Making Music
A Minute Poem40 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi, Tony,
You've shown just how delightful and effective a minute poem can be in conveying imagery and a well developed story.
Your effective use of enjambment is what makes this MP shine brightly. That, coupled with spot-on iambs gives the poem a lyrical, free-flowing feel.
The rhymes are spot-on and form compliant.
I admire how you captured the joys of a toddler playing on a play-piano and how, one day, she will be playing beautifully on, perhaps, a Steinway concert grand.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Ray
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Hi, Tony,
You've shown just how delightful and effective a minute poem can be in conveying imagery and a well developed story.
Your effective use of enjambment is what makes this MP shine brightly. That, coupled with spot-on iambs gives the poem a lyrical, free-flowing feel.
The rhymes are spot-on and form compliant.
I admire how you captured the joys of a toddler playing on a play-piano and how, one day, she will be playing beautifully on, perhaps, a Steinway concert grand.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Ray
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Ray. Kind of you to drop by to review my Minute poem, "Making Music". I appreciate your kind words about it - and your offer to cast an eye over the odd Haiku, if I decide to give them a go. All the best, Tony
Comment from closetpoetjester
What a lovely minute on the little one and her musical aspirations Tony.
Some delightful phrases in bouncy form, in perfect theme with the subject who is obviously a musical prodegy waiting to happen haha
If she can just fine tune those bumps and thumps a bit, she'll be soothing the strife of daily life before you know it! A great read and some super enjambing, you.
Hugs P xx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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What a lovely minute on the little one and her musical aspirations Tony.
Some delightful phrases in bouncy form, in perfect theme with the subject who is obviously a musical prodegy waiting to happen haha
If she can just fine tune those bumps and thumps a bit, she'll be soothing the strife of daily life before you know it! A great read and some super enjambing, you.
Hugs P xx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I'm honored that you should have dug back in my portfolio to give this your two cents worth! I am so glad at times like this that young Teagan is half a world away. The sounds don't carry quite that far!
Comment from Thal1959
Very nicely done. I am sure many people find the subject matter charming. I did, but cannot relate so well as I have never had children. Though I am not partial to sentences that run from the last line of one stanza and continue on the first line of the next stanza. But this is just my personal taste.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Very nicely done. I am sure many people find the subject matter charming. I did, but cannot relate so well as I have never had children. Though I am not partial to sentences that run from the last line of one stanza and continue on the first line of the next stanza. But this is just my personal taste.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing "Making Music". I understand your view on enjambment. It can make a poem seem rather jerky. Opinions are divided, but I agree that it should be used with caution and mainly where there is a natural pause at the end of the line to help smooth the rhythm. Best wishes, Tony
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I appreciate your comments. I use enjambment often, though I always end its thought at the end of the stanza. Thanks again.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I liked this one, Tony, because it's easy to read and delightful in its meaning.. such a gorgeous picture of the cute little one 'thumping and banging' on the little keyboard.. Good luck with your minute poem, Giddy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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I liked this one, Tony, because it's easy to read and delightful in its meaning.. such a gorgeous picture of the cute little one 'thumping and banging' on the little keyboard.. Good luck with your minute poem, Giddy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Glad you enjoyed little Teagan thumping away on the piano. Better to look at than to listen to, I suspect! LOL
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Tony: you make this look so easy. What a cute grandbaby! Enjoy the music
and yes, someday, she will play a grand! Ask Susan for lessons! Maybe, get
a baby computer program for her. I like the music's balm. Take lots of photos.
Play the tunes with her.
Happy New Year! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Tony: you make this look so easy. What a cute grandbaby! Enjoy the music
and yes, someday, she will play a grand! Ask Susan for lessons! Maybe, get
a baby computer program for her. I like the music's balm. Take lots of photos.
Play the tunes with her.
Happy New Year! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Very many thanks for your review. A happy New Year to you too. We're half a world away from our granddaughter but her mother is a keen musician and a good photographer!
Comment from estory
I liked this. the meter here really kind of emulates the banging on the keys of the baby, so it worked. The rhymes give it that great sense of innocence as well. I think you did a good job to stay in the parameters of the form and create something fresh and fun within it estory
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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I liked this. the meter here really kind of emulates the banging on the keys of the baby, so it worked. The rhymes give it that great sense of innocence as well. I think you did a good job to stay in the parameters of the form and create something fresh and fun within it estory
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind review of Making Music, Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Cute photo, as always,Tony.
-She is quite the talent.
-I like the poem very much--
how the young child just plays away with no plan,
and "Such joy she'll give...
to soothe the strife
of daily life."
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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-Cute photo, as always,Tony.
-She is quite the talent.
-I like the poem very much--
how the young child just plays away with no plan,
and "Such joy she'll give...
to soothe the strife
of daily life."
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Good to hear from you, Pam. Little Teagan is developing by leaps and bounds. Quite a little character now!
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Thanks for your reply, Tony.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is very cute Tony of your granddaughter at her baby grand. The calming balm of music 'to soothe the strife of daily life' that sounds so soothing in itself.Nicely done with this Minute poem good luck in the contest.
I'm trying to catch up on some reviewing so have done all of yours at once, you don't have to feel obliged to send individual replies though.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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This is very cute Tony of your granddaughter at her baby grand. The calming balm of music 'to soothe the strife of daily life' that sounds so soothing in itself.Nicely done with this Minute poem good luck in the contest.
I'm trying to catch up on some reviewing so have done all of yours at once, you don't have to feel obliged to send individual replies though.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much for your swathe of reviews, Valda. All much appreciated. I am way behind with answering reviews, I'm afraid. I posted far too much more or less at the same time and became inundated! Now that the first flurry of the new year is over, I shall settle back into a more leisurely pace!
Comment from sandy montgomery
I trully enjoyed your piece. Two of my nieces had toy pianos. They loved them. Neither plays but the older one sings and is in a choir. What a joy it is to watch little ones discover the world. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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I trully enjoyed your piece. Two of my nieces had toy pianos. They loved them. Neither plays but the older one sings and is in a choir. What a joy it is to watch little ones discover the world. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Many thanks for your review of Making Music. Delighted that one of your nieces is finding joy in music.
Comment from IndianaIrish
A great Minute poem and entry for the contest, Tony. Love the use of enjambment to connect the lines and bring a great future pianist to the spotlight of stardom. Best wishes.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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A great Minute poem and entry for the contest, Tony. Love the use of enjambment to connect the lines and bring a great future pianist to the spotlight of stardom. Best wishes.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Many thanks for your review of Making Music, Karyn. Much appreciated. Tony
