Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Death is not the end of life, but a new beginning. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks Charlie, once again for the excellent review, blessings, Roy

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

A wonderful uplifting verse roy...through all the trials and tribulations your faith proves stron and it is so aptly expressed here.
Perfectly rhymed as always and a pleasure to read
Cheers P

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Joan for a lovely review and great comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from DDLacy

Excellent

Such a beautiful poem! You know faith comes from within when we know that there is no problem, worry or situation too great for God. When we believe that there is no power greater and He! When every knew should bow before Him because He is! Your poem brought that out of me as I was touched by the wording! It's a very good indite! I loved it!
Godsped!

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

When men are young and enjoy the bloom of youth, they often speak as unlearned fools. AS life begins to teach them just how vulnerable they truly are, they begin to temper their bravado with the real understanding that life is but a short exhalation of breath, a mere blink of the eye and then it is gone. In that dark hour when man comes face to face with his mortality, he begins to wonder and to hope. Is God real?, Is there any hope for me? What of this afterlife I heard about? Will there be a resurrection of the dead? All good questions. What fool atheists are, what hopes sustain them?

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks again for these thoughtful observations and an great review, blessings, Roy

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Roy,

You've chosen some of my favorite scriptures to highlight in your
author notes. Given those notes, this seems like a dark poem. It
has depth and the lines depict the struggles along life's path very well.
I appreciate your message. There were times I found some lines stretching
to rhyme with added words, but a very enjoyable read.

Linda

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

I'm wondering what you mean by forced Linda? I thought that someone has to bend the word to fit uncomfortably with the theme, and in none of them did I do that. And only occasionally do I I receive that comment, and I'm just as mystified with those as I am with this one! But thanks for the observation and the comments, blessings, Roy

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

I guess I meant a couple of lines seemed too long to make it work...

"How can we know when souls will glean
from shadowed wraiths *not what faith's seen."

Just an observation. You are right on your comment and I will adjust mine.

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Dear Linda, they were all the same, iambic tetrameter, thanks for getting back, Roy

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

Yes, surely did not mean to offend.
I'll steer clear of generalized comments.

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

I don't understand the meaning of that line, whether iambic tetrameter or not. That's just me and my opinion and I've found that my opinion matters little in life;)

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

No, make them by all means means, I.was a little surprised is all, no offence, it's me that's silly, blessings, Roy

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

It's my eyes too...I thought I read "screams of blood" Too many hours driving in the car.
I'm glad you are not offended.

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Heh heh I like that Linda, I have trouble too...reviewing when tired, I have trouble concentrating, mornings are the best. I've been at this too long, I'll ease off next year, I was being silly, it's not you...me being touchy, blessings, Roy

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

;)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is an exceptional entry for this particular contest dear roy! i think you have a real shot and i would smack you a sixer if i had any left.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks again dear Rebekka, for this great review, blessings, Roy

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks again dear Rebekka, for this great review, blessings, Roy

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

"but somewhere deep I feel God's kiss" is a wonderful line that brings the reader into a positive feeling full of hope. This is an excellent faith based poem that creates a journey from darkness into God's light.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is an excellent, Bible-based poem on faith. Yes, "When death stalks life," people seek answers and comfort that there is someone and something beyond the wall of life separating death. "Salvation's bliss" is found in God. Your poem is strongly rhymed and has dark imagery of "vexation." It also delivers a strong message of faith.

Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Cat, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Cat, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your faith poem with rhymed couplets in quatrains. Your many metaphors are very effective, including "drum/trench/pawns/race/quill" along with your use of personification. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Joan, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thanks so much Joan, for this excellent review, and super comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Excellent

a picture that says a thousand words. you really
nailed this poem I so wish I had a six for you it's very
worthy of and deserves it but I'm out of them maybe another day
will bring another six from me

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks again for this fabulous review Abby, blessings, Roy