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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Fire and Ice"Collection of haikus
20 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's beautiful, your words and the picture. I went to Norway hoping to see the aurora borealis, but it was not to be. Your words are perfect, and I've learnt a new one! #Well done, you met the challenge superbly. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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It's beautiful, your words and the picture. I went to Norway hoping to see the aurora borealis, but it was not to be. Your words are perfect, and I've learnt a new one! #Well done, you met the challenge superbly. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
Comment from MelB
Hi Badger29, Great description and imagery on this Haiku about air. Wonderful artwork to compliment. Excellent syllable count.
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Hi Badger29, Great description and imagery on this Haiku about air. Wonderful artwork to compliment. Excellent syllable count.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
Comment from Ella25
Beautiful Northern lights in the image you presenting complement the words of the mountaintops on fire. Gorgeous. Well done. Blessings, Ella
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Beautiful Northern lights in the image you presenting complement the words of the mountaintops on fire. Gorgeous. Well done. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
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You are welcome and no worries. All the best, Ella
Comment from mermaids
Your haiku form creates a beautiful scene of nature. I like the image of the glow on the mountaintop. Excellent use of words that creates a scene of nature, especially in winter.
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Your haiku form creates a beautiful scene of nature. I like the image of the glow on the mountaintop. Excellent use of words that creates a scene of nature, especially in winter.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
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I work two jobs so I understand how busy you are. Take care of you! Elaine
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Badger,
The picture you've chosen to illustrate your haiku is wonderful. I live in Alaska, so it is my joy and privilege to view the Aurora many times throughout the year. I saw them last night, in fact. It is always best when it is cold and clear. You'll find poems about them in my portfolio, too. How could anyone resist writing about such a beautiful phenomenon? I really love the adjective 'empyreal' as it sets this piece apart from most.
Nice work!
Kim
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Hi Badger,
The picture you've chosen to illustrate your haiku is wonderful. I live in Alaska, so it is my joy and privilege to view the Aurora many times throughout the year. I saw them last night, in fact. It is always best when it is cold and clear. You'll find poems about them in my portfolio, too. How could anyone resist writing about such a beautiful phenomenon? I really love the adjective 'empyreal' as it sets this piece apart from most.
Nice work!
Kim
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~ p.s. I will consult your portfolio, thank-you
Comment from Thesis
I've made the mistake before too. Not to worry.
I enjoyed this poem. It allows the imagination to soar while thinking of the changing celestial lights and the magnificence of nature. I like your usage of words that juxtapose the concept of ice and fire, while highlighting their effect on light in the sky. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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I've made the mistake before too. Not to worry.
I enjoyed this poem. It allows the imagination to soar while thinking of the changing celestial lights and the magnificence of nature. I like your usage of words that juxtapose the concept of ice and fire, while highlighting their effect on light in the sky. Very nice job.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is wonderful - I have seen the Northern Lights in their full glory, and they do resemble sheets of colorful lights, all spiraling out of a central point in the night sky - they are so delicate. It's awe-inspiring; one of those times in life I will never forget.
Nicely done, although I would have like to see the kire more pronounced by having the grammatical connection between your concrete images. Something like -
sheets of light set fire
to icy mountaintops
ephemeral glow < I tried looking up 'empyreal', but it doesn't exist, apparently;
I have replaced it with the word you might have meant...
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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This is wonderful - I have seen the Northern Lights in their full glory, and they do resemble sheets of colorful lights, all spiraling out of a central point in the night sky - they are so delicate. It's awe-inspiring; one of those times in life I will never forget.
Nicely done, although I would have like to see the kire more pronounced by having the grammatical connection between your concrete images. Something like -
sheets of light set fire
to icy mountaintops
ephemeral glow < I tried looking up 'empyreal', but it doesn't exist, apparently;
I have replaced it with the word you might have meant...
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Yes, if you check a complete dictionary, the noun is empyrean, and the adjective is empyreal. Thanks
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Oh, well, then of course, stay with it, but any haiku consists of two grammatically connected, concrete images - your images are there (and lovely), but that's why I took the time to give you an example, even though Google (which I used) did not recognize your word. Good luck. :)
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Oh, and by the way, I have a fairly extensive vocabulary, but nobody knows every word in existence within the English language. And I am not pretentious - I'm always glad to learn something, and I don't pretend to know something when I don't. The word DID look familiar to me, that's why I went to the effort to look it up. What I did not do, out of laziness, was get off my laptop and go to my actual dictionary.
I meant no offense when I offered you an example of joining haiku images with the pivot line. I merely tried to be helpful, to give an honest review, and I did not dock you any stars.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Badger: you can go into edit and switch this to poetry.
I like the photo and the mountains of ice. Hey, I'm usually on the poets side.
Glad to read this poem! I like you hit the air challenge well with fire and ice.
I know that this is a cold area up north. The view is stunning.
Have a great New Year! flylikeaneagle
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Badger: you can go into edit and switch this to poetry.
I like the photo and the mountains of ice. Hey, I'm usually on the poets side.
Glad to read this poem! I like you hit the air challenge well with fire and ice.
I know that this is a cold area up north. The view is stunning.
Have a great New Year! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your review; it is always a pleasure to hear from you. Forgive me if it took a while to respond. My kindle broke, and I am working eight days a week. I will be on more often as soon as work slows down, and I can buy a new laptop. Thanks again for your kind words!
Brother Badger < : - D ~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
the splendour of aurora borealis perfectly summed up in this brilliant poem.Words are each chosen skillfully to create the effect of wonder in seeing such natural beauty.well done for this excellent piece of poetry.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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the splendour of aurora borealis perfectly summed up in this brilliant poem.Words are each chosen skillfully to create the effect of wonder in seeing such natural beauty.well done for this excellent piece of poetry.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Ooo lala! This is a marvelous contribution to the challenge.
"curling sheets of light" - stunning imagery with or without artwork
"icy mountaintops on fire" - connects well with the first line and incorporates a solid kigo by the use of "icy"
"empyreal glow" - one hot damn of a satori that even teaches folks a brand new word
Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Ooo lala! This is a marvelous contribution to the challenge.
"curling sheets of light" - stunning imagery with or without artwork
"icy mountaintops on fire" - connects well with the first line and incorporates a solid kigo by the use of "icy"
"empyreal glow" - one hot damn of a satori that even teaches folks a brand new word
Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Darren
