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The Eternal Question

Child asks parent, parent replies

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Comment from winnona
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A well-written contest entry. I think you met the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016

Comment from PoemsOfDD
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This is a good entry for the Essence poem contest. Your syllables are in check with these two very valid questions. I did wonder if the word 'giving' in the second line might read better as 'showing'. Just food for thought. Good luck in the competition. ~DD

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
    Can't do that. One of the requirements in thecform isan internal rhyme. If not for "giving,," no go. But, yes, "showing", would have been better. Thanks for looking after me, DD. Hae you changed that fourer?
    G'day, matey,
    Don
reply by PoemsOfDD on 16-Dec-2016
    Don, I changed the fourer yesterday and sent you two messages on it. Is it not showing as a five star now? Have you not been receiving my messages? :-(
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
    Sorry you'r feeling :-( DD. As of a few minutes ago, the fourer was still a fourer. (Now 7:25 PM ET).
Comment from lancellot
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Hmm, I the first one is related to an eternal question, also why are we here? But the second you formed relates to the first and they make you pause and wonder.

Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
    Only the kid's question and the answer (not a question). Glad you gave it some thought. Thanks!