Infidelity
Relentless through the ages....4 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Don, I think thou hast done a very clever job with this Kyrielle poem. Very good and you have worked in the repeat line very fittingly. What can I do but to shower thou with six stars and say happy thanksgiving. ~DD
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Don, I think thou hast done a very clever job with this Kyrielle poem. Very good and you have worked in the repeat line very fittingly. What can I do but to shower thou with six stars and say happy thanksgiving. ~DD
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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DD, I wrote a long, grateful reply hours ago, but obviously, somehow it didn't go out.
I thanked you profusely for your generous endorsement of my Infidelity, which I forgot to mention, finished in third place, one vote short of second. And, of course, I'm delighted by those precious six stars, especially that last one.
Even though this thank you is shorter than the one that got away, it's just as heartfelt. THANK YOU< DD!!!
Don
Comment from aryr
This was truly interesting to read, with the thee's and thou's I thought for a moment I had time warped bath to Shakespeare times. It was a rather ingenious touch to the poem. I enjoyed your notes since they provided information about the format, which you did a great job with. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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This was truly interesting to read, with the thee's and thou's I thought for a moment I had time warped bath to Shakespeare times. It was a rather ingenious touch to the poem. I enjoyed your notes since they provided information about the format, which you did a great job with. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Your compliments are much appreciated! I think this will be your first thank thee. Thank thee, Aryr!
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Thou are so very welcome, tis was enjoyable reading.
Comment from Writer51
Well done. It is written in an unusual verbiage, which is actually refreshing. That gives it somewhat of a different spin. The rhyme and the rhythm are both a constant so that the pace is even. Very good.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Well done. It is written in an unusual verbiage, which is actually refreshing. That gives it somewhat of a different spin. The rhyme and the rhythm are both a constant so that the pace is even. Very good.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your compliments, Writer51! (The verse is the way poets, and the hoy-paloy, used to long, long ago.)
Comment from rspoet
Sounds like thy name should be Narcissus
or perhaps Narcissius, whichever may fit thee better
Fair in beauty, but not in heart
not very fair at all
But this is a fair good kyrielle
in fact, a fair marvelous kyrielle
Six bedazzling stars
Best wishes in the contest
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Sounds like thy name should be Narcissus
or perhaps Narcissius, whichever may fit thee better
Fair in beauty, but not in heart
not very fair at all
But this is a fair good kyrielle
in fact, a fair marvelous kyrielle
Six bedazzling stars
Best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 20-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your compliments, RS, and of course, for all those valuable stars!
Yes, the lady could be Narcissus, and, as a matter of fact, I had attached a different FanArt illustration entitled "Narcissus and Echo." It depicts a cute-looking woman, with, apparently, her lovelorn lover. She didn"t look beguiling enough, but it was the most appropriate image I was able to find on FanArt (unfortunately, FS has begun rejecting all non-FanArt images I have uploaded, on the grounds that the sizes are wrong, but, of course, they're not). I was willing to compromise, because the verse would have been attributable to the young man in the illustration. With the present image, it is assumed that the narrator is an unseen lover, and the female is adequately alluring. Whew, I didn't think it would take that many words to explain! Thanks for sticking with it. (If you didn't, I'll never know, will I?. And, if you reply, "You're welcome," I will know...you know what.) ;-)
Don
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You are MOST welcome!
