Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Fingers Connected to the Wind "a place to gather my poetic forms
27 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
Luna this is a beautifully written poem You are still a wonderful poet. I read your profile and Feel really special that I get to read your writes Your dedication to your son is something only a mother can appreciate He must have been a wonderful guy with a sad affliction. I have lost a few friends through drugs the silent killer and outwardly they had never shown the torture in their minds.
Once again thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. You metaphors are beautiful
merry Xmas
dip
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Luna this is a beautifully written poem You are still a wonderful poet. I read your profile and Feel really special that I get to read your writes Your dedication to your son is something only a mother can appreciate He must have been a wonderful guy with a sad affliction. I have lost a few friends through drugs the silent killer and outwardly they had never shown the torture in their minds.
Once again thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. You metaphors are beautiful
merry Xmas
dip
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Aww dip, that's lovely. I feel lucky that you read my work as well. Thank you so very much for your u understanding words about my son mickey.
You're becoming a good friend. ❤️ ❤️
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Many times as I drive down the highway in the distance I see clothes hanging on a line drying in the wind. Maybe what I've actually seen are fingers in the wind.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Many times as I drive down the highway in the distance I see clothes hanging on a line drying in the wind. Maybe what I've actually seen are fingers in the wind.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Now you're talking, thomas!
If you lived, as I do, in the heart of Amish country, you likely see numerous fingers in the wind. Thank you for your kind words.
Jeni
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Yes come Fairies, take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame! Bravo my friend, I love the perfect colorful words your poetic descriptions bring to mind. A creative piece - thanks for sharing.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Yes come Fairies, take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame! Bravo my friend, I love the perfect colorful words your poetic descriptions bring to mind. A creative piece - thanks for sharing.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Dear Bill, I love the fairies for allowing me a brief respite from this dull and sometimes ugly world. Thanks, I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem.
Blessed be
Comment from frierajac
Although I can feature the fingers connected to the wind as being the hangers upon which fairies' clothes are hung. I have an issue there with sutures. I don't get the meaning, only the blatant rhyme, yet the saints who sinned is good as well.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Although I can feature the fingers connected to the wind as being the hangers upon which fairies' clothes are hung. I have an issue there with sutures. I don't get the meaning, only the blatant rhyme, yet the saints who sinned is good as well.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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I thank you for your honest review. Please continue to be honest with me for that's the best kind of review. I'll take a look at the part and see if there's anything I can do with it to improve.
On the whole, I'm glad that you enjoyed most parts of my poem.
Blessed be
Comment from KjSilver
I liked this. The visual cast a deep shadow through my past. Marking the simple as its navigator. I've thought many things connected to the wind, but fingers, now, stands up near the top.
Beautifully thought and written.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I liked this. The visual cast a deep shadow through my past. Marking the simple as its navigator. I've thought many things connected to the wind, but fingers, now, stands up near the top.
Beautifully thought and written.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your kind and interesting review. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me.
Comment from WriteSins!
There's something about this poem that really warms my heart, yet I'm not sure what it is. It could be the lovely, peaceful pace of the poem, or maybe just the whimsy of it. Either way, a very nice poem. The presence of "fingers connected to the wind" is probably my favorite part. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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There's something about this poem that really warms my heart, yet I'm not sure what it is. It could be the lovely, peaceful pace of the poem, or maybe just the whimsy of it. Either way, a very nice poem. The presence of "fingers connected to the wind" is probably my favorite part. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this poem, and I thank you for your good luck wishes.
Comment from Kingsland
I really liked your fingers connected to the wind phrase. Overall this piece is well-written and easy to read. It was a very enjoyable poem to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I really liked your fingers connected to the wind phrase. Overall this piece is well-written and easy to read. It was a very enjoyable poem to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi, John! I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem and I'm hoping to make it to your portfolio very soon.
Best,
Jennifer
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Luna's Back,
This is a lovely poem and although I am not familiar with the structure, I like how it hangs together. The only snag for me is the rhymed word in the third line of the first verse which is a bit off. Could you perhaps use: "The distance has narrowed and thinned..." Otherwise, it's all fine. All the best. R
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi Luna's Back,
This is a lovely poem and although I am not familiar with the structure, I like how it hangs together. The only snag for me is the rhymed word in the third line of the first verse which is a bit off. Could you perhaps use: "The distance has narrowed and thinned..." Otherwise, it's all fine. All the best. R
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm happy you enjoyed the poem and I thank you kindly for your suggestion. Please feel free to make them at any time.I hope to read and review some of your work before long.
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautiful kyrielle dear luna! I am anxious because it exceeds mine but am glad you found your muse.
Thank you for sharing! This should do well.
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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This is a beautiful kyrielle dear luna! I am anxious because it exceeds mine but am glad you found your muse.
Thank you for sharing! This should do well.
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Dear Rebekka, thank you once again for a fantastic six-star rating! I don't know, I'm sure that your poem is wonderful.
Good luck in the contest!
Blessed be
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle. The lines flow smoothly from the one to the other, the rhymes are used excellently. The repeating line is effective and strong. Great artwork to complements your poem.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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A very well-written Kyrielle. The lines flow smoothly from the one to the other, the rhymes are used excellently. The repeating line is effective and strong. Great artwork to complements your poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for the kind review. I'm happy that you liked the repeating line. Thank you for your continued interest in my work.
