haiku duet (gills-gasping fish)
Haiku Club Challenge # 4 air86 total reviews
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Cat, this photograph shows us the way the bald eagle fishes for food for his/her young family. Your haiku's tells us of what is happening in (1), that has the fish unable to free itself from the grasp of the talons and in (2) tell the readers that the fish caught is headed where and why and it, the fishing is done daily.
Well done my friend,,,,,,
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Cat, this photograph shows us the way the bald eagle fishes for food for his/her young family. Your haiku's tells us of what is happening in (1), that has the fish unable to free itself from the grasp of the talons and in (2) tell the readers that the fish caught is headed where and why and it, the fishing is done daily.
Well done my friend,,,,,,
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Oh, thank you, Jim, for your review. I tell stories with my haiku and the pictures I select for them. Seeing an eagle fly a fish a mile inland over my backyard is a sight I will always remember.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sis Cat: of course I love this poetry of yours!!!!
*** stars to you ***
We have hawks and eagles in our skies.
Decorah eagles is a website to watch.
Eagles like fresh best!
Happy New blessed year to you!
flylikeaneagle
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Sis Cat: of course I love this poetry of yours!!!!
*** stars to you ***
We have hawks and eagles in our skies.
Decorah eagles is a website to watch.
Eagles like fresh best!
Happy New blessed year to you!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Of all the reviewers, of course, flylikeaneagle, would love these haiku! Seeing an eagle fly a fish a mile inland over my backyard is a sight I will always remember. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Sis Cat two clever haikus for the air challenge I particularly liked the Satori of seafood flown daily. Excellent image and I am sure this inspired your thoughts Cheer Christine
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Hi Sis Cat two clever haikus for the air challenge I particularly liked the Satori of seafood flown daily. Excellent image and I am sure this inspired your thoughts Cheer Christine
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Christine, for your review of my "two clever haikus for the air challenge." Seeing an eagle fly a fish a mile inland over my backyard is a sight I will always remember. Cheers.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Two very clever Haikus. I like it when there's a verbal twist at the end.
Air apparent is hilarious, and seafood flown daily. Very cute.
I also like the way you tied a beautiful picture into poems about the same.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Two very clever Haikus. I like it when there's a verbal twist at the end.
Air apparent is hilarious, and seafood flown daily. Very cute.
I also like the way you tied a beautiful picture into poems about the same.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Rhonda, for your review of my "two very clever Haikus." I am glad you found my satori hilarious and cute.
Comment from ciliverde
I think you have done this perfectly (not that I'm an expert) and on top of that, you've given us two of them. Your satori lines are very good and they do stand alone, which I've been told is important. Very nice job with this, Andre. Considering where you live, I'm sure you've seen this scene lived out more than once. I miss living right by the ocean! Now I live 30 minutes away, which is too far. My last day in Eureka, I saw an osprey carrying a fish - just like this. Very nice action in this as well.
Carol
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I think you have done this perfectly (not that I'm an expert) and on top of that, you've given us two of them. Your satori lines are very good and they do stand alone, which I've been told is important. Very nice job with this, Andre. Considering where you live, I'm sure you've seen this scene lived out more than once. I miss living right by the ocean! Now I live 30 minutes away, which is too far. My last day in Eureka, I saw an osprey carrying a fish - just like this. Very nice action in this as well.
Carol
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Yes, Carol, I wrote fifty lines of drafts for the last haiku and I discovered I had enough material left over to write a second. No, I only saw this scene once. Seeing an eagle fly a fish a mile inland over my backyard is a sight I will always remember. Thank you for your generous, six star review of my action-packed haiku.
Comment from adoman
Very good writing. And yeah, could not agree more. No safe fish for this flying predator. Continue expressing your short but exciting thoughts.
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Very good writing. And yeah, could not agree more. No safe fish for this flying predator. Continue expressing your short but exciting thoughts.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Yes, adoman, I was just thinking, "Fish, don't swim close to the surface." Thank you for your review. I will continue to express my "short but exciting thoughts."
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
These are very good and certainly would be something to see. I enjoyed your haiku and they are in fine form. Nice pairing, my friend~Debbie
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These are very good and certainly would be something to see. I enjoyed your haiku and they are in fine form. Nice pairing, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Debbie, for your review. Seeing an eagle fly a fish a mile inland over my backyard is a sight I will always remember.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sis Cat
I like your double haiku ( so realistic )
I myself have seen a Hawk snitch a bird flying and the hawk snaked it with a blink of my eye
Gert
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Hello Sis Cat
I like your double haiku ( so realistic )
I myself have seen a Hawk snitch a bird flying and the hawk snaked it with a blink of my eye
Gert
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Yes, Gert, seeing the skill of predatory birds amaze me. Thank you for your review of a realistic double haiku.
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You re welcome Sis cat
Thank you letting us standard members review your writing
Gert
Comment from SweetStreet00
I love the poem, especially the way it flows and how the words seamlessly connect. The artwork also adds some nice imagery to the haikus.
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I love the poem, especially the way it flows and how the words seamlessly connect. The artwork also adds some nice imagery to the haikus.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Thank you, SweetStreet00, for your review and love of my haikus.
Comment from nomi338
Our parents have always tried to feed us, the conscientious have always tried to lead us. The majestic eagle is the epitome of the faithful parent, The mother eagle will fly long distances, wait patiently for her opportunity to grab a pleasing and fulfilling meal for her offspring then return with to feed them. She is to be admired.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Our parents have always tried to feed us, the conscientious have always tried to lead us. The majestic eagle is the epitome of the faithful parent, The mother eagle will fly long distances, wait patiently for her opportunity to grab a pleasing and fulfilling meal for her offspring then return with to feed them. She is to be admired.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
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Yes, nomi338, seeing that eagle travel inland from the bay with a fish in its talons amazed me. Thank you for your review.
