Kiljoy
He sucks the joy from ev'ry room63 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
I am honestly in awe of the excellence displayed
in this month's ballot - to the point of pain, at having
to choose "a front runner".
Your poem totally swept me away with both its subject
matter and construction...held me completely captive
with its poetic finesse and compelling imagery.
Though written slightly as tongue in cheek (or maybe
it's just the artwork that invokes that thought) it clearly
speaks to the realities many a woman (or man I suppose)
has had to deal with. . .and the lengths one must go
through to to resolve unacceptable differences.
All I can say is - Nicely done!
. . .and best of wishes in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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I am honestly in awe of the excellence displayed
in this month's ballot - to the point of pain, at having
to choose "a front runner".
Your poem totally swept me away with both its subject
matter and construction...held me completely captive
with its poetic finesse and compelling imagery.
Though written slightly as tongue in cheek (or maybe
it's just the artwork that invokes that thought) it clearly
speaks to the realities many a woman (or man I suppose)
has had to deal with. . .and the lengths one must go
through to to resolve unacceptable differences.
All I can say is - Nicely done!
. . .and best of wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your very thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your comments and good wishes. However, I just checked and I'm in last place. Having said that, I have never been nominated for POM before. So, I am pleased with that.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi, Janet
What a deeply emotive poem! I'm so glad I found it this afternoon. Also, congratulations on being selected as a nominee for POM.
You've proven just how wonderfully expressive iambic meter can be when paired with finely tuned enjambment. The theme is well developed and presented. I particularly liked the positive resolution at the end.
The iambs are spot-on and well executed. Everything about the poem is exceptional and I wish you the best of luck in the voting booth.
Ray
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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Hi, Janet
What a deeply emotive poem! I'm so glad I found it this afternoon. Also, congratulations on being selected as a nominee for POM.
You've proven just how wonderfully expressive iambic meter can be when paired with finely tuned enjambment. The theme is well developed and presented. I particularly liked the positive resolution at the end.
The iambs are spot-on and well executed. Everything about the poem is exceptional and I wish you the best of luck in the voting booth.
Ray
Comment Written 03-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much Ray for you exceptional review and good wishes. I truly appreciate your encouragement and always treasure your comments.
I'm so happy you found my poem and read it today.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from strandregs
Your verse captured my heart and your story captured the verse.
could my description be any worse?
Joking
well ...
flooding and boggy alligators all are well established bridges to build.
as God is my witness.:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Your verse captured my heart and your story captured the verse.
could my description be any worse?
Joking
well ...
flooding and boggy alligators all are well established bridges to build.
as God is my witness.:-)) Z.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank you Z for your understanding review. Thank you too for the amazing six stars and for building bridges over the boggy alligators. :-))))
Blessings
Janet
Comment from winnona
Well written. Your artwork completed the piece well. Your words flowed easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Well written. Your artwork completed the piece well. Your words flowed easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Matthew Franklin
Well written poem. It is a very interesting comparison a bear to a man. I like the lines finding the flaws in life and sucking the joy from every room. Negative people bring negative energy wherever they go and it is immediately noticeable. Great Job!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Well written poem. It is a very interesting comparison a bear to a man. I like the lines finding the flaws in life and sucking the joy from every room. Negative people bring negative energy wherever they go and it is immediately noticeable. Great Job!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Matthew for your thoughtful and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mastery
Good for you, JMF (Name please) Sorry. This is an emotionally charged piece from beginning to end. the story it relates is a very familiar one. Proving once again that life is not easy. Good luck with this one. thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Good for you, JMF (Name please) Sorry. This is an emotionally charged piece from beginning to end. the story it relates is a very familiar one. Proving once again that life is not easy. Good luck with this one. thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Bob for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Kelly2
I liked this poem a lot, and the analogy to an angry bear. The bear in this artwork looks lonely and I bet your bear was too, when he found himself alone.
Your poem was beautiful, but I also liked your author notes at the end. Marriage really does take a lot of work, sometimes more than others have to bear. I just divorce my husbands. So I have a lot of respect for you in sticking it out and putting in the work to build your relationship back.
I wish you the best.
Kelly
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I liked this poem a lot, and the analogy to an angry bear. The bear in this artwork looks lonely and I bet your bear was too, when he found himself alone.
Your poem was beautiful, but I also liked your author notes at the end. Marriage really does take a lot of work, sometimes more than others have to bear. I just divorce my husbands. So I have a lot of respect for you in sticking it out and putting in the work to build your relationship back.
I wish you the best.
Kelly
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Kelly for your thoughtful and understanding review.
Actually, I divorced my first husband and I'm now the third wife to my husband. I think we got it wrong too many times. This marriage was worth fighting for.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Some times you do what you have to do to survive.
That includes calling a person out when they need to be in hopes that perhaps they will change their ways.
Whatever works - works.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Some times you do what you have to do to survive.
That includes calling a person out when they need to be in hopes that perhaps they will change their ways.
Whatever works - works.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Brett for your thoughtful and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from l.raven
HI Janet, you know when a man is worth fighting for...some times you have to take that extra step...showing them you have had enough...this is it...and with God's help...He'll help you find your way...very well written my friend...true love withstands...but it takes work...love your picture...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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HI Janet, you know when a man is worth fighting for...some times you have to take that extra step...showing them you have had enough...this is it...and with God's help...He'll help you find your way...very well written my friend...true love withstands...but it takes work...love your picture...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Linda for your thoughtful and understanding review. It does take work - everyday - but with God's help, we are working it out.
Blessings
Janet
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I am so glad you are...and you are so very welcome...xxoo Linda
Comment from Marykelly
There is a narrative in this lyric poem that describes a long term relationship in which bearish behavior threatened to jeopardize the relationship. Confrontation can have good results or bad results and in this case the added dimension of spirituality seems to have tipped the results into the good column. The rhyme and rhythm move the narrative along easily.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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There is a narrative in this lyric poem that describes a long term relationship in which bearish behavior threatened to jeopardize the relationship. Confrontation can have good results or bad results and in this case the added dimension of spirituality seems to have tipped the results into the good column. The rhyme and rhythm move the narrative along easily.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thank you Marykelly for your thoughtful and understanding review.
Blessings
Janet