Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. It rhymes well, but I think it could flow a little better. The ending of each stanza seems a little forced or too long. May make another sentence where you have the semicolons. I'm not sure.

angel 123

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016

Hi Angel123 Thanks for reading my Florette and for your feedback and I can see how you may think the last line of each stanza is too long but that is the style requirement every line has 8 syllables except the last line which must have 12 with syllable 8 rhyming with the last word iin line 3 ( see notes to explain the format) It was a fun challenge to do and I am very peased you stopped by for a read. I hope that may help explain the style a little better .Give it a go it is fun to do Cheers for your support and have a great Xmas and New Year Christine😃

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

YOur syllable count seems spot on and I did not try this because I just could not figure it out but seeing yours helped it make sense. Very well done and content is consistent with the whole piece

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi barb, Thanks very much for your comments and no I had not tried this before either but once I reviewed a couple of others I got the hang of it so I am glad to have been help to you. So try it, it is quite a good challenge and I had some fun also. I love to try new styles and build up my knowledge on the various ways of writing poetry. Have been busy with life in general so haven't been on FS for a little while but it is addictive LOL Cheers Barb for your lovely support this year and have a great Xmas and New Year Christine xx

Comment from jmcfadden1528

Excellent

I found this very inspirational. I liked the line about living each day as if it's your last. Life is too short to live in a negative mindset. Thanks for this one. You might want to look at my poem "what is fear?" It seems to compliment the message in this poem.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi jmnfadden1528 Thank you for your lovely review and kind words for my florette ( first time try) so I am pleased you found this inspirational and I will certainly check out your poem 'what is fear' as soon as possible Cheers to you Christine😃

Comment from jaybird1

Exceptional

A splendid, well thoughtout poem with depth.I love the unique and unusual rhymning
pattern.It isfilled with sound advice and well metered.A quality poem of exceptional
merit

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi jaybird1. Wow what a wonderful surprise this morning to find your wonderful review and 6 stars for my poem i am truly honoured from your praise of a poet of long standing, such a you are so this is much appreciated. Have a great day Cheers Christine😃😃😃

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Exceptional

Hi Chrissie - I've never heard of a Florette, but then I have been off site for some time. However, after studying it a while I got the gist and have to say you have made a really good job of this. All the rules followed yet you have not compromised your work to make it happen. It does not sound at all contrived to meet the requirements and the words and message are good and I enjoyed the read very much. I wish you well in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Dorothy, Thank you so much Dorothy for your wonderful review and 6 star rating for my Florette asn I too had never heard of this until I saw the contest so thought I would give it a try and I enjoyed this style and made me think so to have your wonderful rating is such a bonus and I am pleased you liked this and thanks for your good wishes With many Cheers to your Christine😃😃😃

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Very interesting and it definitely follows the criteria. It presents an important message regarding the value of time and what we do with it. It was educational and entertaining. Very enjoyable to read and had a comfortable flow. Thanks for your notations as well. Great job, thanks.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Ary, I am pleased to have you feedback and I am glad you found this flowed well .I have never tried a Florette before so found this a good challenge. Have a great Xmas and new Year and thanks so very much for your lovely support this year. Cheers Christine

reply by aryr on 19-Dec-2016

You are very welcome Christine. Christmas and New Years Good Wishes to you as well, keep writing so I can keep reading :-)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Florette poem. We have a certain time to live on earth and learn what life is all about. Make good use of your time while you can.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Sandra, Many thanks my friend for you lovely review and for your ongoing support over this year I truly appreciate it and you are always so generous in your rating and comments. And yes make the beat of all our precious seconds here on earth and so I now wish you a very Merry Xmas and a Happy New year. Cheers Sandra Christinex

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

I agree wholeheartedly with your sentiments. Tomorrow is not promised to us, so it is best to live today to the fullest. Also, don't leave earth with should have, would, and could have.

I love the creativeness of your metrical poem. The extended line sin the last sentence of the stanzas work effectively.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Poetic Friend, Thanks so much for your review and lovely words for my poem I am really happy that you stopped by for a read and share my sentiments. life is too short to squander the seconds away. Many Cheers to you and also for a great Xmas Christine😀

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Chrostine, a very neatly written Rosette, aptly named poetic form. With unusual rhyming, you've certainly certainly nailed this one. Great theme, some great metaphor, yes we spen our time on earth generally in wasteful wonder, nice even meter, aaba rhyming, well done. Blessings. Roy,

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Roy, Thanks for your review and as always I enjoy hearing from you and I am pleased you thought highly of my words and poetic skill with this one. Many Many Cheers Roy Christine😀

reply by royowen on 18-Dec-2016

And to you and yours Christine!

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Hi, Chrissy - an interesting form which you seem to have mastered. Both rhyme and meter work well here.

I guess the carpe diem theme is not new, but you combine it well with the looking glass imagery to give it a fresh feel. I liked the third stanza in particular:
To waste a moment spent in grief
Is giving into the time thief,
Who may take more than he's allowed
And keep you in his binding shroud; with no relief.

Steve

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Hi Steve Thanks for your read and review your words give me a lift as I was not sure if I had made the mark first try with this style, but I have enjoyed the challenge so Thanks for your encouraging words. Have a Great Xmas and New Year also Cheers Christine