Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Exceptional

"A New Star" is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. Each line is woven with the golden threads of truth.This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank-you so much for taking the time to read, review, and fellowship. I really appreciate your comments, and I look forward to future collaboration. Happy Holidays, and a bright New Year Darren ~.

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 10-Dec-2016

Darren, you're more than welcome. Have a happy, holy and healthy Christmas and New Year.

Best wishes, the Duchess

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 10-Dec-2016

Roy, I'm not sure about the gem and peach.
Sparkly, juicy and sweet sounds fine.

Blessings, the Duchess

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

A lovely drawing that complements your lovely poem Darren. A powerful Christmas message in a format this is easily understood.
Excellent abcb rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Very nicely done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank-you so much for taking the time to read, review, and fellowship. I really appreciate your comments, and I look forward to future collaboration. Happy Holidays, and a bright New Year Darren ~.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is not only a great Christmas poem but it carries a Bible-based message of generousity and good spirit to neighbors and strangers. Your poem is well-rhymed and your message resonates. Thank you for sharing your poem.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank-you so much for taking the time to read, review, and fellowship. I really appreciate your comments, and I look forward to future collaboration. Happy Holidays, and a bright New Year Darren ~.

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

I enjoyed this Christmas poem here, and appreciate the sentiment "treat other as you would yourself". Many of us are not good at that, and it's a worthy goal.

I noticed your meter changes here and there, for example in the second line of stanza 1: what if you said "and every Christmas past" which means the same thing, but maintains iambic meter.

Thank you for writing about the true spirit of this holiday, which is important to remember!
Carol

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank-you so much for taking the time to read, review, and fellowship. I really appreciate your comments, and I look forward to future collaboration. Happy Holidays, and a bright New Year Darren ~. Thank -you so much for the advice, I really appreciate it. I will take it into consideration. Thanks!

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thanks so much for the excellent advice, you really helped the meter and flow. I am grateful, Darren < : - D ~

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Darren,

This is a very beautiful and powerful Christmas poem you have composed.
How nice of you to give credit to those reviewers for their help. Gee, you
must have at least 7 different scriptures that you have referred to or
paraphrased in this poem.

I enjoyed your alliteration, imagery and most of all message and
invitation to all. Very well done, my friend,

Linda

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, Linda. I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren

reply by AnnaLinda on 09-Dec-2016

Sounds wonderful!

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

A very nice poetic effort that is very appropriate at this holiday season. For all those who observe this season I am quite sure that they find no fault here. Good rhymes.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, nomi338. I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

To accept the best reward
that was never earned
offered from our faithful Lord,
a lesson to be learned ... I really liked the innovative rhyming pairing of "Lord" and "reward" here, Darren. Very well done...


So, if you are reading,
preparing for your rest
know that we are needing
to all be truly blessed... Amen to that, my friend...

Treat others as you would yourself
and try not to grumble
for whosoever exalts himself
shall in the end, be humbled ... And, I echo the same sentiments I expressed above here as well...

Wonderfully well composed, Darren. I hope a virtual "six" will suffice for now...
Merry Christmas to you & yours.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, Dean. I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren ps I am not in it for the stars, I would sincerely love to lead others to salvation ~

reply by Dean Kuch on 09-Dec-2016

Theta's an admirable goal, Darren, and I don't doubt your sincerity at all, my friend.
God bless,
~Dean

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Badger, very well done. Yes, we can enjoy all year when we think
of our Savior and what He has done for us. Good alliteration in ...
trifles, treats, and treasures ...and vibrant vision.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, heyjude. You never let me down . . . I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren

reply by heyjude on 09-Dec-2016

Thankful to have friends like you on this site, Darren. Judy

reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Likewise < : - D ~

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Lovely drawing that complements your poem perfectly. It is about how we nowadays celebrate Christmas, and also about the birth of Jesus. Great that you got many helpers. A good message you give in rhyme.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, robina. I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren

Comment from Ella25

Excellent

Christmas time is a precious time where a babe is born in a poor stable. Time to reflect what truly Christmas is about. You put it nicely in your poem to make the readers aware. Good luck in the contest. Blessings, Ella

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016

Thank you very much, Ella25. I am inspired by my growing connection to The Holy Spirit, which helps me with the words. I am so thankful that I have a platform such as this to share, I will lead others to righteousness, through Him, lest I boast. Thanks, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Let us continue in fellowship this Holiday season, and throughout the wonderfully bright New Year ~ Darren