I don't remember the name, but if he saw a broken mailbox, that is what went in his paintings.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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An artist can see beauty in anything, even a broken mailbox, they are so lucky to have that talent. My art is at matchstick men level! LOL. Thank you so much, Barb, I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. :) ~Sandra xxx
Comment from Pantygynt
I have always admired impressionist art and so I was immediately drawn to this by the picture. Is it Manet or Monet or someone entirely different? But I am here to review the poem not the art.
I don't see why the simple differencing of lines in iambic heptameter shoulkd deny this poem the right to be considered a sonnet, after all the differencing that has gone on in the past with the the sonnet form. It certainly works like a sonnet.
Normally it is said that a rhyme should not be repeated in short work. You have "day/away" in the first quatrain and "day/way" in the couplet but somehow i find that acceptable here as in both cases the content is similar -- the routine at the end of the day. I think this is one of those occasions where the rule is meant to be broken and in a good cause.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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I have always admired impressionist art and so I was immediately drawn to this by the picture. Is it Manet or Monet or someone entirely different? But I am here to review the poem not the art.
I don't see why the simple differencing of lines in iambic heptameter shoulkd deny this poem the right to be considered a sonnet, after all the differencing that has gone on in the past with the the sonnet form. It certainly works like a sonnet.
Normally it is said that a rhyme should not be repeated in short work. You have "day/away" in the first quatrain and "day/way" in the couplet but somehow i find that acceptable here as in both cases the content is similar -- the routine at the end of the day. I think this is one of those occasions where the rule is meant to be broken and in a good cause.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
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I'm not sure about the artist, it reminds me of Monet, but like you I wouldn't swear to it. I wouldn't ever say my poetry was a sonnet, I wrote what I thought was one once before. Everyone liked it except one person who told me I shouldn't call it a sonnet because it was nothing like one. LOL, that was the end of that! I write my poetry for my pleasure and hopefully other people will like it too, I'm too scared now to give it a name. Thank you, Jim, you really made my day with this review. I really appreciate you, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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Probably safer just to call it a poem, and a good one too.
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I agree.:))
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, how beautiful is this. I;m so glad you posted albeit late. The imagery is lovely and so is the rhyming. You're so talented. Love, Ulla xx
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Hi Sandra, how beautiful is this. I;m so glad you posted albeit late. The imagery is lovely and so is the rhyming. You're so talented. Love, Ulla xx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much, Ulla. I'm glad you liked it, I did enjoy writing this one. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
