To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Honorable"Poems by Michael
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Comment from MissMerri
Your words speak of an unhappy time, a hurt so deep, yet I felt there was hinted at a willingness to forgive even the ones who failed to stand upright. "numb torture keeps men from sleep" and "cold as have a nice life" speak volumes about the pain suffered, but the last verse, like an opposite response to the first, speaks of the dignity and resolve to be bigger, to stand upright, taller. I hope I'm not misreading this, because I saw so much that moved my heart and actually made tears come to my eyes. Your poetry has power, and inevitably moves a reader to feel the emotion you feel as you write. I don't know exactly how you do it, but I always feel more than I understand.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Your words speak of an unhappy time, a hurt so deep, yet I felt there was hinted at a willingness to forgive even the ones who failed to stand upright. "numb torture keeps men from sleep" and "cold as have a nice life" speak volumes about the pain suffered, but the last verse, like an opposite response to the first, speaks of the dignity and resolve to be bigger, to stand upright, taller. I hope I'm not misreading this, because I saw so much that moved my heart and actually made tears come to my eyes. Your poetry has power, and inevitably moves a reader to feel the emotion you feel as you write. I don't know exactly how you do it, but I always feel more than I understand.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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unhappy time...
well I guess that would depend on who's side ones found on
"good" or "evil". "evil" had had grand old time. Every God frustrated Baptist's dream came through...deceit.
forgiveness...
knowing me probably.
yes...just like God. if they were to turn from their wicked ways...and seek it.
no you read it exactly.
yes I always was taller than them....I just didn't realize how far the difference. thank you my Meadow....-smile-
wasn't expecting you here...-smile-....you are the exact opposite of those who inspired this...ah remembrance. Always my love. Michael
Comment from royowen
I think we all muse and ponder the immediate future, and it comes up with lots of anxiety and new Presidents ruling as non establishment and worrisome, and an unpredictable future. Beautifully written Michael, well done, blessings, Rpy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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I think we all muse and ponder the immediate future, and it comes up with lots of anxiety and new Presidents ruling as non establishment and worrisome, and an unpredictable future. Beautifully written Michael, well done, blessings, Rpy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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yes its natural...especially when the mirror keeps aging.
this is about some smaller people God introduced me too...I ate with them, prayed for them...gave to them. and jealous for my blessing finally come...hated me...and killed it. thank you Sir....love Michael
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Very sad Michael,
Comment from Ryn
Very cleaver artwork. Quite an effect. The poem was much to absorb. Not sure I get it, but I like it. Intelligent, well written. Good job.
Ryn
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Very cleaver artwork. Quite an effect. The poem was much to absorb. Not sure I get it, but I like it. Intelligent, well written. Good job.
Ryn
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Michael. So serious you are in this one. Are you feeling the results of all that's been happening in the states? I rather like the delivery in this one. I also like the bleakness with just a hint of more to the undertones of this piece. I had to stop and see what I felt about the write and for me that's a sign of something good. take care my friend. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Hi Michael. So serious you are in this one. Are you feeling the results of all that's been happening in the states? I rather like the delivery in this one. I also like the bleakness with just a hint of more to the undertones of this piece. I had to stop and see what I felt about the write and for me that's a sign of something good. take care my friend. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 16-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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yes I blew dry my hair yesterday...apparently I look like Trump wind blown.....they attacked me...freakin' animals. its Detroit out there I'm telling ya...careful is conservative....and the smart money in Switzerland. love Michael
Comment from Dustybones
Sad poem of a life torn down. Have a nice life isn't so nice to hear when asking for forgiveness. I get the idea that moving away from those feelings of being trapped is needed to survive fear.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Sad poem of a life torn down. Have a nice life isn't so nice to hear when asking for forgiveness. I get the idea that moving away from those feelings of being trapped is needed to survive fear.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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no...more like surrendering to the ignorant shame of a fool.
but its written just as hard to understand. appreciate ya man...love Michael
Comment from amada
Hi Michael, this is a very expressive and touching work. I am worried now. I hope and pray you are well now. I am puzzling over words in here, you were discharged of an hospital because of insomnia. I don't speculate no more. I hope you are fine, great, whole. And everything good.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Hi Michael, this is a very expressive and touching work. I am worried now. I hope and pray you are well now. I am puzzling over words in here, you were discharged of an hospital because of insomnia. I don't speculate no more. I hope you are fine, great, whole. And everything good.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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hey Happy....-smile-
ah dont worry...I'm fine....yea Doc says of i dont ever jump I wont die....I'm fine........lol...ahha...ah I'm just playing...ta...thanks for caring.
No I was talking to a friend last night...ah about something I dont. and ah saw some things I try not to look at. anyway its out now....almost all gone. ..-smile-...how have you been...you...you gorgeous woman....gimmie yer feet....I'm gonna tickle your feet....-smile-...love you...Michael
Comment from frierajac
I like the "offish, selfish " alliteration with the enjambment from one to the next line.
It seems that the idiom of romance gets harder each year. i wonder if there is
a kindness in"winters for forgiveness", it seems to say something other than Woe is me that is the sentiment in the song lyrics
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I like the "offish, selfish " alliteration with the enjambment from one to the next line.
It seems that the idiom of romance gets harder each year. i wonder if there is
a kindness in"winters for forgiveness", it seems to say something other than Woe is me that is the sentiment in the song lyrics
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding the tribute video and music by Leon. Your wordplay in the title by adding the word "discharge" to "Honorable" establishes the poignant mood for this poem. I hope you can avoid "insomnia". Sighs- Joan
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Thank you for adding the tribute video and music by Leon. Your wordplay in the title by adding the word "discharge" to "Honorable" establishes the poignant mood for this poem. I hope you can avoid "insomnia". Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
