Comment from Writeling

Excellent

Welcome back. I shall look for more of your work. This poem has a clever twist... and I particularly like: 'traded in for a fiddle of cherry.'

With best wishes, Writeling

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thank you, Writeling, for readling and reviewing my poem. I appreciate the welcome back!

Luna

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The lost days of innocence. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Guided by today, live for tomorrow.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thanks, charlie, for the kind read of my work and the gracious review.

Luna

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This shows a new addtion to the tooth fairy myth, a flying dog. It seems if the fairy rides on the dog that the fairy wouldn't get tired for the hard work in the summer.
Are you saying kids lose teeth more often in the summer because they lose them in falls as well as naturally.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Hi, and thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. I guess there are more teeth lost in the summertime because school's out and kids play all day long on playgrounds with asphalt and the playground equipment isn't all that safe.

Luna

reply by dragonpoet on 12-Dec-2016

You're welcome.

You may be right about it. But in the winter their can snowballs that speed the process or sledding mishaps.

Joan

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

guess anything can happen any time!

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Luna

You have written a brilliant rondeau, with a lovely story about the tooth fairy. It does appear to be a difficult format, but no problem to you. I must give it a try.

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Mary, thank you for your kind review. I look forward to reading your Rondeau.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

A fine tooth fairy poem which held me spellbound. You capture the childlike wonder and enchantment over tooth faeries. Your poem is well rhymed and imagined. I can imagine this poem shared with young children or illustrated in a book.

Thank you for sharing your imaginative, well-crafted poem.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Sis Cat,

I appreciate you reading this poem, and am smiling due to your kind words! Please feel free to browse my portfolio anytime.

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Excellent

My friend Luna what a cute write you have going here
The little girl is cute.Boy I remember those days
witha tooth under my pillow the tuth fairy actually forgot about me once

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2016

Thank you abby,

The tooth fairy forgot you once! Oh geez I bet that went over like a wet balloon the next day.

I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done, I like this rondeau, a reasonably complex for of poem, that is difficult to navigate, but you've done it well, with a confidence and with alacrity. I like the slightly cryptic subject which opens a nest of imagery to whet the readers literary appetite. So well done, good one. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

Cute and well written about the tooth fairy. I am not quite sure of the entire meaning, but it seems well written and is enjoyable reading. Evi

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Nice Rondeau Luna. Nice recall of your little one losing her tooth. I like the flow and the rhyme scheme in this write Luna and the repetition of Tonight, young girl's spellbound. Well done

dip

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

Comment from amada

Excellent

I like this story told in Rondeau; it shows lots of imagination and lots of patience as well. My fave line: "s she picked up the tooth ~ looked far around ~
traded in for a fiddle of cherry."

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2016