Comment from Ella25

Excellent

It is a wonderful child, the fantasy story for both, girls and boys to appreciate. Very well written with easy to understand words that flow very smoothly. The image complements it nicely. Well done and thank you for sharing. Blessings, Ella

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

thank you very much.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

I really enjoyed this piece and the verses worked really well in the context of the story. Good characterisation and I too would like to see the end of 'like awesome'!lol

fire cracker - firecracker.

"It's, it's a... - need closing speech marks here.

Tony couldn't say "snake." - in this instance the full stop belongs to the sentence, not the quote and should come outside of the quote marks.

You mean you'll still put spells on grown-ups?" - need opening speech marks here.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

you're right. Just re-read it. However, am glad you liked it.
By the way, have been curious. What does giraffmang mean?
PL

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

An excellent childer's story. You should put these together in a book and send them to a publisher, make a million bucks and split it with me for giving you the idea.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

laughing! Might just do that. Do you illustrate???

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

What a terrible predicament to lose your words. Unfortunately, it happens, and this story would strike a chord in the hearts of older people. What a great idea to steal words from the children. Their poems were great, by the way. They seemed to have better than average vocabularies, worth stealing from. Zard decides to return the words, and then Will has the idea for borrowing and returning words. Love the description of a lending library for words. I think it would be older children who could appreciate it. A bit difficult to grasp for the younger ones, maybe. judi

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

I was thinking 8-10 yrs, maybe. I haven't submitted this one yet. Thanks for the kind words
Katharine

reply by judiverse on 11-Dec-2016

HI, Katherine. Great story and anything that deals with words is important for kids. Maybe age 10 and up. judi

reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

thanks for the suggestion

reply by judiverse on 11-Dec-2016

You're very welcome. The happiest of holidays to you! judi

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Good

LOL what an imaginative piece of writing.
I had to laugh because I did not know where you were going with this one and I thought of me stammering for a lost word.lol

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

"slammering" is a new one on me. will have to remember that.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

What a wonderful idea Zard had! I can think of lots of words I'd steal so the kids would have to think of new ones. It could work on adults too. Imagine never having to hear something like 'it is what it is' again. Of course, there's always the chance they'd come up with something worse. LOL

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks!
And they would come up with something worse, "for sure".

Comment from sanejane

Excellent

I loved this wonderful story! It's so original. I love the characters' names, the children's poems are both funny and clever, and it has a moral to it. It contains all the ingredients of a good children's story. Beautifully done.

All the best,
Jane

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

thank you very much.

reply by sanejane on 10-Dec-2016

It truly is my pleasure.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is very well written you bring the main character the wizard to life really well and I think the children will love this I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.