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haiku (earthworms swarm sidewalk)

Haiku Club Challenge # 3 earth

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Comment from robyn corum
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Andre,

you seem to have a knack for turning these out rather quickly and with a sharp edge to them. I like 'em that way. *smile* Very fun and enjoyable. Thanks!

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
    Yes, Robyn, it took me two days to write them. I carried a notebook with me at all times. I wrote fifty lines of drafts to come up with the final six. Thank you for your review of my "very fun and enjoyable" haiku which have "a sharp edge to them."
Comment from ~Dovey
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Hi Sis Cat!

The slimy worm picture was unsavory but the poem is thorough delight. What an excellent use of the s and w alliteration and consonance throughout this piece. One of the best haiku I have read lately.

Great job!

Kim

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
    Oh, thank you, Kim for your generous review of my haiku on an unsavory subject. I appreciate it.
Comment from Janet Foor
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Excellent haiku. I can picture those slithering, squiggling, squishing worms crawling across my sidewalk and lawn. Ewwww

Good job.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2017
    Thank you, thank you, thank you, Janet, for giving my poem its last review before its certificate expired. Because if the ewwww factor, this poem was my least successful post, earning no six stars. My poem grossed people out. I may not try that again. Thank you very much for putting the final nail in the coffin of this poem. Now I have posted a new, less ewwww one.
Comment from Poetic Friend
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Oh my God, when I looked at your artwork, I had no idea what to expect from the poem.

Wow, your profile describes your work well. You are a storyteller, and you told the story of those worms being swished.

Great word economy, imagery and alliteration.

Thank you for sharing, and happy new year.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Yes, Poetic Friend, I tell stories with my haiku. Contemplating my next haiku as I walked home from the gym, I am amazed at how much drama I can squeeze into seventeen syllables or less if I choose the right concrete words. Thank you for your review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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YUCK!!!! My youngest son, when he was in first grade, he would give a girl a worm and if she wasn't afraid, that was his girlfriend. Oh my! That being said, I did enjoy reading your lovely poem. OH YEA!!! One year I had a worm farm in my classroom, when I walked in one morning the worms had escaped and and were all over the carpet.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Yes, Barbara, that was a great way for your son to get a girlfriend! Worms on your carpets?! One of the great things about sharing my yucky haiku, is that people like you share their own yucky worm stories. Now, let's see if you will post your memory. Thank you for your review.
Comment from elainec4
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This was super--but yucky subject!!! Your words created an image equal to your artwork. Enjoyed reading your work. The Haiku Club Challenge does sound intriguing.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Yes, you should join us for the Haiku Club Challenge. The next one starts tomorrow. Thank you for reviewing my poem on a yucky subject.
Comment from WriteSins!
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A very lovely haiku indeed! It is very difficult to get points across in such few words, but you get a very pleasant depiction of the earth across very nicely. Excellent work and keep it up! Happy New Year!

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Thank you, WriteSins!, for your review. I will keep it up. I am working on my next haiku now. Thanks.
Comment from Jackarrie
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Hi Sis CAT
I really do not like worms, but they do have a purpose in this life, I see the birds are very happy after the rain when they appear. Well done. Mary

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Yes, Mary, the birds rejoice and feast when the rains end. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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What a great haiku, even though the picture gave me creeps. After all, they are harmless creatures, even though not too easy on the eye, lol. Nice S alliteration in the first line. The imagery and visuals are phenomenal.

Lots of luck in the contest.

Love, Y.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Y, for your review of my haiku. I am glad you liked the S alliteration, the imagery and the visuals.
Comment from robina1978
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Excellent photo that complements your tiny poem very well. It is a true Haiku about earthworms. Your group is getting big. Also a Happy New year for you.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
    Yes, Robina, our group is growing daily. The amount of haiku output amazes me. Each one is different, too. Thank you for your review. Happy New Year to you, too.