We sift in dirt...
Where's the gold?99 total reviews
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem reminisces a millieu of preoccupations respectively embarked upon by God and man; with the objective of extracting "gold".
The work highlights the occupational premise of God as located "beneath the flesh of man",while that of man entails a search in "the hills and valleys".
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the difference in quality between their respective "gold output". While the output of God is projected as refreshing and fulfilling, that of man is seen to be fraught with dirt and frustration.
Outstanding work! Bravo!
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The objective correlative of the poem reminisces a millieu of preoccupations respectively embarked upon by God and man; with the objective of extracting "gold".
The work highlights the occupational premise of God as located "beneath the flesh of man",while that of man entails a search in "the hills and valleys".
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the difference in quality between their respective "gold output". While the output of God is projected as refreshing and fulfilling, that of man is seen to be fraught with dirt and frustration.
Outstanding work! Bravo!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
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Thanks Lioyd for these fabulous comments and great review, blessings, Roy
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Remain Blessed!
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Thank you
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This is very beautiful. Great rhyme and rhythm, very easy to read with a great message. Gold in it's raw state is not very pretty, but refined by fire it becomes a thing of beauty. God will refine us if we allow Him. Merry Christmas.
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This is very beautiful. Great rhyme and rhythm, very easy to read with a great message. Gold in it's raw state is not very pretty, but refined by fire it becomes a thing of beauty. God will refine us if we allow Him. Merry Christmas.
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Thanks so much for the great review marvellous comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"We sift in dirt....." is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. As this talented poet so rightly points out. All men have indeed have gold sewn within them. This poet's work was a true pleasure to both read and review.
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"We sift in dirt....." is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. As this talented poet so rightly points out. All men have indeed have gold sewn within them. This poet's work was a true pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
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Thanks dearest Duchess, you are gem and a peach, I guess you could say you're sparkly, sweet and juicy, heh heh, blessings,
Comment from l.raven
HI Roy, so many think if your rich you can have it all...just not so...true friends in this would are a treasured gift...when you have money you always wonder if they care more about or your money...just love and love...I love your poem ...very well written...and a great picture my friend....love Linda xxoo
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HI Roy, so many think if your rich you can have it all...just not so...true friends in this would are a treasured gift...when you have money you always wonder if they care more about or your money...just love and love...I love your poem ...very well written...and a great picture my friend....love Linda xxoo
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Thanks so much Linda, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy
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so very welcome Roy...and blessings to you my friend...xxoo
Comment from valmay
Happiness and fulfillment are the valuable commodities that money can't buy. Well done Roy to remind us all of the personal values we should look to.
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Happiness and fulfillment are the valuable commodities that money can't buy. Well done Roy to remind us all of the personal values we should look to.
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Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from Douglas Paul
I liked this one, my friend. Great rhyme and meter so it is technically very well done. But what I really liked was your message - very insightful
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I liked this one, my friend. Great rhyme and meter so it is technically very well done. But what I really liked was your message - very insightful
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much Valmay, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from Yvon
Nice religious poem. We tend to look outward for our reward when it is truly inside
of us. there is much more than gold there in those souls. Good job.
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Nice religious poem. We tend to look outward for our reward when it is truly inside
of us. there is much more than gold there in those souls. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from simmonska
I Like the use of gold throughout and that the poem takes the reader on a journey from gold outside to the gold inside one's self and that it closes with each of us being the same in that regard. I feel that the poem would be fine w/o the use of old English, i.e., myst'ry's and e'er . Overall excellent creation-thank you for sharing.
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I Like the use of gold throughout and that the poem takes the reader on a journey from gold outside to the gold inside one's self and that it closes with each of us being the same in that regard. I feel that the poem would be fine w/o the use of old English, i.e., myst'ry's and e'er . Overall excellent creation-thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for the review and comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from krys123
Blessings to you in your is during the holidays, Roy;
-what a magnificent digging into the human soul is man on his physical desires tends to want the gold in his life yes with inside him is the gold of the soul tempered and yet to be polished until he follows the Lord's word and is caressed by His love.
-The duality of your writing between the gold that is physically obtained in the gold within man was in a few ways metaphorically expressed in your writing, "I never knew nor ev'r could see that gold was very deep and me."
-Throughout your writing utilize exceptional enjambment which made the reading understandable throughout the writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the reading.
-The great quote from Jim Carrey was and is a magnificent beginning to your poem and very supportive and relative to the conceptual theme throughout your writing.
-"All men have gold within them sewn." And, yet, man or us have reluctantly been able to understand the cash in on the beauty of that radiance within our soul. And those that have have found it to the word in the love of the Lord.
-Thanks for a very pleasurable reading, Roy, and take care and have a good one when and where you can.
Alex
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Blessings to you in your is during the holidays, Roy;
-what a magnificent digging into the human soul is man on his physical desires tends to want the gold in his life yes with inside him is the gold of the soul tempered and yet to be polished until he follows the Lord's word and is caressed by His love.
-The duality of your writing between the gold that is physically obtained in the gold within man was in a few ways metaphorically expressed in your writing, "I never knew nor ev'r could see that gold was very deep and me."
-Throughout your writing utilize exceptional enjambment which made the reading understandable throughout the writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the reading.
-The great quote from Jim Carrey was and is a magnificent beginning to your poem and very supportive and relative to the conceptual theme throughout your writing.
-"All men have gold within them sewn." And, yet, man or us have reluctantly been able to understand the cash in on the beauty of that radiance within our soul. And those that have have found it to the word in the love of the Lord.
-Thanks for a very pleasurable reading, Roy, and take care and have a good one when and where you can.
Alex
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
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Thanks for these most thorough, gracious review and intuitive comments dear friend, Alex, blessings,
Comment from mvbrooks
Very positive message. The strong, consistent rhyme gives the poem a gentle flow. The comparison of earth/gold and God finding gold in people is effective.
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Very positive message. The strong, consistent rhyme gives the poem a gentle flow. The comparison of earth/gold and God finding gold in people is effective.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy
