haiku (earthworms swarm sidewalk)
Haiku Club Challenge # 3 earth62 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Earthworms are not one of my favorite delicacies. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Earthworms are not one of my favorite delicacies. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you, c_lucas, for your delicious review. Thanks also for complimenting the flow of my words.
Comment from WalkerMan
Yes, I suppose some will be squished while vulnerable on the sidewalk, though that beats drowning underground for the majority. I like all the slithery "s" sounds in this. Well done and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yes, I suppose some will be squished while vulnerable on the sidewalk, though that beats drowning underground for the majority. I like all the slithery "s" sounds in this. Well done and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Oh, thank you, WalkerMan, for your review. What's a worm to do? Sidewalk or drowning? Gee! I am glad you appreciated the slithery "s" sounds.
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You're welcome, Andre. Yes, it's not a great choice. Anyway, may you enjoy a safe, healthy, happy, and prosperous new year. -- Mike
Comment from Irish Rain
A very yucky great haiku, ha ha. I can even bait my own hook when we go trout fishing...but I can't look at them. Yuck. Happy New Year!!!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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A very yucky great haiku, ha ha. I can even bait my own hook when we go trout fishing...but I can't look at them. Yuck. Happy New Year!!!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Oh, thank you, Irish Rain, for your review of my "yucky great haiku." You can bait your hook with this one. Happy New Year!
Comment from Susanjohn
ok, so that picture is kinda grossing me out a bit!!...but mother nature sure does need those earth worms!! loved the haiku! still deciding on the picture! LOL
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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ok, so that picture is kinda grossing me out a bit!!...but mother nature sure does need those earth worms!! loved the haiku! still deciding on the picture! LOL
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yes, Susanjohn, I debated whether or not to use a picture for this haiku because my poem's imagery is so strong without the picture. Yes, Mother nature needs those earthworms. Thank you for your review.
Comment from heyjude
Sis Cat, very nice. That slither, squiggle, squish makes me feel a.little creeper out though
Yuck worms. Great alliteration in swarm sidewalk and slither, squiggle, squish
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Sis Cat, very nice. That slither, squiggle, squish makes me feel a.little creeper out though
Yuck worms. Great alliteration in swarm sidewalk and slither, squiggle, squish
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yes, heyjude, the only thing yuckier than worms is yet another haiku about swans. I decided to write about something I see everyday. Thank you for your review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
It's a warm winter that finds earthworms shallow enough to be washed onto the sidewalk by a rain. Squish indeed! A 5-7-5 haiku with a touch of humor. Happy New Year, Sis Cat. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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It's a warm winter that finds earthworms shallow enough to be washed onto the sidewalk by a rain. Squish indeed! A 5-7-5 haiku with a touch of humor. Happy New Year, Sis Cat. :) Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yes, Nancy, squish, indeed. I am glad you got the humor. Thank you for your review and Happy New Year to you, too.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice gross picture of worms. Looks like good fishing bait. Though I am not a fisherperson, I did find my share of worms for those in my family who did.
You must live in a warmer climate than I do for worms only come after in Spring and Summer rains here.
Keep writing
Happy New Year.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Nice gross picture of worms. Looks like good fishing bait. Though I am not a fisherperson, I did find my share of worms for those in my family who did.
You must live in a warmer climate than I do for worms only come after in Spring and Summer rains here.
Keep writing
Happy New Year.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yes, dragonpoet, I live in warm California which has worms year around. Thank you for your review.
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No problem.
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Comment from LIJ Red
When I was a lad, it took a pick and shovel to unearth fishbait. Now they crawl
all over the paved driveway. Seems it's the same where you are. Excellent Haiku.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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When I was a lad, it took a pick and shovel to unearth fishbait. Now they crawl
all over the paved driveway. Seems it's the same where you are. Excellent Haiku.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Yeah, LIJ Red, you don't need a shovel to get these worms. Thank you for your review.
Comment from mermaids
Love your last line of "slither, squiggle, squish". It appeals to the senses and makes the earthworms alive in your words. Excellent use of words that creates a feel for and a scene of nature.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Love your last line of "slither, squiggle, squish". It appeals to the senses and makes the earthworms alive in your words. Excellent use of words that creates a feel for and a scene of nature.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Mermaids, for your review. I am glad my haiku appealed to your senses and made these worms come alive.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Earthworms are hermaphrodites: Every worm has both male and female organs and produces sperm and eggs. Under favorable conditions, they can breed at 6 weeks of age. That's one reason why earthworm populations grow rapidly when enough food and water are available to sustain them. Thanks so much for the poem and artwork - I thought both were great.
Bill
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Earthworms are hermaphrodites: Every worm has both male and female organs and produces sperm and eggs. Under favorable conditions, they can breed at 6 weeks of age. That's one reason why earthworm populations grow rapidly when enough food and water are available to sustain them. Thanks so much for the poem and artwork - I thought both were great.
Bill
Comment Written 01-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for your informative review. I did not know that about earthworms. That's another haiku. Thanks.
