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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "haiku (Ireland's green earth)*"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
41 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI, Kar
Greetings from the frozen, snowy Shenandoah Valley! The sight of the lush green meadows and hills of Ireland made me wish I could find Scotty's number so he could 'beam me' over.
I enjoyed your haiku this evening. I know you're Irish through and through, and your love for its land shines brightly.
You've all the elements of the traditional haiku in fine order. Juxtaposition of two concrete images, a satori, no desk haiku, and capturing a moment in time.
The only question I have is does the use of 'patchwork greetings' serve to invoke personification of the land?
-Ray
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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HI, Kar
Greetings from the frozen, snowy Shenandoah Valley! The sight of the lush green meadows and hills of Ireland made me wish I could find Scotty's number so he could 'beam me' over.
I enjoyed your haiku this evening. I know you're Irish through and through, and your love for its land shines brightly.
You've all the elements of the traditional haiku in fine order. Juxtaposition of two concrete images, a satori, no desk haiku, and capturing a moment in time.
The only question I have is does the use of 'patchwork greetings' serve to invoke personification of the land?
-Ray
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you, ARay, for your very generous rating and awesome review for my haiku. I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery, and your kind words are always appreciated. I thought long and hard Bout "patchwork greetings" being personification, but de iced it wasn't. The first time I went to Ireland and saw the land divided into squares by stones or hedges, it felt like it was greeting me home. Does that make sense?
Thank you, PM for your wonderful response.
Smiles,
Kar :-)
Comment from irishauthorme
You touched my heart. The emerald, bordered fields, spirits of Irish heroes faint in the gray clouds, sweet smell of last nights soft rain, stony paths Saint Francis trod, the misty valleys between the low hills. Ah, sure and we dwell in foreign lands, but never was more true, "Home is where the heart is," and our hearts are in our beloved Ireland.
irish
P.S. Please see my review of your birthday devotional from MissMerri
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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You touched my heart. The emerald, bordered fields, spirits of Irish heroes faint in the gray clouds, sweet smell of last nights soft rain, stony paths Saint Francis trod, the misty valleys between the low hills. Ah, sure and we dwell in foreign lands, but never was more true, "Home is where the heart is," and our hearts are in our beloved Ireland.
irish
P.S. Please see my review of your birthday devotional from MissMerri
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Oh, Irish, I'm so pleased this little haiku reached your Irish heart. Thank you so much for your generous rating, awesome review, and kind words. The feeling of coming home was overwhelming both times I was fortunate enough to visit Ireland. Thank you, sir, for your wonderful response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
PS...your review for MM's birthday poem made me cry. Thank you for all you said, my friend.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Karyn
I've always enjoyed looking at pictures of the handiwork of farmers from above. You use the "patchwork", and indeed it is. My wife has made baby quilts like this.
Are you allowed to use alliteration in haiku poetry? (So many rules, I gave up on haiku long ago.) I paused to think about the lines in your poem, and I thought about the poor farmers who had to clear the land for gardens... cutting down trees and bushes, digging out rocks and piling them to the side... cairns. What do you think of this for an ending? ... "peasant patterns" ... and if your mind wanders enough, you could slip an "l" in there after reading... "pleasant patterns". I just didn't understand "welcome home", but perhaps you could tell me the connection to the first two lines.
Hugs
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Hi Karyn
I've always enjoyed looking at pictures of the handiwork of farmers from above. You use the "patchwork", and indeed it is. My wife has made baby quilts like this.
Are you allowed to use alliteration in haiku poetry? (So many rules, I gave up on haiku long ago.) I paused to think about the lines in your poem, and I thought about the poor farmers who had to clear the land for gardens... cutting down trees and bushes, digging out rocks and piling them to the side... cairns. What do you think of this for an ending? ... "peasant patterns" ... and if your mind wanders enough, you could slip an "l" in there after reading... "pleasant patterns". I just didn't understand "welcome home", but perhaps you could tell me the connection to the first two lines.
Hugs
Kimbob
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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It's so wonderful to hear from you, Kimbob! Thank you for your great review and kind words for my haiku. Yes, alliteration is allowed in haiku, but they encourage to use only scarcely. To answer your question, each time I flew to Ireland and saw the land divided up by shrubs or rocks, it felt like a welcome home greeting. I was overcome by the feeling I was home.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Good answer, Karyn! A patchwork does have a homey feel.
Comment from Ella25
I love your haiku It describes the way you look at art and it is beautiful. It is a well balanced and picturesque composition full of greenery of Irland. Superb. Blessings, Ella
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I love your haiku It describes the way you look at art and it is beautiful. It is a well balanced and picturesque composition full of greenery of Irland. Superb. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Ella, I'm so honored by your awesome review and generous rating for my haiku. Thank you for your kind words, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are welcome, Karyn. Smile :)
Comment from MissMerri
A beautiful haiku, written by one of our best haiku writers ever, in my opinion. I love how you do this but can't seem to do it myself. "Welcome home" is the perfect satori line... especially since that's where our ancestors came from. The picture is beautiful too. Happy Birthday Beautiful!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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A beautiful haiku, written by one of our best haiku writers ever, in my opinion. I love how you do this but can't seem to do it myself. "Welcome home" is the perfect satori line... especially since that's where our ancestors came from. The picture is beautiful too. Happy Birthday Beautiful!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you from my Irish heart for your wonderful review, generous rating, and kind words for my haiku, MM. I'm so honored by your compliments for my haiku writing. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and thank you for the extra star, my friend. You're alwYs so supportive and encouraging to me.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from tfawcus
There's nothing quite like that patchwork landscape of vivid green when one returns home to land in Ireland - on the rare occasions that you can see it through the rain! Nice combination of picture and poem.
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There's nothing quite like that patchwork landscape of vivid green when one returns home to land in Ireland - on the rare occasions that you can see it through the rain! Nice combination of picture and poem.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for this great review and kind comments for my haiku. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your encouraging response, Tony. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from humpwhistle
And a warm patchwork quilt it is, lass.
Never been there. I here I'm too tall for the pubs.
That's okay, I'd be flat on me back in a trice anyhow.
Ireland is such wonderful sod and fodder for a poet.
Good luck with your new book.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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And a warm patchwork quilt it is, lass.
Never been there. I here I'm too tall for the pubs.
That's okay, I'd be flat on me back in a trice anyhow.
Ireland is such wonderful sod and fodder for a poet.
Good luck with your new book.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you, how, for your awesome review and comments for my haiku. Seeing the squared-off land with hedges or rocks dug from from the earth truly felt like a welcome home greeting to me. Boyo, I'm sure once you get through the door of any Irish pub, there would be a seat with your name on it that would fit you comfortably for hours. Thank you so much for that shiny gold star!
Smiles,
Indy :-)
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Thank you, how, for your awesome review and comments for my haiku. Seeing the squared-off land with hedges or rocks dug from from the earth truly felt like a welcome home greeting to me. Boyo, I'm sure once you get through the door of any Irish pub, there would be a seat with your name on it that would fit you comfortably for hours. Thank you so much for that shiny gold star!
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Oh yes, there's a lot of the Irish here my friend and I thank you so much for writing the piece. I feel just like I'm coming home. Thanks so much.
Bill O'Bier
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Oh yes, there's a lot of the Irish here my friend and I thank you so much for writing the piece. I feel just like I'm coming home. Thanks so much.
Bill O'Bier
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for your generous sixth star rating, awesome review, and kind words for my haiku, Bill. Seeing the beautiful shades of green from the plane truly feels like a welcome home message. Thank you for your kind response, Bill.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Thank you so much for your generous sixth star rating, awesome review, and kind words for my haiku, Bill. Seeing the beautiful shades of green from the plane truly feels like a welcome home message. Thank you for your kind response, Bill.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi IndianaIrish - this is a well met challenge. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and line three is a very good satori. Your choice of display is very appropriate - loads of lovely green (thanks to all the rain for which Ireland is famous? is that the right word? LOL) - but then this applies to all of UK. Warm regards and thank you for the read - Dorothy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Hi IndianaIrish - this is a well met challenge. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and line three is a very good satori. Your choice of display is very appropriate - loads of lovely green (thanks to all the rain for which Ireland is famous? is that the right word? LOL) - but then this applies to all of UK. Warm regards and thank you for the read - Dorothy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for this great review and kind comments for my haiku. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your encouraging response, Dorothy. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Ooohhhh I love your haiga haiku. It's gorgeous! And it is is very insightful too. The picture goes nicely with your satori. Great job, my friend. Thank you for adding to our book.
Gypsy Sensei
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Ooohhhh I love your haiga haiku. It's gorgeous! And it is is very insightful too. The picture goes nicely with your satori. Great job, my friend. Thank you for adding to our book.
Gypsy Sensei
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thank you for this great review and kind comments for my haiku. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your encouraging response, Gypsy. Thanks!
One question...I thought a haiga was a haiku embedded in artwork, and not a haiku that uses artwork along with the poem. If you have time, can you help my confusion?
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
