Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Maria, very nice. I love rhyming, but there are times when I sure struggle with it. I like to read others lovely poems that are free verse. I just can't write it. I enjoyed this. I think the first version is really cute.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for reading, Judy.
Just one question: what first version are you referring to?

reply by heyjude on 27-Dec-2016

I'm sure it was supposed to be verse. My crazy phone tries to correct whatever I type.

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Now I understand. Thanks.

Comment from Luna

Excellent

You're right, Maria, that is a lovely picture.

I think your honesty is great and I love your writing si go for it!

However I had a fun time reading this poem, nothing at all wrong with it!

Love Jeni

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for reading and for your review, Jeni.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

What "a sweet, heart-warming pic" to inspire your poem. I love the casualness and the messiness of your verse to match this surprising discovery. I enjoyed your delicate description of the vole which reminds me of a fairy. Did you take this picture or find it? This poem is a charming gift to Robyn and Linda. Thank you for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

I found the picture on Facebook and loved it because my daughter's name is Iris.
Thanks for reading.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. We all are all unique in writing style and have our own preferences. We can just accept and enjoy each other in our differences.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

You're right, Sandra. Variety is the spice of life.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Well, I like your poetry, too, Maria. This post is so cute. Photo is precious. You are talented to write both poetry and prose well. Little animals like the image of this one are irresistible. Marilyn

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

It is cute indeed.
Thanks for reading.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was so sweet, and I am sure both Robyn and Linda appreciate your poem. It was well done, it rhymed where it was supposed to and didn't where it was not meant to. I adored the picture- the combination of two of nature's beauties at peace with each other. Great job, thanks.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for your review, Aryr.

reply by aryr on 27-Dec-2016

You are very welcome Maria

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

LOL now that is what I call one for everyone. Prose, free verse, rhyming both abab and aabb. Wow all in one and you made it humorous too. Well no one can say I rated without judging...it is cute and perfect for all

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for your very kind review, Barb.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Virus rhymes with iris
so does Molly Cyrus
But don't get to hung up on rhyme
All it will do is tire us!

Keep on rhyming don't ever stop
Give that prose a rest
then one day you can cop
being called a rhyming pest

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Yeah, but virus is not a pretty word, Mark. I wanted something cuter.
Thanks for your review.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Maria, this was a fun read. I like rhyme too but most often write in free verse. I went to google search to find words that rhyme with iris and there is a long list of rank 1,2,&3 rhymes. I saved you from being bored because I didn't have the heart to copy and paste the words here. LOL
Patricia

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for reading, Patricia.
I use Rhyme Zone and there were no rhymes there that I found appropriate. What do you mean by rank 1,2 and 3 rhymes?

reply by patcelaw on 27-Dec-2016

rank one would be very close rhyme, rank 2 would be near rhyme, and rank 3 would be maybe rhymes.

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks!

Comment from Ryn

Excellent

Darling photo, and cute poem. I especially like it because it is short and sweet and you did not force the issue on many levels about your choice of wording.
Short and sweet poems are my favorite. Using artwork that inspired you works.

Good job,
Ryn

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 Comment Written 27-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for reading, Ryn.