haiku duet (gills-gasping fish)
Haiku Club Challenge # 4 air86 total reviews
Comment from kriver
Hi,
I really liked the two Haiku.
The picture goes right along with them.
I have always liked eagles and I collect pictures and figurines of them.
Over all two interesting works.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Hi,
I really liked the two Haiku.
The picture goes right along with them.
I have always liked eagles and I collect pictures and figurines of them.
Over all two interesting works.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you, K River, for your generous review of "two interesting works." I appreciate it. best regards to you, too.
Comment from palaceofmind
You have a true understanding of this form! The fact that you are able to tell such an action filled story using haiku is impressive. The line "air apparent" is particularly stunning. Nice job!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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You have a true understanding of this form! The fact that you are able to tell such an action filled story using haiku is impressive. The line "air apparent" is particularly stunning. Nice job!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Yes, palaceofmind, I am amazed at how much action I squeezed into these haiku. Thank you for your impressive review.
Comment from l.raven
HI Sis Cat, I am sooooo enjoying reading all these haiku poems...Gypsy is such a wonderful teacher...the eagle my friend is my second most favorite bird...the snow geese is the first...I love how they fly...both very beautiful and strong birds...I love your poem...and the picture is beautiful...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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HI Sis Cat, I am sooooo enjoying reading all these haiku poems...Gypsy is such a wonderful teacher...the eagle my friend is my second most favorite bird...the snow geese is the first...I love how they fly...both very beautiful and strong birds...I love your poem...and the picture is beautiful...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Linda, for your review. I am glad you sooooo enjoyed reading my haiku. Cheers.
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you are so welcome Sis Cat...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Jumbo J
Hey Sis((((((((((((((((... great visual to add your descriptive words to.
Two very visual haiku's that capture the food for thought in lingering flow.
I live on a river, by the sea... I watch osprey's daily catching their children's quarry... never tire of seeing it... it's something so special each and every time.
Really enjoyed reading the magic of your words.
With our thoughts we create,
flying fish.
James.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Hey Sis((((((((((((((((... great visual to add your descriptive words to.
Two very visual haiku's that capture the food for thought in lingering flow.
I live on a river, by the sea... I watch osprey's daily catching their children's quarry... never tire of seeing it... it's something so special each and every time.
Really enjoyed reading the magic of your words.
With our thoughts we create,
flying fish.
James.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, James, for your descriptive review of "Two very visual haiku's that capture the food for thought in lingering flow." I am glad you enjoyed reading the magic of my words.
Comment from Leineco
Great pairing SC - your imagery gives us two "visions" - one from the
fishes point of perspective and one from the fisher's perspective, with
two cleverly utilized "wording twists" as satori lines.
Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Great pairing SC - your imagery gives us two "visions" - one from the
fishes point of perspective and one from the fisher's perspective, with
two cleverly utilized "wording twists" as satori lines.
Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Yes, Leineco, I love my word twists from two different perspectives. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Alchera
Two twinned skillfully written haiku which mingle one into the other throughout their concrete natural images and cleverly selected alliterations and picture.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Two twinned skillfully written haiku which mingle one into the other throughout their concrete natural images and cleverly selected alliterations and picture.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Yes, Alchera, I am quite pleased at how these "Two twinned skillfully written haiku" turned out with "their concrete natural images and cleverly selected alliterations and picture." Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The eagle is such a majestic bird and also a caring parent, in most cases.
-I like both of your haiku very much.
-I like how you relate catching the fish to getting it to the young.
-Format is good, excellent concrete imagery, and a particularly good satori in the first one.
-Thanks for sharing and have a good 2017.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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-The eagle is such a majestic bird and also a caring parent, in most cases.
-I like both of your haiku very much.
-I like how you relate catching the fish to getting it to the young.
-Format is good, excellent concrete imagery, and a particularly good satori in the first one.
-Thanks for sharing and have a good 2017.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Pam, for your review of my haiku about "a majestic bird and also a caring parent." Have a good 2017, too.
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You are very welcome and thank you for the reply.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Air apparent...stunning interpretation of this phrase!
Seafood flown daily...Though I was in a restaurant :D
Wonderful in imagery and in content, here Andre. I like the two part Haiku that follows up with the first part.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Air apparent...stunning interpretation of this phrase!
Seafood flown daily...Though I was in a restaurant :D
Wonderful in imagery and in content, here Andre. I like the two part Haiku that follows up with the first part.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Mary, for your review of my two part haiku. I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from TKField
Ah, a two for one Hi-Coo throw-down. Like the eagle, these soar to heaven on wings of, well.....eagles. Nice play on words and clever analogy (heir apparent, seafood flown, etc.). Very evocative with nice visual imagery....Gaping beak, gasping fish. Good use of alliteration.... Gills Gasping, flies fish. Like Woody Allen once said....nature is like one big restaurant.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Ah, a two for one Hi-Coo throw-down. Like the eagle, these soar to heaven on wings of, well.....eagles. Nice play on words and clever analogy (heir apparent, seafood flown, etc.). Very evocative with nice visual imagery....Gaping beak, gasping fish. Good use of alliteration.... Gills Gasping, flies fish. Like Woody Allen once said....nature is like one big restaurant.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Yes, TKField, nature is like one big restaurant, and it is also a great source for poetic ideas. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Javed05
Don't know how to review this brief piece. Never written such a short poem. Your piece depicts your thoughts well. It has got good imagery. Thanks
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Don't know how to review this brief piece. Never written such a short poem. Your piece depicts your thoughts well. It has got good imagery. Thanks
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Javed05, for your review. I am glad you found it has good imagery.
