Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem very much.
Your words are so true.
This is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Cookie, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

reply by misscookie on 09-Dec-2016

You're very welcome.
Peace God be with you.
Cookie

Comment from Fridayauthor

Excellent

Very nice poem with a message worth remembering.

I read once if you pictured a cube the size of the base of the Washington Monument and a third as high, it would amount to the same volume as all the gold ever brought out of the earth since the beginning of time. Not very much, when you think about it. The gold in us is pretty minute too so we best take good care of it.

Very good posting.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

Excellent message in this inspirational poem Roy. I too believe that mankind has deposits of gold sewn in them. Too often, however, they don't recognize the real thing and keep looking in all the wrong places.

Beautiful analogies throughout.
Excellent aabb rhyme. I especially liked the fourth stanza

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Janet, for this outstanding review, and kind, graciou comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Very nice poem with an observant, encouraging, and true message. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Excellent choice of artwork. Thanks for writing and sharing!

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Kathleen, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

reply by kathleenspalding on 10-Dec-2016

You're welcome, and blessings to you too.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

All too often, we can be told by the world, what super people we are. Yet those looking at us do not see our core. They do not see what God sees. When we are the Lord's children, we may not be the shiniest being in to the world, but to God we are more precious than fine gold. Patricia.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Patricia, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from CEO2020

Excellent

Seem to be kickin out a lot of poems lately. Feeling the writing spirit? This one reads a little like the last one.

"And yet God sees the gold in man"

Is that suppose to be gold or good?

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

It's gold, as in the divine, revealing the image of God, thanks for the great review, blessings. Roy

Comment from jmcfadden1528

Good

1. I enjoyed the message in this poempoem, but I am not a Christian. I felt that the poem may be more accessible to readers had a more generalized god been used. However, I understand that if Christianity is your faith you may not want to change this.

2. I felt that the second line in the third paragraph needed some work. I thought it could have been written one of the following ways:
"No matter what may be mans' plan"
"With ease unlike men tilling(or searching) land"
"Total (or complete) evil forever ban"
"True value before life began"

Just some ideas...hope this helps

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Actually I don't know why there is a difference between seeing the value in man and being a Christian, has a difference, this philosophy is not a new concept, unless you think that man is an automaton, I was an (atheist once and still had the same opinion! Thanks for the review, and trying to help, Blessings, Roy

Comment from Grasshopper2

Excellent

Hi Roy,
I like your opening lines

We search in hills, in valleys old,
to make us rich -- elusive gold.

and your use of the word gold

And yet God sees the gold in man
beneath our flesh He seeks man's span;

as your thread to weave man's soul into and with God.

Two minor spags:
Here: beneath our flesh[,] He seeks man's span;
Edited: beneath our flesh, He seeks man's span;

Here: I never knew[,] nor e'er could see,
Edited: I never knew, nor e'er could see,

Your closing is strong and reiterates the message you penned.

all men have gold within them sewn.

Always with blessings,
Michael

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Michae! for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, nice rhyming and meter on this poem of faith, deep down I believe there is a nugget in us all once polished up in the light of the Lord. Nicely done Good message and meaning in this. Thanks for the share and have a great day

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much William, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

Happiness does not have dollar signs wrapped around it. It has loved wrapped around it. Some of the happiest people I have ever known were poor as church mice. This is an excellent piece of poetic writing with a very good message in its thoughts... John

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much John, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy