My Stalker: Part 2
The Big Bad Wolf strikes again in San Francisco.39 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
Black Box theater...we have one of those in the small town I live in in pa...Good story...interesting...well told...it held my attention...Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Black Box theater...we have one of those in the small town I live in in pa...Good story...interesting...well told...it held my attention...Good luck!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Thank you, cupa tea, for your generous review and for wishing me luck. Many cities and towns have black box theaters.
Comment from dweigt
Wow, very impressive! This is excellent, almost flawless.
There were two points that felt confusing as I read them, and might benefit from rewording:
I can hear in the pause over the phone his mind wonder -- would "in the pause over the phone I hear his mind wonder" be clearer?
positioned himself nearby in an aisle seat along the route he knew I would take from the theater -- This sounds as though you have left the theater, but I think you had left the stage and were making your way back to your seat. Do you mean "along the route he knew I would take through the theater"?
Enjoyed it! Keep Writing!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2016
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Wow, very impressive! This is excellent, almost flawless.
There were two points that felt confusing as I read them, and might benefit from rewording:
I can hear in the pause over the phone his mind wonder -- would "in the pause over the phone I hear his mind wonder" be clearer?
positioned himself nearby in an aisle seat along the route he knew I would take from the theater -- This sounds as though you have left the theater, but I think you had left the stage and were making your way back to your seat. Do you mean "along the route he knew I would take through the theater"?
Enjoyed it! Keep Writing!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2016
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Thank you, dweigt, for giving my chapter its last six star review before the certificate expired. I also appreciate your tips for clarity which I have incorporated. I am glad that you found my story "impressive." Thanks again and I will keep writing.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Creepy guy returns again. I liked the way you reasoned this guy out with your inner dialogue, dissecting why and how he was stalking you. Waiting for just that right moment to pounce. Good work! I'll be looking for the next one.
My biggest fan, Rob attends as many of my events as he can.--I think you need offsetting commas around Rob.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Creepy guy returns again. I liked the way you reasoned this guy out with your inner dialogue, dissecting why and how he was stalking you. Waiting for just that right moment to pounce. Good work! I'll be looking for the next one.
My biggest fan, Rob attends as many of my events as he can.--I think you need offsetting commas around Rob.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 30-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Yes, Russell, when I think back upon the stalking incidents, I am amazed at the man's stealth and craft. Nothing was random with him. He took advantage of every opportunity to get close to me and pounce. Thank you for your review and comma suggestion.
Comment from Margaret Ford
So you based this on a real life stalker. Any man or woman who has ever been aggressively approached in an inappropriate manner by another adult can empathize with you. Even telephone harassment can be frightening. It's very much to your credit that you were able to continue your work, and your relationship, while being under the pressure of a stalker. And I think it's such a good idea to write about this subject; It's healthy, and helps you maintain control of your life. Good for you. Your story held my attention, so I'll definitely keep an eye out for Part 3. Margaret
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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So you based this on a real life stalker. Any man or woman who has ever been aggressively approached in an inappropriate manner by another adult can empathize with you. Even telephone harassment can be frightening. It's very much to your credit that you were able to continue your work, and your relationship, while being under the pressure of a stalker. And I think it's such a good idea to write about this subject; It's healthy, and helps you maintain control of your life. Good for you. Your story held my attention, so I'll definitely keep an eye out for Part 3. Margaret
Comment Written 30-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Yes, Margaret, I am so, so grateful that I wrote the incidents down in my diary in detail. Many people chose to forget about such incidents so they could move on with their life, but by me sharing my story, men and women have come forward with their own stalking stories. I used to think that I was alone and no one could understand what I have went through. Now I know I m not alone. Thank you for your encouraging review and support.
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You're definitely not alone, my friend. I've been planning to write a memoir discussing the incidents of sexual harassment in my life. Every woman and every man that I've been close to has told me about such incidents. We're none of us alone. M.
Comment from Ella25
I enjoyed reading the story. What a horrible experience to go through things like that. Your words described it so well. I am looking forward to reading more. Regards, Ella
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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I enjoyed reading the story. What a horrible experience to go through things like that. Your words described it so well. I am looking forward to reading more. Regards, Ella
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Ella, for your review of my story about "a horrible experience." I look forward to you reading more.
Comment from Dustybones
Oh..a bathroom stalker, how creepy is that. Good story. I'm just reading it quickly, and missed the first part. Your skills are very good. I had no trouble keeping up, and found it to be full of suspense.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Oh..a bathroom stalker, how creepy is that. Good story. I'm just reading it quickly, and missed the first part. Your skills are very good. I had no trouble keeping up, and found it to be full of suspense.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Yes, Dustybones, many people have noted the suspense in my bathroom stalker story. Thank you for your review.
Comment from FxstsLisa
Love it! I like how you portray the different emotions the stalker and yourself have. His fear that you won't fall under his spell of what he pictures (& plans) the outcome to be. In the meantime, you are fearful he might ruin your relationship with your partner or cause harm to either of you. I also can feel the excitement in the story of having someone obsessed with you - it can be mysterious, "fun" and scary at the same time!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Love it! I like how you portray the different emotions the stalker and yourself have. His fear that you won't fall under his spell of what he pictures (& plans) the outcome to be. In the meantime, you are fearful he might ruin your relationship with your partner or cause harm to either of you. I also can feel the excitement in the story of having someone obsessed with you - it can be mysterious, "fun" and scary at the same time!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Yes, I was fortunate to have kept a diary of the incidents. This allowed me to reconstruct not only my emotions at the time but also the stalker's. Combined, my stalker and I only exchanged seventeen words, so our actions tell the story. Thank you for your generous, six star review of this "fun" but scary story.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello.
I hope you are well. Good story chapter. I liked the description of the scene in the bathroom, and I liked the way the character got away.
One thing confused me. "Are you dateable?" was said twice, and I thought that the stalker was stalking him again.
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Hello.
I hope you are well. Good story chapter. I liked the description of the scene in the bathroom, and I liked the way the character got away.
One thing confused me. "Are you dateable?" was said twice, and I thought that the stalker was stalking him again.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Rasmine, for your review. I will check that dateable line to see if it need tweaking. I am well. Thank you for asking.
Comment from sanejane
As you relate the story, your fear of this predator is almost tangible, and no wonder; he exposes himself and grabs hold of you in the men's room, and although you make it clear you're not interested, AND he knows you are with someone, he boldly asks if you are dateable.
It must be hard Having to be on your guard all the time since your affair, seven years ago, made your partner feel insecure. I hope you recover his trust soon.
Thank you for sharing this well-written account of a nerve-wracking situation.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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As you relate the story, your fear of this predator is almost tangible, and no wonder; he exposes himself and grabs hold of you in the men's room, and although you make it clear you're not interested, AND he knows you are with someone, he boldly asks if you are dateable.
It must be hard Having to be on your guard all the time since your affair, seven years ago, made your partner feel insecure. I hope you recover his trust soon.
Thank you for sharing this well-written account of a nerve-wracking situation.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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Thank you, sanejane, for your review of my nerve-wracking situation. Yes, I have to be on my guard all of the time since the affair. I cannot slip up. Given that I will continue to perform stories, I must remain vigilant against fans who proposition me for sex. Trust is a work in progress with my partner. I reaffirm it when I come home from my events. Thank you for your review.
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It's my pleasure. I saw your photo, and understand why you get propositioned on a regular basis...
It must be difficult for you.
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Yes, it is very hard. I do not think I am attractive. Other people feel differently. Thank you for your concern.
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Look in the mirror! :)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
You've done an admirable job recapping the last chapter, then following the fear of being stalked as well as the repulsion toward your stalker. It must be an absolutely frightening experience, even when you are surrounded by other people. This line...
"My heart raced and I recoiled in revulsion"...great imagery here with the emotion of being hunted. The last paragraph perfectly describes a predator, this one simply has two legs. Remarkable story, exceptional writing.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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You've done an admirable job recapping the last chapter, then following the fear of being stalked as well as the repulsion toward your stalker. It must be an absolutely frightening experience, even when you are surrounded by other people. This line...
"My heart raced and I recoiled in revulsion"...great imagery here with the emotion of being hunted. The last paragraph perfectly describes a predator, this one simply has two legs. Remarkable story, exceptional writing.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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Thank you, Mary, for your generous, six star review. I pulled out all of the stops for this chapter to craft a story that was both frightening and beautiful. Thank you for your review.
