Comment from WriteSins!

Excellent

Excellent work! The very structure if the poem helps progress it, as well as the crisp, concise word choice. Great work and keep it up!

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Why, thank you so much. I shall (endeavor). Ha ha. Pun intended.

Comment from Ella25

Excellent

So we are too for a change. We are equal and the same, no matter of the skin we wear. Inside we are like the others with kindness and care. With love falling off our tongue and hands to help when we can't. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Ella

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thank you, Ella.

Comment from johnwilson

Excellent

This is beautifully written and has all the words of a great poem. I thought the picture was a great choice to accompany your piece.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thank you, John. Your comments mean a lot to me.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Good

Another one which is a little different than the last couple. I guess I don't actually understand what chance we were given for change and what needs to be changed anyhow? A good ponder but in my humble opinion needs a little clarification. xoxo

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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

I have been oft cited for ambiguity. I hope not with you.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a beautiful piece of romance poetry dear víctor! i think your picture choice fits the bill well (pun unintended). two swans mate for life and however we are only partly monogamous.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

:) Thank you.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Your writing always intrigues me Victor. I have said this before and I will say it again, you are the thinking poet's poet. Sometimes cryptic in line but always interesting

dip

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Awe, Dipper.

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Material gain, oft confused for a more ethereal type of gain, to be sure. What is brain without lobe right? We need our mirror image(?) We are manipulating evolution, and the end result is...not exactly successful.

The last segment is my favorite, and very apt in our world as it is today. One pictures the astronauts in the ISS, returning to earth...

"Burn engines bright
and light our graves

for we were given
chance enough

for...
change. "

True enough. Well done,
Carol

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thank you, Carol. I still reread your review of my poem "Ookworld." :) Doug

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

This strikes me as a poem expressing regret. It is well-written.
'A way to change, but not the will' Truer words were never spoken (or written). That could be the moniker for a lot of diets, too!

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thank you.

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

"Our Adam, Our Eve" is an extremely well-written and thought-proving piece. It was a
pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thank you, my lady.

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

So oft confused,
material gain
or its use
A perfect slogan for the holiday season when most spend so much on unnedded gifts. I quit giving gifts many years ago and my love of Christmas has blossomed from the freedom of not having to do all that shopping etc we associate with the holiday. An excellent poem, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016

Thank you.