Comment from heyjude

Exceptional

Maria, I think you did an excellent job with this. What a good story
for this Sudden flash Fiction contest. I just knew when you
mentioned the cake it must have been his favorite kind and your
character was going to poison him. Great job on this.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

I'm glad you liked it, Judy. Thanks so much for you kind review and for the six stars.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

You captured my attention from the start
. You truly surprise me with this one
Here I ready to hear her uncle answer her troubling question and it ended like this.
Thank you for sharing.
Question did he kill her mother?
Cookie

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

No, he didn't kill the mother. He was a child molester (which is horrible in itself) but not a killer.
Thanks for reading.

reply by misscookie on 17-Nov-2016

Oh my goodness! You're very welcome
Cookie

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Well, Sue is going to end up in prison herself after they conduct a toxicology report on the uncle. This is a fine, short piece of revenge fantasy. I have been reading Hanya Yanagihara' s child abuse novel "A Little Life" and people who had been abused and the friends and relatives of the abused have revenge fantasies such as this on the abuser.

A key paragraph you wrote is this one, "Life is so unfair. I'm only twenty-three and already broken. My uncle however will only have to spend five years in prison and will be a free man."

Well, she solved that problem.

Thank you for sharing your Sudden Flash Fiction. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

I'm not surprised they have those fantasies. Child abuse is one of the worst possible crimes ever.
Thanks for reading and for your review, Andre.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Maria

This is a very good entry into the sudden flash fiction contest. I was held with it from the beginning to the surprise end. You are a very good story teller. I am sure her revenge was sweet. I hope she was not found out.

Well done. Mary

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

I hope so too. She deserves to have some peace.
Thanks for reading, Mary.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Wow what great reading and such a surprising end. It showed that pay back was possible if one only thought about it. It is sad that the victim suffers for forever while the criminal rarely pays a just price. Great writing, thanks.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Aryr. This is such a sad topic. There are so many children who had to live with abuse...

reply by aryr on 17-Nov-2016

You are welcome, it is a sad topic and unfortunately a real topic which does go unnoticed a lot of the time.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Maria

= Oh, yeah, she made peace with the past in fine shape.
= What's a little cake amongst family.
= Very good entry for the contest. Good Luck.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Thanks for your fun review, Jax.

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Wow! I didn't see that last line coming. I think it is something many abused have thought of doing somehow. I don't know how many actually go through with it.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

I've been told they tend to fantasize about it and I'm not surprised...
Thanks for reading.

reply by MelB on 17-Nov-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A very well written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. The story flows and moves right along from beginning to end. Your choice of details and realistic characters brings the story to life as I read it.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks, Winnona.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Maria, this was an interesting story and your flash at the end was quite unexpected by this reader. Revenge is sweet they say, but in a carrot cake? Patricia

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Patricia. I love carrot cake so it was the first thing that came to mind.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story. An abuser gets away with his deeds for years. When he is caught he lives like a king in prison while the abused have a lifelong struggle to forget what was done to her..

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016

Thanks once again, Sandra.