Hora Haiku: A Gothic Tale of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "hora haiku (wily witch watches)"by Gypsy Blue Rose and Dean Kuch
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Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku has a chilling sense about it. The whispering exhaust from the witch, along with the gasp one would produce upon seeing a huge orb peering through the window, raise this piece to a state of paranoiac panic.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
This haiku has a chilling sense about it. The whispering exhaust from the witch, along with the gasp one would produce upon seeing a huge orb peering through the window, raise this piece to a state of paranoiac panic.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much for following along with our Gothic story told in hora haiku poetry, Bill.
Both Gypsy Blue Rose and I appreciate the fact that you are.
Take care, my friend, and thanks again for your feedback, as well as your time.
~Dean :}
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dean,
This is a great haiku for your book. I like the art & the font style. Good job on the alliteration, too.
Your story continues is a great way. Each 'chapter' adds more meaning & is a joy to read.
Good job. Looking forward to the next installment. Jan
Dean,
This is a great haiku for your book. I like the art & the font style. Good job on the alliteration, too.
Your story continues is a great way. Each 'chapter' adds more meaning & is a joy to read.
Good job. Looking forward to the next installment. Jan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2016
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Dean! That sound was really scary! LoL I love it!
Okay, you know how I feel about haiku and about horror haiku. This one is awesome. I love the white color scheme, it's so unlike you but made you made it work. Who knew? White? It works for you. I tell you, Dean, you have the Midas touch.
Well done!
Gypsy
Dean! That sound was really scary! LoL I love it!
Okay, you know how I feel about haiku and about horror haiku. This one is awesome. I love the white color scheme, it's so unlike you but made you made it work. Who knew? White? It works for you. I tell you, Dean, you have the Midas touch.
Well done!
Gypsy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2016
Comment from write hand blue
The haiku story continues. I can only imagine the problems in writing horror of a this consistent high quality. I haven't read it all as a single read yet.
I can picture that 'nefarious Naamah' and what an impact she would make with modern animation...
~Mel~
The haiku story continues. I can only imagine the problems in writing horror of a this consistent high quality. I haven't read it all as a single read yet.
I can picture that 'nefarious Naamah' and what an impact she would make with modern animation...
~Mel~
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
Comment from krys123
Hello dandy dia
-Chuckle!
-I really liked your use of alliteration and these were tough ones. Phew!
-I love the picture of the dragons I looking and peering through the window hole.
That was looking at me every time I need to do my magic I'd be underneath the bed or the table.
-Good use of the alliteration in your first, second and last lines. I guess you utilize all the alliteration for every word except for maybe two.
-Thank you for the authors note that healthy keeping together with the story.
-Also, thanks for sharing and posting and take care and have a good one wherever you can always find it.
Alex.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
Hello dandy dia
-Chuckle!
-I really liked your use of alliteration and these were tough ones. Phew!
-I love the picture of the dragons I looking and peering through the window hole.
That was looking at me every time I need to do my magic I'd be underneath the bed or the table.
-Good use of the alliteration in your first, second and last lines. I guess you utilize all the alliteration for every word except for maybe two.
-Thank you for the authors note that healthy keeping together with the story.
-Also, thanks for sharing and posting and take care and have a good one wherever you can always find it.
Alex.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Plenty of alliteration working well in this Horror Haiku Dean.
Love the eye peering through the key hole watching, waiting.
Story going well,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
Plenty of alliteration working well in this Horror Haiku Dean.
Love the eye peering through the key hole watching, waiting.
Story going well,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thanks for continuing to follow along, Pearl.
Ich bin sehr dankbar fur Ihre Kommentare.
~Dean
Comment from trimple
Hello there, Deano.
OO err!! That's very creepy.
Tis a menacing thought that we are 'watched' especially by something that breathes chill to the soul.
Nefarias Naamah. What a great name! Is the dragon behind the closed door, the witch in disguise?
Super stuff!
Excellent terse language
Iv'e been absent from the sight for quite some time now, and what do you do when I return? Scare the living daylights outa me!
I see that you and another accomplished writer here on on the site are in the process of compiling a Gothic horror haiku book. What a unique idea!
Good luck
kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
Hello there, Deano.
OO err!! That's very creepy.
Tis a menacing thought that we are 'watched' especially by something that breathes chill to the soul.
Nefarias Naamah. What a great name! Is the dragon behind the closed door, the witch in disguise?
Super stuff!
Excellent terse language
Iv'e been absent from the sight for quite some time now, and what do you do when I return? Scare the living daylights outa me!
I see that you and another accomplished writer here on on the site are in the process of compiling a Gothic horror haiku book. What a unique idea!
Good luck
kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thanks a bunch for reading and reviewing this, "T".
Warmest regards,
~Dean
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and the witch?
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Yes, the "dragon" is Naamah, the witch, and Mirela's mother.
It's also the kigo for the haiku ("dragons in haiku poetry pertain to events occurring during the spring).
Thanks again.
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Ah!
As I've been away, I had no idea about your characters. So I wasn t sure if the dragons eye peering through the door was the witch :)
cheers Dean.
Look forward to the next
tracey
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There are links to a brief synopsis and previous chaprets in my author's notes, Tracey.
It may help you catch up, and you don't have to review them.
They're there for people just like yourself who may have came in late to the story.
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I'll check em out :)
Cheers u, Deano
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, yes, yes. A fine narrative haiku. I enjoy what you and Gypsy are doing with these. I found them to be quite ingenious. Haiku is so compact that each one is like several scenes from a novel or movie. Hear you contrast the image of evil--"wily witch watches"--with innocence--"her child's somber slumber." You make effective use of alliteration in all three lines and move your story forward. I wonder what "nefarious Naamah" will cook up next.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
Yes, yes, yes. A fine narrative haiku. I enjoy what you and Gypsy are doing with these. I found them to be quite ingenious. Haiku is so compact that each one is like several scenes from a novel or movie. Hear you contrast the image of evil--"wily witch watches"--with innocence--"her child's somber slumber." You make effective use of alliteration in all three lines and move your story forward. I wonder what "nefarious Naamah" will cook up next.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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You will just have to stick around and see, Andre.
Thanks very much for your thoughtful response.
Both Gypsy Blue Rose and I certainly appreciate it,
Dean
Comment from Irish Rain
More sound! I'll have to remember that! I love the story-line here, I didn't realize Mirela's mother was an evil witch, and that's why Mirela is running. Awesome...and now she's watching her sleep!!! oOOOoooOO...great haiku!!!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
More sound! I'll have to remember that! I love the story-line here, I didn't realize Mirela's mother was an evil witch, and that's why Mirela is running. Awesome...and now she's watching her sleep!!! oOOOoooOO...great haiku!!!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Hi, Judy, and thanks so much for following along with the story.
Both Gypsy Blue Rose and I certainly appreciate it.
Take care.
~Dean
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter from the Deandom of Hora Haiku. Letting us read along until we pull the covered up over our heads and pray for morning to come. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter from the Deandom of Hora Haiku. Letting us read along until we pull the covered up over our heads and pray for morning to come. :-)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Thanks for following the story, Ric.
Much obliged.
~Dean