The bully
courage enforced8 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
this is beautifully and intelligently expressed - probably way over the bully's head!
your phrases -" make a carcass of my soul," "anguish inflicted to satiate" -eloquent and to the point. Very moving and powerful, ie: the first line. Wonderful!
Congratulations on your win!
And thank you very much for nominating me as a reviewer! I just saw that and am most honored.
pome lover
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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this is beautifully and intelligently expressed - probably way over the bully's head!
your phrases -" make a carcass of my soul," "anguish inflicted to satiate" -eloquent and to the point. Very moving and powerful, ie: the first line. Wonderful!
Congratulations on your win!
And thank you very much for nominating me as a reviewer! I just saw that and am most honored.
pome lover
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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Thank you for another kind review. You are too kind, best to you.
Comment from pharp
Mystery Poet,
Excellent job in the penning of this most insightful poem. This poem sends a very clear message about not allowing bullying to have control over you. I had to talk with my niece about this very thing last week. I had to go over some key factors of what a bully seeks and expects and reinforced to her she had the power in her to gain control over what a bully expects. She called and informed me that she didn't cry, she smiled and kept right on moving. I have read all entries and this is the best in my eyes. You have my vote. Outstanding job ........Blessings......Portia
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Mystery Poet,
Excellent job in the penning of this most insightful poem. This poem sends a very clear message about not allowing bullying to have control over you. I had to talk with my niece about this very thing last week. I had to go over some key factors of what a bully seeks and expects and reinforced to her she had the power in her to gain control over what a bully expects. She called and informed me that she didn't cry, she smiled and kept right on moving. I have read all entries and this is the best in my eyes. You have my vote. Outstanding job ........Blessings......Portia
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your vote and generous review. I always told my boys " A black eye heals but backing down from bullies will never end. There's always another one around the corner. If you refuse to be intimidated word gets around." Once again, thank you.
Comment from mvbrooks
The poem is very specific in describing how the bully tries to harm others. It is well summed up in the final lines:
just like the private damage
left to those you use for sport
You've captured what for many is a daily battle.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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The poem is very specific in describing how the bully tries to harm others. It is well summed up in the final lines:
just like the private damage
left to those you use for sport
You've captured what for many is a daily battle.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Most appreciated thank you.
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of your poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of this contest well. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of your poem for the reader.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. Most appreciated, have a great day
Comment from barleygirl
I love that this describes emotions not typically thought of, when one approaches such a writing prompt. I love the toughness & determination that's coming across, showing how this narrator has been strengthened by the bullying. I love the way it shows that the bully is the one to be pitied. One tiny observation, however . . . this feels more cerebral (altho intelligently stated) and not so much the palpable feeling of emotion one might expect from a poem on this topic.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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I love that this describes emotions not typically thought of, when one approaches such a writing prompt. I love the toughness & determination that's coming across, showing how this narrator has been strengthened by the bullying. I love the way it shows that the bully is the one to be pitied. One tiny observation, however . . . this feels more cerebral (altho intelligently stated) and not so much the palpable feeling of emotion one might expect from a poem on this topic.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your kind review. I really appreciate that you get the "cerebral" aspect of this piece. It is exactly as I want the bullied to be seen. To contain his emotions so as not to give the bully an advantage. To be above the fray so to speak, analytical and to the point. Defang the emotional monster that the bully is. Thanks again for your gracious review and remarks.
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Good point about why this is done without any big show of emotion. Thanks for the nomination.
Comment from TallySally
A powerful theme - bullying. The 'bait and switch' quality seen in the 'affections that you render' phrasing is insightful. Often missed, is that the bully often makes you like him before he turns on you. Also the knowledge that bully's often were born of bullying - insightful. Having been hurt spawns having to hurt.
Nice job.
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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A powerful theme - bullying. The 'bait and switch' quality seen in the 'affections that you render' phrasing is insightful. Often missed, is that the bully often makes you like him before he turns on you. Also the knowledge that bully's often were born of bullying - insightful. Having been hurt spawns having to hurt.
Nice job.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your generous review. I am humbled by your 6 star rating. I appreciate that you got my use of the word "affections" in a negative connotation. Also it is true most bullies are products of abuse as referenced. It is always satisfying when a piece is understood and appreciated. Thank you again and have a nice day.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Oooo, snap! Good for you! Excellent and eloquent poem makes great observations. Thanks for raising awareness!
A couple typos/questions,
....intimidation (to?) gain..
Don't know if affections fits....afflictions?
That's it. Great poem!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Oooo, snap! Good for you! Excellent and eloquent poem makes great observations. Thanks for raising awareness!
A couple typos/questions,
....intimidation (to?) gain..
Don't know if affections fits....afflictions?
That's it. Great poem!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Deliberately left (to?) out. As for affection vs affliction. My approach was from the emotional sense. I toyed with affliction but that to me rang more physical than emotional. Affection ,to me , is a more emotional term and although most often used in an endearing sense I used it with a negative connotation. That's the fun in writing for me , Thank you so much for your kind review and questions, have a good day.
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You're welcome, and thank you for taking the time to explain. I tend to question anything that I'm not sure about, since I always appreciate people doing that on my works.
Comment from Winslow
Dear poet,
Bullies are those who have been bullied and abused themselves. It is sad but the chain is not often broken. I think the poet here realizes that and expresses a smidgen of sympathy for those who abuse and bully others.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Dear poet,
Bullies are those who have been bullied and abused themselves. It is sad but the chain is not often broken. I think the poet here realizes that and expresses a smidgen of sympathy for those who abuse and bully others.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your kind remarks. It is important as you say to remember that most bullies were bullied. Also thank you in regards to the contest. Have a good day.
