rainwater
3-5-3 water contest entry46 total reviews
Comment from Nika2016
Fantastic photo of native people celebrating rain. Are they in California?....
The Chumash rain danced before I left. They were hired by Tri-City Water Coalition...
Interesting little poem...
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Fantastic photo of native people celebrating rain. Are they in California?....
The Chumash rain danced before I left. They were hired by Tri-City Water Coalition...
Interesting little poem...
Comment Written 30-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you Nika for the awesome review. I apologize for the tardy review, I have not been on site for some time now.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Hi, mystery author,
You did a great job with your 3-5-3 water contest entry. Your syllables are correct. The lines flow nicely. The blackground almost makes it a bit scary--the natives look like they are going to war. But they are hoping for rain.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Hi, mystery author,
You did a great job with your 3-5-3 water contest entry. Your syllables are correct. The lines flow nicely. The blackground almost makes it a bit scary--the natives look like they are going to war. But they are hoping for rain.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you Jan for the awesome review my friend. Sorry about the tardy response. I have not been on in some time now!
Life always tends to hold me back.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from Ella25
There are so many ways of poetry writing. The one you share is interesting and I am trying to understand how it works. Do the natives dance for the rain to stop or in thankfulness that came? Well done. Ella
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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There are so many ways of poetry writing. The one you share is interesting and I am trying to understand how it works. Do the natives dance for the rain to stop or in thankfulness that came? Well done. Ella
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you Ella for the awesome review! They are dancing for it's presence I would imagine. Sorry about the tardy response, life tends to hold me back sometimes.
God bless!
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve and no worries. Have a great weekend. Blessings, Ella
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
They need rain bad in some parts around the world. They would do more than dance if they were to see rain, especially with all the fires. The rain would help so much with those as well. Great job
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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They need rain bad in some parts around the world. They would do more than dance if they were to see rain, especially with all the fires. The rain would help so much with those as well. Great job
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Indeed! Thank you for the awesome review my friend. Sorry about the tardy response, life has held me back a bit.
God bless!
Steve
Comment from MissMerri
Is it safe to assume the natives are dancing out of gratitude for the rain? They don't look very happy, but they do look wet. This is a perfect response to the water prompt, and nicely presented. I hope it does well. This, in my opinion, is very challenging to do. But short poems are always difficult for me. Good luck in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Is it safe to assume the natives are dancing out of gratitude for the rain? They don't look very happy, but they do look wet. This is a perfect response to the water prompt, and nicely presented. I hope it does well. This, in my opinion, is very challenging to do. But short poems are always difficult for me. Good luck in the contest. MM
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you MissMerri! They are difficult but I love a good challenge.
God bless!
Comment from sanejane
I find a lot of hiaku-type poetry on FS. Most of it is good, some of it isn't particularly good, and just occasionally, one comes up that is excellent. This one is in the third category. The image is breathtaking, you've presented it well, with the aqua typeface on a black background, and the five words tell a story so much larger than 11 syllables could be expected to contain.
Beautifully executed. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I find a lot of hiaku-type poetry on FS. Most of it is good, some of it isn't particularly good, and just occasionally, one comes up that is excellent. This one is in the third category. The image is breathtaking, you've presented it well, with the aqua typeface on a black background, and the five words tell a story so much larger than 11 syllables could be expected to contain.
Beautifully executed. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you sanejane for the awesome review! I love word economy and the challenges they present.
God bless!
Comment from robyn corum
I wonder if they also danced BEFORE the rain to get it to appear? *smile* This is an interesting poem. It seems to follow the requirements of the contest and all syllable counts are correct. Good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I wonder if they also danced BEFORE the rain to get it to appear? *smile* This is an interesting poem. It seems to follow the requirements of the contest and all syllable counts are correct. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I would imagine they do lol. Thank you Robyn for the awesome review!
God bless!
Comment from Fridayauthor
This little poem reminds us that many things we take for granted have far greater meaning for others. A simple thing like rain can mean the difference between life and death for some people.
Wonderful image to accompany this fine posting.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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This little poem reminds us that many things we take for granted have far greater meaning for others. A simple thing like rain can mean the difference between life and death for some people.
Wonderful image to accompany this fine posting.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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True statement Fridayauthor. Thank you for the awesome review.
God bless!
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice meshing of words and artwork. Rains can cause some to dance and others to cry depending on the situation.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Nice meshing of words and artwork. Rains can cause some to dance and others to cry depending on the situation.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you dragonpoet for the awesome review and best wishes.
God bless!
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My pleasure. Same to you.
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Comment from WriteSins!
Great work! This poem really shows how amazing water is, how much growth and life it brings, especially to people in developing places. Excellent job and best of luck regarding the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Great work! This poem really shows how amazing water is, how much growth and life it brings, especially to people in developing places. Excellent job and best of luck regarding the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you WriteSins for the awesome review and best wishes my friend.
God bless!
