haiku duet (gills-gasping fish)
Haiku Club Challenge # 4 air86 total reviews
Comment from winnona
I liked the subject of this haiku. You captured the feeling of the eagle catching the fish. The poems are well written and you can feel the eagle gliding across the water. Then catching the fish in his talons . Then gracefully moving up into the sky. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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I liked the subject of this haiku. You captured the feeling of the eagle catching the fish. The poems are well written and you can feel the eagle gliding across the water. Then catching the fish in his talons . Then gracefully moving up into the sky. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Winnona, for your review of my animated haiku. I appreciate it.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Sis Cat:
If I had to choose a favorite of the two it would be the first one. I especially liked the transition from line one to line two: fish - swishes, the alliteration in the first line was nice, too, also transitioning the "G" sound into the second line.
Nice work!
Kim
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Hi Sis Cat:
If I had to choose a favorite of the two it would be the first one. I especially liked the transition from line one to line two: fish - swishes, the alliteration in the first line was nice, too, also transitioning the "G" sound into the second line.
Nice work!
Kim
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kim, for your review and for pointing out your favorite and what made it so: "fish swishes." I appreciate it.
Comment from Lu Saluna
OMGosh, your first one is so awesome. The eagle taking the first for a ride in the air. What a vivid image. "air apparent" a fantastic satori. I can imagine the fish struggling to breath.
The second haiku is very good as well.
eagle flies fish
towards spring eaglet's gaping beak
seafood flown daily
The image is very beautiful, baby eagles waiting for their food via air delivery from mom or dad. Very picturesque.
A terrific haiku duet!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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OMGosh, your first one is so awesome. The eagle taking the first for a ride in the air. What a vivid image. "air apparent" a fantastic satori. I can imagine the fish struggling to breath.
The second haiku is very good as well.
eagle flies fish
towards spring eaglet's gaping beak
seafood flown daily
The image is very beautiful, baby eagles waiting for their food via air delivery from mom or dad. Very picturesque.
A terrific haiku duet!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Lu, for your review of my "terrific haiku duet." I appreciate it.
Comment from Sherman541
Love the picture and poem. Poor fish and yet good the Eagle can eat. Tells the tale of existence - survival of the fittest - haiku duet (air) unsure of what this means but I think it seems to me that haiku is a very light and airy type of poetry or maybe that is only two I have read so far. Love both of them I read. - Great Job - Sarah
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Love the picture and poem. Poor fish and yet good the Eagle can eat. Tells the tale of existence - survival of the fittest - haiku duet (air) unsure of what this means but I think it seems to me that haiku is a very light and airy type of poetry or maybe that is only two I have read so far. Love both of them I read. - Great Job - Sarah
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Sarah, for your review. the FanStory Haiku Club are writing haiku this week on the subject of air. I am glad my haiku duet "Tells the tale of existence - survival of the fittest."
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you are welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku duet. An eagle can easily scoop up a fish from the water and flies with it to the nests where the eaglets are waiting hungrily.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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A very well-written haiku duet. An eagle can easily scoop up a fish from the water and flies with it to the nests where the eaglets are waiting hungrily.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review. I was astounded to see a bald eagle carry a fish.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I love it, I love it. Very well done haikus and I love the interconnected lines and the AAAhhh in each one. 'seafood flown daily' was my favorite
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I love it, I love it. Very well done haikus and I love the interconnected lines and the AAAhhh in each one. 'seafood flown daily' was my favorite
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Barb, for giving my haiku duet its first review. I am glad you love it, love it.
